Well. I'm not sure what I'm going to say about this story. It was good from the beginning but it went all bad down hill.

Now I have some rage of killing Twilight now. Even if she is more powerful I can overpower her and beat her.

"And then they all fucked". Canonically. And actually conceived from it this time.

Why do I get the feeling that their little litter of ankle-biters are pretty much going to be the Mares of Diomedes?

I am torn between hating you for Luna and loving you for not murdering her.

Well thats one way to end it all. Kind of dissapointed that they didn't go to Ponyville and take out the other four. Applejack has got to be aching for revenge and Rarity probably isn't all that fond of Twilight either. Pinkie and Fluttershy are non entitys at this point though. All in all good and nice and clean (yeah, right!) story.

So...what became of the other Element Weilders?

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5267332 Well she's a fuck slave so she'll probably get some foals out of the arrangement at least. Who wouldn't want to knock up Luna?

5262263 Mmm juicy

5266250 Yeah it was sort of inevitable.

5266891 I'm sure there will be plenty of foals, there are a lot of ponies to pair up, especially if you include gender shifting magic. Including Luna, that's like... ten foals before they have to repeat a pair?

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5272723 If more chapters are commissioned, we may end up with them taking out the other friends. Spike could either die too or be forced to help, or both. As for what became of them, they're all pretty helpless with two of the elements missing.

Actually I think I would love to see the other Elements get there revenge and falling to the dark side themselves. Could you imagine Rarity getting her hand on the Alicorn Amulet?

5273511 And have to deal with a pregnant princess of the night or a baby alicorn? How bout no.

I don't know why I read this. I like corrupted Twilight but not like this. Though I bet others liked it. I still read it all though.

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Spike could either die too or be forced to help

With how this story went, I can see Spike joining Twilight for the price of Rarity being made his personal sex slave.

I wasn't sure about this at first, but, damn! This was an amazing story. I'm almost sad to see that it is over.

Would you mind telling me which chapter the watersports occurs in? Thanks.

5352774 I'll try to make more amazing stuff! (I'm really out of ideas at this point though)

5354428 Well I think there's some in 1.1, though it's a bit violent. Also in 3.3, also overly violent. I'm already forgetting most of the other details. I'm afraid there isn't a chapter that really focuses on it though.

I've never read a story this violent and gruesome before.
The scary thing is that I liked it quite a lot
Won't lie that I clopped at some points, awesome

5484252 Always good to hear someone is stroking it to my stories Plenty more gruesome stories where this came from.

is there going to be a sequel

5499384 Maybe if I have time to do a commission for one, but right now I'm distracted with college and Celestia's Vacation

5519008 It's full of freaky fatal foal fucking

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I can beat you off as compensation~ *Ass slap.*

I...loved this story.

This story is fucking sick! It left me horribly disgusted and strangely aroused. I loved it - fav.

best story I've read so far. Rape and murder it cant be better
anyway keep up the good work

5721027 Yay for rape and murder

5722003 indeed

Well,that was really interesting.And I guess you'll end it in a few more chapters.But still,maybe it's dark,but that doesn't mean it isn't a nice piece of work.

i want to downvote this i really do but unlike other simpletons who downvote because they cant handle what they are reading i vote based on whether its a good story or bad story and as such i shall upvote it

nice . please write more soon.

Strangely enough… I didn't so much as bat an eyelash at what I read.

Well, at least there was TwiDash.

6258943 same here it weird

Well this story was horrible. Execution and its over reliance in shock value is the primary parts to its fall.

6913188 Awesome! You even used the right form of "its"! You're two for three on correct comments now!

6913275 Wow, you have to be desperate to defend your stories if you are going for the grammar move. Which is always the desperation move. No actual comeback to my criticisms at all.

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6913188 You clearly don't know anything about writing so i suggest you go crawl back into whatever hole you came out of and leave us be until such a time as you've written your own stories then MAYBE people will take you seriously until then your just another troll to kill and destroy

7285724 Shhhh... don't notice it and maybe the problem will take care of itself.

Im very disappointed with myself.

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Her brain was fried when she fought Chrysalis.
Also this is clop, which I was paid to write.
Also what is fiat?

Contains all-the-way-through, asphyxiation, changelings, cum inflation, death, gay, gore, flaying, foalcon, futa, mass murder, original characters, rape, sex, stabbing, straight, violence, watersports

7480008 I know, even I'm ashamed to have included original characters. I feel so dirty.

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Not even that

straight

7480469 Well technically they're all bisexual, I just listed gay and straight so I could have a longer warning. I like warnings. At least these warnings aren't as long as a whole chapter like in a certain other story I wrote.

7698112 No one likes Blue Blood. If I wrote a fic where Blueblood was killed by a different pony each chapter, it would probably get all thumbs up.

7698458 I believe I did do it once where the pony was terrible at it and just tore it off in messy little bits of flesh. No idea which story though, they all sort of melt together in my head.

7698474 You had no idea how much moar you were going to get.

7698500 Yes. While I do try to have some plot to stitch things together, people that read my stuff expecting an intricate Game of Thrones plot-line are going to be disappointed.

7698736 You wanted moar, you got moar!

I really like it when people comment on their way through the story like that. It helps me remember what the hell is in all these stories I wrote long ago. I'm afraid to check how long ago it was, because doing that will probably make me feel old.

8106588 Well during the fight with Chrysalis, Twilight received massive magical brain trauma to her head. If they're familiar with such injuries, and they probably are, they'd know that that combined with her psychological trauma would make her much weaker to such influence. I keep meaning to go back and tweak some of this to make it more obvious that Twilight is physically damaged, but I never do.

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You got queasy because of canon characters? Most people get queasy because of all the rape and murder.

Book 2 maybe?

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The commissioner did mention the possibility of wanting a sequel I think. Forget what they wanted in it though.
Tyrant Twilight is best Twilight either way.

Agreed

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Ur one of those people....

Not sure when but Chrissy said she replaced Celestia's advisors with changelings, so Twilights take over should not be possible.