Framed for a murder that she didn't commit, Twilight is forced into exile in the badlands to avoid her punishment. Will doing what she needs to do to survive turn her into the very fiend that they thought her to be?
Twilight makes a good point. It would be so easy just to blink (anyone actually remember that term? It's the canon for teleport) into someone's house, break their necks, and then blink out if you had Twilight's magic skill. The way Blueblood was killed was over the top and had evidence. That should have been enough to countermand any suspicion it was Twilight.
Although since everyone wouldn't expect her to leave evidence, leaving it would potentially be seen as her attempting to trick them into ignoring her, so bleh.
One last thing: Twilight's reaction to the guard that entered her cell was completely unrealistic. She thought about killing someone already? And didn't even seem horrified that she had such thoughts? Really? Just... really?
The Badlands can change a pony. If she is found innocent and the locate her, she will no longer be the Twilight Sparkle they knew. She will be Twilight, Mistress of Blades... or something like that.
4889620 Oh she'll kill plenty by the end Seriously, many readers will probably hate her (and/or me) by the end. 4889918 I don't think the average person would think wanting to murder a rapist was that bad. She can be worried when she wants to kill innocents. 4890406 I do like blades. 4890704 Yes, though it will be a bit later I fear. It took me longer to get around to her than I thought it would.
So far I am finding this interesting although the Spike-Rarity thing was a bit much, he is just a baby dragon after all. But beyond that seeing Twilight as a refugee from the law is a very interesting concept and one you can get a lot of mileage out of. Will Twilight resort to killing in self defence? what allies can she look to since her friends have more or less abandonded her? I am very interested in learning more.
4892194 I live in the same area that the Green River Killer is incarcerated in. He killed so many people (40+) that I hate him purely because of it, but I wouldn't wish death on him. In fact, the majority of people apparently wouldn't seeing as he's not been executed despite the fact that Washington State has the death penalty.
I don't wish death on people, nor would I excuse it. I'm also quite horrified at the idea of thinking seriously about killing someone, or even having to restrain myself from doing it. Am I abnormal? Do normal people have urges to kill people because they did something wrong? Maybe harassed you, or called you a racial slur? Would those warrant the urge to kill?
I find it difficult to believe that Twilight, as a person, wouldn't be horrified at the sudden urge to kill someone. Maybe it's just me, and maybe you think I'm being an idiot here. Who knows, all I can say is consider it.
4892967 Just keep in mind that 'foalcon' is in the warning in the description for this story, and I'm not going to shy away from it, especially when requested by a commissioner.
For me, the biggest thing here that could count as a plot hole would be:why didn't Celestia visit Twilight to ask her WHY would she murder Blueblood? Sure, she probably wouldn't believe Twi(she didn't during the Canterlot wedding), but the fact that her prized student is accused of a horrible murder and she doesn't even bother to see her...is kinda icky.
"I am offended you think I cant kill people properly! If I DID kill them you would all know it!"
Yeah i'll give it a go
Twilight makes a good point. It would be so easy just to blink (anyone actually remember that term? It's the canon for teleport) into someone's house, break their necks, and then blink out if you had Twilight's magic skill. The way Blueblood was killed was over the top and had evidence. That should have been enough to countermand any suspicion it was Twilight.
Although since everyone wouldn't expect her to leave evidence, leaving it would potentially be seen as her attempting to trick them into ignoring her, so bleh.
One last thing: Twilight's reaction to the guard that entered her cell was completely unrealistic. She thought about killing someone already? And didn't even seem horrified that she had such thoughts? Really? Just... really?
The Badlands can change a pony. If she is found innocent and the locate her, she will no longer be the Twilight Sparkle they knew. She will be Twilight, Mistress of Blades... or something like that.
*notices Rainbow is tagged in the story* Is she making any more appearances, or was it a one time thing?
4889918 hmmm maybe, just maybe "finish him off" wasn't meant in a way like that.... while twilight has a horn, is she therefore horny all the time?
If this isn't coherent enough to understand, I blame writing it at half past one AM.
4889620 Oh she'll kill plenty by the end Seriously, many readers will probably hate her (and/or me) by the end.
4889918 I don't think the average person would think wanting to murder a rapist was that bad. She can be worried when she wants to kill innocents.
4890406 I do like blades.
4890704 Yes, though it will be a bit later I fear. It took me longer to get around to her than I thought it would.
Hook. Line. Sinker.
You got me. I want more!
Twilight may not have killed that guard, but hey, who knows what'll happen to him later in his life. He might die of pony AIDS!
4892194
I'm the type of person that supports the obvious antagonist.
So far I am finding this interesting although the Spike-Rarity thing was a bit much, he is just a baby dragon after all. But beyond that seeing Twilight as a refugee from the law is a very interesting concept and one you can get a lot of mileage out of. Will Twilight resort to killing in self defence? what allies can she look to since her friends have more or less abandonded her? I am very interested in learning more.
4892194 I live in the same area that the Green River Killer is incarcerated in. He killed so many people (40+) that I hate him purely because of it, but I wouldn't wish death on him. In fact, the majority of people apparently wouldn't seeing as he's not been executed despite the fact that Washington State has the death penalty.
I don't wish death on people, nor would I excuse it. I'm also quite horrified at the idea of thinking seriously about killing someone, or even having to restrain myself from doing it. Am I abnormal? Do normal people have urges to kill people because they did something wrong? Maybe harassed you, or called you a racial slur? Would those warrant the urge to kill?
I find it difficult to believe that Twilight, as a person, wouldn't be horrified at the sudden urge to kill someone. Maybe it's just me, and maybe you think I'm being an idiot here. Who knows, all I can say is consider it.
4892967 Just keep in mind that 'foalcon' is in the warning in the description for this story, and I'm not going to shy away from it, especially when requested by a commissioner.
I like how in the description "original characters" is in the warnings, on par with foalcon and mass murder. Agreed.
4913430 I was wondering how many would catch that
For me, the biggest thing here that could count as a plot hole would be:why didn't Celestia visit Twilight to ask her WHY would she murder Blueblood?
Sure, she probably wouldn't believe Twi(she didn't during the Canterlot wedding), but the fact that her prized student is accused of a horrible murder and she doesn't even bother to see her...is kinda icky.