Framed for a murder that she didn't commit, Twilight is forced into exile in the badlands to avoid her punishment. Will doing what she needs to do to survive turn her into the very fiend that they thought her to be?
Brilliant. The only thing I can think of that this chapter was missing was a look at how Ponyville reacted to the massacre. I was kind of looking forward to that. Especially Rarity's reaction. Come to think of it, I wonder how Granny Smith is handling Applebloom's death. Or how Twilight's family is handling the news of what their daughter/sister has become.
Well. I lost my taste. I thought Twilight was going to get revenge on the changeling Queen for framing her. But I guess I was wrong and only to me this is a big disappointment. More corruption, I should have seen it coming.
5238954 That would be a great thing to add. I was already way over-par after the last chapter though; the next one is more of a wrap up than a new chapter too
5238959 I can see that; left to my own devices Chrysalis would have lived longer and died slower, but she wasn't what the story was meant to be about.
Fuck this is grim. The fact that I can find pleasure in it is even worse. Either there's something mesed up in my head, or if this is ok then there's something wrong with humanity in general. How does everyone else deal with this stuff because I'm struggling.
5243133 Yes I didn't include much more than what was requested since I was already way over the promised 10,000 words per part. You probably won't like the last chapter either as it's mostly just a wrap-up. If it was my own story that I was taking time with, I'd have added a scene for Applebloom being found and the school massacre being found especially, and a few other things. Maybe I'll consider inserting chapters at some point, but right now I'm busy with other stories and class.
A bit more brutal than normal but getting it done in the name of revenge (as far as Twilight is concerned Celestia just abandonded her) seemed to be what they were going for. Its Luna's fate that I think will be worse. They mentioned a pillow at one point...and that just might be her fate I think. Real scary part is when there done with them will they go after Pinkie, Applejack, Fluttershy, and Rarity?
5243571 Oh. It's a commission. I wonder what is the price for something of that scale. Do you happen to be open for commissions, by the way? And if you are, whether dismembered corpses in the rivers of blood are mandatory or disgusting torture alone isn't too vanilla for you.
5243926 The story sort of wraps up at this point, hope you're not too disappointed. Twilight does go after them in Twilight Takes Charge though, if you're reading that.
5243955 Right now I'm working on a big one of my own, taking time for real life classes, and considering one shorter commission, but you can always mail me and tell me what you were thinking.
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Brilliant. The only thing I can think of that this chapter was missing was a look at how Ponyville reacted to the massacre. I was kind of looking forward to that. Especially Rarity's reaction. Come to think of it, I wonder how Granny Smith is handling Applebloom's death. Or how Twilight's family is handling the news of what their daughter/sister has become.
Well. I lost my taste. I thought Twilight was going to get revenge on the changeling Queen for framing her. But I guess I was wrong and only to me this is a big disappointment. More corruption, I should have seen it coming.
5238959
The corruption I can see happening, but the amount of rape is too far, WAY too far.
5239096 Agreed.
5238954 That would be a great thing to add. I was already way over-par after the last chapter though; the next one is more of a wrap up than a new chapter too
5238959 I can see that; left to my own devices Chrysalis would have lived longer and died slower, but she wasn't what the story was meant to be about.
5240149 Oh?
Fuck this is grim. The fact that I can find pleasure in it is even worse. Either there's something mesed up in my head, or if this is ok then there's something wrong with humanity in general. How does everyone else deal with this stuff because I'm struggling.
5240649 You are the best kind of messed up! Anyway it's not like it hurts anyone to clop to a story.
I can't clop to this! It's not porn, it's a damn cooking recipe. Slicing, detaching, removing... boring.
And I agree with 5238954 — where are reactons of others? Even Luna is almost completely ignored.
5243133 Yes I didn't include much more than what was requested since I was already way over the promised 10,000 words per part. You probably won't like the last chapter either as it's mostly just a wrap-up. If it was my own story that I was taking time with, I'd have added a scene for Applebloom being found and the school massacre being found especially, and a few other things. Maybe I'll consider inserting chapters at some point, but right now I'm busy with other stories and class.
A bit more brutal than normal but getting it done in the name of revenge (as far as Twilight is concerned Celestia just abandonded her) seemed to be what they were going for. Its Luna's fate that I think will be worse. They mentioned a pillow at one point...and that just might be her fate I think. Real scary part is when there done with them will they go after Pinkie, Applejack, Fluttershy, and Rarity?
5243571
Oh. It's a commission. I wonder what is the price for something of that scale. Do you happen to be open for commissions, by the way? And if you are, whether dismembered corpses in the rivers of blood are mandatory or disgusting torture alone isn't too vanilla for you.
5243926 The story sort of wraps up at this point, hope you're not too disappointed. Twilight does go after them in Twilight Takes Charge though, if you're reading that.
5243955 Right now I'm working on a big one of my own, taking time for real life classes, and considering one shorter commission, but you can always mail me and tell me what you were thinking.
I feel happy knowing that Luna survived, even if she didn't thrive.
So.....so........JUICY!!!
"Other screaming ponies began to scream"
Other redundant ponies began to repeat themselves
"Huh, wow. So, what do you call that little number?"
"The Aristocrats!"