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Due to circumstances beyond his control, and unbeknownst to him, a human ends up in Equestria's not so distant past and falls in with none other than Daring Do. Check out the adventures of Daring when teaming up with a snarky human!

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And, posting here out of collaboration nation inclination.

481389 Shit happens, get an umbrella and a rain coat.

481445 Don't you worry, I always have my rubbers!

I liked it, then again Daring Do was one of the break out characters of season 2 along with Discord, Queen Chrysalis, Iron Will, Roid Rage and the Flim Flam Brothers.

I think this fic is great for several reasons:
+ You capture the feel of an adventure story in the tone of the fic
+ This is a fair amount of action and character development.
+ Your Human in Equestria isn't a loser, man-gina or violent sociopath.
+ Daring Do is in character
+ Rare hetero shipping or shipping build up.

My only complaint is that you need cover art. It's just there to attract attention to the fic. Often writers will get frustrated that they aren't getting the view count or trackers they want, but when he comes down to people are attracted to visuals. You can have the fastest car on Earth but if it looks like a steaming pile, then few are gonna take a gamble on it.

So in closing I really think this story has potential. you keep to keep the tone like it is, throw in some romantic tension/romance, some fight scenes, exploration and some nice visuals are you've got a force to reckoned with, but as it sits right now this just a well made adventure story and I look forward to reading more.

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Peace Out.

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Sorry, just felt I should share. and yes, we are going to try and keep it as interesting as possible. I'm going over the thing with a fine-toothed comb in order to keep it intact with my canon. Hope we can keep it entertaining for you, it certainly entertains me!

Awesome story glad I found it.

481445 "umbrella and rain coat?" bitch please. i live in Seattle, and all i have is tea shirts and shorts. did you know that love and tolerance works on rain two? tolerate the rain, then learn to love it. that is the Seattlite way.

483019 hey, i like the violent sociopath HIEs.:pinkiecrazy: note: don't bother scanning me, i already know that i have <12.5% soul.

483019 Thank you for all the kind words! I happen to agree with you about the need for cover art, but since I am not an artist. I am going to try to get an artist I know to work on it. I will see what I can do! I certainly have plans for a lot of adventure, exploration, definitely some fight scenes, and maybe.. just maybe some budding romance... just cuz you asked so nicely!

484809 I am glad you enjoyed it enough to post and let me know!

485913 worry not my friend, there should be enough 'Violent sociopaths' in the future of the series. What kind of adventure would it be without them!

483538 I still blame you for all this! That's right! It's all his fault this story had to be told! And I wanna thank you for not only letting me, but also helping me make sure it's the best it can be!

Can't wait for the next chapter! Please please please make it as good as this one :pinkiehappy:

i am intrigued by this tracking like a missile:rainbowdetermined2:

The chapter is up captain.

511994 Shields up! Read alert! .... Oh, wrong story!

511995GREAT CHAPTA

I :heart: the DaringXHuman ships

This was great, I wasn't expecting a full bandit raid scene. I don't know what to say. My brain is broken. I loved everything from the campfire stories, the way characters need to rely on each other, the action and the friendshiping/shipping build up. It's over 10,000 words but it doesn't feel that long because the pacing in damn near perfect. I'm so glad I tracked this story.

Peace Out, thank you for writing this...I really don't know how much more I can give praise this.

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keep up the good work, looking forward to the next chapter.

Im going to b Daring and say that i Do like this Fic ! lol :rainbowwild::rainbowlaugh::pinkiehappy:

Love ur detailing, and I also like the DaringXHuman paring! Im not hinting, but, when this story is complete, i really hope that you will decide to make a sequel, or a few sequels or installments of this. Cause, to me personally, this fic is well deserving of it! :twilightsmile::pinkiesmile: Im lookin forward to the next chapter. :twilightsmile: And i am so tracking this. :twilightsmile:

Nice story, I'll be waiting patiently for the next chapter.

Although I am a little curious about the use of 'goddess'

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I like this fic. A different take on HiE.

A good start to a great story. Keep it up!

While reading I did notice an error in perspective: "bothered me was she couldn't place this strange ponies scent."

Is it in Daring's perspective or a third person?

533634 Thank you for pointing that out. Reason that was there at all is kinda silly. When I first started writing this, I was originally going to write Daring's parts from 3rd person narrative, but changed my mind and decided to write the whole thing from 1st person perspectives. I thought I had cleaned up all the 'she's and 'her's, but I missed that one! Thx again, fixed it, and if ya find anything else outta place lemme know! I will fix it up as soon as I can. :)

Loving this story, just one thing ive never understood. How the hell do ponys use swords? Even using their mouths they cant swing their necks fast enough / non awkwardly enough for it to be worth while.

this... is... unique... I guess... you earned points as fave and like

I think I'll keep my eye on this story.

Okay definitely not your average Human In Equestria story. It was certainly one that was completely confusing to me. I mean first, Justin was just a simple brony that landed here, then all of a sudden he's a explorer that knew nothing of Daring Do and the Diamond Dogs, then it turned out he was the one that stole the medallion, also he could fight, and finally it all started to add up about what was going on with along with that note that said it was responsible for sending him here which became the mystery about this human. The longer he stayed there the less his memories about the show started to fade away, he gained skilled sets or was one of the few (that were mentioned) bronies that actually does other things besides watch ponies. So who is this E that sent him here, why did he just suddenly forgot about the show and how this world works, and what is the medallion that holds the power to control the stars?

