Framed for a murder that she didn't commit, Twilight is forced into exile in the badlands to avoid her punishment. Will doing what she needs to do to survive turn her into the very fiend that they thought her to be?
4786952 I missed necrophilia and scat and abortion-by-cock. I hope you're not too disappointed! (By which I mean they will not be in this story, not that I left them out of the description. Hee.)
You know, all clop aside, what most stories with premises involving Twilight being framed for a crime she didn't commit, and the ensuing ostracization, get wrong, and also hurts the suspension of belief, is that it truly isn't very realistic for everyone to turn on her like that without properly investigating and weighing out all possibilities. I mean, she's got some flawless record, and her very demeanor does not come off as a latent murderer.
So I just want to give you some advice, author. If you are being serious about this story, then I'd make up one hell of a reason for this. If you aren't serious, then I guess that's fine as well.
I just wanted to leave my piece so I could help you. I don't read stories like this, what with the clop and all kinds of fetishes, but I wanted to help nonetheless.
4787246 With a commission the only answer I need is "I was paid to write this", but I feel a need to explain since I try to give the best reasons (while still sticking to what I was asked to write).
If you keep up with national news in a country like the US, you know that when a famous person is accused of a crime, they are hated regardless of innocence. Even if proven innocent, they never live down the reputation (ie Michael Jackson or OJ Simpson or the Ramsey family). The media wants high ratings, and a story depicting a monster makes for higher ratings. Trials never occur the way the media reports. This is why they sometimes have a surprising innocent verdict when the evidence reported seemed so contrary to one.
So it works if this universe has the following properties: - Celestia and Luna are figureheads and not allowed to override the democratic criminal justice system. - Investigation magic, like the magic that 'fingerprints' left-over magic to see who used it, is trusted completely and has never once been shown to fail. - Due to the seriousness of the crime, even Celestia and Luna are forbidden to visit, giving Twilight the impression that they aren't trying to pull strings for her.
It is perfectly reasonable for her to be imprisoned and tried for murder, and for the media to report as if she did it. Would it end in a guilty verdict? Who knows? Will we find out before Twilight sees a chance for escape and takes it? Probably not.
You can argue her friends not supporting her is unrealistic, but think about it this way. They have, on multiple occasions, witnessed magic that severely altered a pony's personality (Nightmare Moon, the Alicorn Amulet, Discord's magic, Nightmare Rarity from the comics). They could believe she would never do such a thing and still believe she did it. If they believe she is under the influence of something, it wouldn't keep them from being terrified to be around her, or from attempting to apprehend her.
And that's the longest answer I hope I ever give to a question on my forum. At the very least, I hope it proves how much thought I put into my stories. It's pathetic really.
Loved the start up for this, even though I really dislike the Idea of Chrysalis being a murderer rapist just to get revenge against Twilight. anyway going to follow this until it either finishes or gets to rediculous for my tastes, also heres hoping for some corruption by mind break, rape, and control.
4789806 She didn't do it just to get back at Twilight, she also did it for fun! There's corruption, though I hope the murdering doesn't get too much for you. There is a bit of that involved
4790156 As long as the murders remain explainable. and reasonable, and this time around I hope the corruption is spread to the other princesses instead of it just staying with one of them.
I just looked through all you're stories and I have a few things to say before I spend a few hours with the brain bleach 1. you have no heart 2. fuck you from the bottom of MY still working heart 3. You're stories are fucking sick, disturbing, horrible and disgusting 4. I send this fic and all you're stories to the darkest pits of a hell
4791662 I just looked through all your stories, because I am far too slow to figure this out after only one, and I have a few things to say before I spend a few hours with the brain bleach. 1. You have no heart. 2. "Fuck you" from the bottom of my still working heart. 3. Your stories are fucking sick, disturbing, horrible, and disgusting. 4. I send this fic and all your stories to the darkest pits of aHell. 5. Except the foalcon. I loved the foalcon.
Fleur's face glowed red with both blushing and anger as she struggled against the alicorn. She strained hard to lash out at Twilight, succeeding in coming inches from Twilight's face with a few front kicks, her hind legs bucking uselessly around Twilight's hips. Twilight just chuckled, barely keeping herself quite enough not to wake Blueblood, then moaned ever so softly as she leaned down to hotly kiss the mare beneath her. She forced her tongue deep into her muzzle, forcing her teeth apart and lapping at her throat.
Forgive me if I'm wrong, but I believe you meant quiet here.
This is why Chrysalis is my most hated villain. She is a malicious manipulator that's full of herself. Even in canon when Starlight offered her friendship, she denied it and don't even get me started on the wedding. Not to mention the creation of the EVIL 6 and also she was given another chance at friendship/redemption when they were looking for Grogar's Bell and she was the first to say friendship is not the way, as she even called it a disease.
11581308 To be fair, she also showed signs of psychosis, but I guess in Equestria we don't help people with mental illnesses, we subject them to eternal torment of some fashion instead of even attempting to medicate them. Though that's just my take, my opinion might be slanted since I'm on psychosis meds myself.
Omg this is gonna be good tenoutaten
Oh my god, this is going to be so good.
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If you say so! (And now I'm paranoid that the rest will suck)
4786383 naww it'll be good
NNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNop. Not, gonna follow this. No. Njet. Nee. Nein.
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Hand, don't you dar press that button. Don't you dare. I said do-NO! DON'T! Please? No! I won't let you! I... I...
IIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIII...
I WILL FOLLOW THIS! FUCK YOU BRAINS! AHAAHAHHAHAHAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!!!
Just looking at the tags, I'm not sure whether I should be scared or impressed, because I can candidly say I don't think you missed anything.
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Dis gun b gud!
4786952 I missed necrophilia and scat and abortion-by-cock. I hope you're not too disappointed! (By which I mean they will not be in this story, not that I left them out of the description. Hee.)
4787038 ...You're scaring me...
You know, all clop aside, what most stories with premises involving Twilight being framed for a crime she didn't commit, and the ensuing ostracization, get wrong, and also hurts the suspension of belief, is that it truly isn't very realistic for everyone to turn on her like that without properly investigating and weighing out all possibilities. I mean, she's got some flawless record, and her very demeanor does not come off as a latent murderer.
So I just want to give you some advice, author. If you are being serious about this story, then I'd make up one hell of a reason for this. If you aren't serious, then I guess that's fine as well.
I just wanted to leave my piece so I could help you. I don't read stories like this, what with the clop and all kinds of fetishes, but I wanted to help nonetheless.
Came here for the porn. Faved for the story.
4787246 With a commission the only answer I need is "I was paid to write this", but I feel a need to explain since I try to give the best reasons (while still sticking to what I was asked to write).
If you keep up with national news in a country like the US, you know that when a famous person is accused of a crime, they are hated regardless of innocence. Even if proven innocent, they never live down the reputation (ie Michael Jackson or OJ Simpson or the Ramsey family). The media wants high ratings, and a story depicting a monster makes for higher ratings. Trials never occur the way the media reports. This is why they sometimes have a surprising innocent verdict when the evidence reported seemed so contrary to one.
So it works if this universe has the following properties:
- Celestia and Luna are figureheads and not allowed to override the democratic criminal justice system.
- Investigation magic, like the magic that 'fingerprints' left-over magic to see who used it, is trusted completely and has never once been shown to fail.
- Due to the seriousness of the crime, even Celestia and Luna are forbidden to visit, giving Twilight the impression that they aren't trying to pull strings for her.
It is perfectly reasonable for her to be imprisoned and tried for murder, and for the media to report as if she did it. Would it end in a guilty verdict? Who knows? Will we find out before Twilight sees a chance for escape and takes it? Probably not.
You can argue her friends not supporting her is unrealistic, but think about it this way. They have, on multiple occasions, witnessed magic that severely altered a pony's personality (Nightmare Moon, the Alicorn Amulet, Discord's magic, Nightmare Rarity from the comics). They could believe she would never do such a thing and still believe she did it. If they believe she is under the influence of something, it wouldn't keep them from being terrified to be around her, or from attempting to apprehend her.
And that's the longest answer I hope I ever give to a question on my forum. At the very least, I hope it proves how much thought I put into my stories. It's pathetic really.
Loved the start up for this, even though I really dislike the Idea of Chrysalis being a murderer rapist just to get revenge against Twilight. anyway going to follow this until it either finishes or gets to rediculous for my tastes, also heres hoping for some corruption by mind break, rape, and control.
4789806 She didn't do it just to get back at Twilight, she also did it for fun!
There's corruption, though I hope the murdering doesn't get too much for you. There is a bit of that involved
Oh you!
I really fucking love your stories and I'll keep cumming back for more.
4790156 As long as the murders remain explainable. and reasonable, and this time around I hope the corruption is spread to the other princesses instead of it just staying with one of them.
I just looked through all you're stories and I have a few things to say before I spend a few hours with the brain bleach
1. you have no heart
2. fuck you from the bottom of MY still working heart
3. You're stories are fucking sick, disturbing, horrible and disgusting
4. I send this fic and all you're stories to the darkest pits of a hell
4790218 Yay!
4790773 As long as 'no witnesses' is a good explanation!
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I just looked through all your stories, because I am far too slow to figure this out after only one, and I have a few things to say before I spend a few hours with the brain bleach.
1. You have no heart.
2. "Fuck you" from the bottom of my still working heart.
3. Your stories are fucking sick, disturbing, horrible, and disgusting.
4. I send this fic and all your stories to the darkest pits of a Hell.
5. Except the foalcon. I loved the foalcon.
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Damn... nice comeback
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AW SHIT SON YOU JUST GOT OWNED!!!!
4791804 heh that's okay.
More please, This is looking gooooood!
This will do nicely
omg Chryssi thats pure evil poor poor Twilight
altho Chryssi did one good i think and that was ending Blueblood tho
Dafuq did I just read?! My balls ache now!
In all honesty I forgot that changeling existed while I was reading this.
Forgive me if I'm wrong, but I believe you meant quiet here.
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Oh shit you could’ve said something in the description but it’s okay
This is why Chrysalis is my most hated villain. She is a malicious manipulator that's full of herself. Even in canon when Starlight offered her friendship, she denied it and don't even get me started on the wedding. Not to mention the creation of the EVIL 6 and also she was given another chance at friendship/redemption when they were looking for Grogar's Bell and she was the first to say friendship is not the way, as she even called it a disease.
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To be fair, she also showed signs of psychosis, but I guess in Equestria we don't help people with mental illnesses, we subject them to eternal torment of some fashion instead of even attempting to medicate them. Though that's just my take, my opinion might be slanted since I'm on psychosis meds myself.