These are the kind of mysteries that you managed to draw so many readers and likes, but I was surprised that the way the human is presented here didn't confuse people like the way it had done with me. I guess that WB thing that Shin was talking about my story was executed better here than it did in my own story (besides mine is dark anyway), Daring Do is familiar, the setting is familar, and the only thing that's strange is the human. While I'm about to post the second chapter to my story about an hour from now, I just hope that his will be enough to answer few of my watchers questions and I hope your next chapter does the same as I read it in the next 49 minutes.

That was a great chapter, I guess it really did take me an hour to read this instead of 50, but this was amazing. It was like reading Whip and Wing again where everything is perfectly explained well. The strange instances of Justin healing and being able to see in the dark was perfect foreshadowing of the medallion as well as Justin's true origins. The relationship between Justin and Daring was also more justified when they're both starting to become good friends now, I just hope she'll get over her fears of him next chapter. I'll probably see you in a month, good luck.

So awesome, hope to see the continuation. I love your characterization. and will pass any body who asks about good fics along to your story.

It's rare to get this kind of quality in a story, where you truly care about the characters and what happens to them.

if anyone disagrees they can just dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Cloudchaser_dealwithit.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Rainbow_dealwithit.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra_dealwithit.png deal with it.

FIRST. . . . . .I would like to say hurray new chapter:trollestia:. Second is that the wait was worth it.:moustache:

I think the like button is broken cause it won't let me mash it more than once. I really like the pulp fiction/adventure serial vibe you get from this fic. There is so much detail crammed into every knock and cranny of each chapter that the pay off is well worth the wait. So few fics that have Humans in them rarely take advantage of the height, weight, strength, climbing ability that a human would possess over the creatures in this kind of setting especially in an adventure story. Not to mention that as omnivores and creatures with larger livers finding food and alcohol wouldn't as big of an issue. I love that this fix actually addresses those things.

Characterization is great too and you get a sense of suspense over who the protagonist can and can't trust. Another thing I enjoy is that Daring Doo isn't a clone of Rainbow Dash and you've done a great job at giving her her own actions, personality and motivations.

Still my only issue is I wanna see something get it's ass kicked or punched in the face or any combination of the previous two.


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Peace Out.

well, that was better than expected :D

HI THERE!
why you write so slow? finals are over and this is awesome!
no excuses mister!

i think i might know were this is going o-o

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yeeees i hope to see this fic again soon

sexy time!!!!!!!!!!!:pinkiehappy::raritywink:

Grammar Problem:

The Problem: “And this here? Sub-clause that states every time you wake up late, they can dock you five copper bits.” She kept showing me so many exceptions, clauses, and sub-notes that the average worker would likely end up owing the caravan at the end of a journey.

My Solution to fix it>“And this here? A Sub-clause that states every time you wake up late, they can dock you five copper bits.” She kept showing me so many exceptions, clauses, and sub-notes that the average worker would likely end up owing the caravan at the end of a journey.
My Words- I found this part of the paragraph of Daring Do explaining the contract to Justin sounded awkward without something before she said Sub-Clause in that sentence. Can you please add that.
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I cannot express how I happy I was when I noticed a new chapter was added to your story and I loved this next installment. It was great, every detail that was written here was very well-worded and how along when to described the scenario had great pacing. I also like how you described each non-main event in this chapter quickly and precise to the point. After reading this I feel inspired to actually continue on my own story along with taking some of your cues of explaining how certain non-main events happen as in they're an important part of the story but they never took away the pacing of the story that much. So I have to thank you for making this next installment and I can't wait to see how in the next chapter how they spent their time away from each other or what happens when they meet up again.

*reaches the end and clicks next chapter* IT'S NOT THERE! WHERE IS IT!? *rubs hands together and laughs evilly* I think i need to hunt down an author and force him to write. :pinkiecrazy: :pinkiecrazy: .. Ok I'm good now.

So is the alcohol weak or is his liver really just that good?

Yay! Always enjoy this shit!

Feel lonely... I wanna share a bed with Daring...

Also, congrats, you manage to create great OC's, something I really enjoy in fiction.

I zee fightink, unt I zee confuzion, unt I zee GUDT GRAMMAR!

GRAMMAR NAZI APPROVES!

PS. Zhey even made a leettle fire...aha.

Unt vonce again I am zhocked by zhe fightink. More iz needed, ya. Also...GRAMMAR!

GRAMMAR NAZI APPROVES!

PS. I am zhinkink zhis 'Juztin' iz more powerful zhan he looks.

PS (again). It iz not zhese lions unt tigers unt bears...it iz zhe griffons unt tiiiiiiny, horzey zhings zhat one muzt be afraid of.

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Vhat are you talkink about? Zhis iz 'zpoken text', unt zhe bane of myzelf unt my vellow GRAMMAR NAZIS! Zpoken vords do not alvays vollow zhe proper rules of zhe all-powervul GRAMMAR! Zhe zentence iz vine! UNT NOT ZHOSE ZHINKS ZHAT GRAPES GROW ON! Vine, vine! Like gudt, ya! Anyvay...

GRAMMAR NAZI APPROVES!

PS. Vhat? No fightink? I am dizappointed, but zhere is gudt ekzpozition! I vill overlook it ZHIS time...

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True but it still sounded awkward when I was reading. I should've just said this was suggestion rather than he had to change it.

How have more people not seen this?!

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