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Wheller


Surprise!

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When a dying pony learns that she may only a few months left at the most, and that she has one hope left, it will take all her will in order to convince those she cares of the most to accompany her on one last trip along the Long Road. Because this is one journey that cannot be walked alone.

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Comments ( 50 )

I take it that it's a given that whatever Luna needs to procure is probably located in the ruins of the Dream Valley commune.

Interesting, wonder what she will get that could save her from a place that was destroyed 1400 years ago ,but it happened in a different world/dimension/whatever, so if no Prince Chaos-Order existed, and maybe no Queen Gaia with nuclear programs.

Dream Valley didnt?

or more likely, theres some way there to enter the old world and get some medicine from the Whitetail Wood research center or somewhere. hmmm :trixieshiftleft:

Dream Valley didnt exist?*

*Reads description* :trixieshiftleft::trixieshiftright: Trixie found a cure for Lighthorn? Sweet!

*Reads story* :facehoof: D'oh! But if Scratch is suffering from Artifact Radiation, and not Atomic Radiation from her few minutes back in the Old World, doesn't that mean that her Roo friend is ALSO in danger?

wait. pinkie uses nitroglycerine in her cupcakes? not suprised at all.

I'm also not surprised that Twilight still made the mistake she made the last time; Equestria might be less isolated but that doesn't mean that geography is something that interests Little Miss Magic.

19754

Vinyl has taken massive discharges from the artefact, twice.

Willoughby had minimal exposure. He'll be fine.

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This clearly implies that Vinyl won't be fine; she might survive whatever cure is in the offing but it'll probably mean that a certain mailpony will have to live up to her Bond of Eternity and be responsible for taking care of an invalid for years on end.

19992

Oh come now, I'm not THAT evil.


... Okay, maybe I am...

:pinkiehappy:

And thus we see exactly why Vinyl does need some sort of less than completely horrific ending; she won't admit it but she's a good pony at heart.

There's being selfless and then there's just simply trying to kill yourself :twilightoops:

19754
I'd say so, yeah. I wonder if he will show back up in this story, and hopefully not already dead.

20015
Well, she's probably going to be sterile now. Thankfully, this won't have any impact on derpy and vinyl's relationship, heh.
Besides, they already have Dinky, one is enough.

20224
Eh Vinyl wouldn't do that, not in this lifetime at least. Not unless it would definitely save a life of another.
Besides, Vinyl knows this route already, I'm sure they'll avoid most of the nasty stuff.

Tell them already Vinyl.... :fluttercry:

Ah, my.....her need to not be pitied is coming to bite her in the flanks again. :fluttercry:

This can only end in bloody tears. ...by which I mean tears laced with actual blood. Provided by Octavia smashing a glass bottle right in Scratch's face.

Oh, dear; I hope things work out for her. After all, somepony's waiting for her back in Ponyville.

Why did the end of this chapter remind me of the 3rd Act cinematic for Diablo 2? :rainbowderp::rainbowhuh:

21461

Dunno, never played it.

21461

Thanks for spoiling a twenty year old game for me mate. :rainbowwild:

21465

20? its only 10, and the very first is only 15 :pinkiehappy:

21473

Close enough. And close enough is all that matters when dealing in matters of horseshoes and hand grenades.

And nuclear weapons.

oooooooh shit shit shit shit shit shit shit. Shit.

manure just got real, your basically saying "fuck my own fanon" by changing the history you set


"Whirlwind remained completely in the dark about his true identity for his entire life, and likely wouldn’t have cared even if he did. He continued to pursue his love for Rainbow Dash, even after Rainbow would leave Ponyville to follow her dreams. Whirlwind replaced Rainbow Dash as the leader of Ponyville’s weather team. Continuing the tradition of being able to clear the skies above Ponyville in ten seconds flat."


Still,cool with me, the story keeps getting interesting that way.(even if he doesnt remember because of stepping on the bridge, Vinyl still told him lol )

21530

That assumes a few things.

Being told something and actually remembering it are two different things.

That something will actually happen when Whirlwind steps on the bridge, haven't gotten that far yet, hold your horses. :pinkiehappy:

That something doesn't happen later that still makes Whirlwind's ending valid.

As long as it's just Whirlwind/Overdrive that steps on that thing, we're okay. Rarity....sort of also okay. Everypony else?? The word 'disaster' would be an understatement. Fluttershy, as a for instance, does not need to remember Murdershy. :pinkiegasp::raritycry::twilightoops::fluttershbad::fluttershysad:

21465
Final Fantasy 7: Aeris dies. :derpytongue2:

Spoiler? Buck that, I consider that a WARNING! Do NOT give her any materia or equipment you can't replace. My first time through, I had to start over becouse Cloud didn't think to pick her pockets for summon materia before laying her to rest. :flutterrage:

So the Big Bad of this season has been unleashed, AJ is repeating the mistakes of the past, and Scratch's love life is very, VERY rocky right now. ...and Twilight and Dash are together again, much to Pinkie's dismay. I just couldn't ever figure out WHICH of the two she had the hots for in the Old World, though. I'm guessing Twilight, but the line in question was very, VERY vague.

:fluttershyouch:ffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffff:flutterrage:FFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU*starts next chapter*

well, ignore the ffff moment. now have a new one

FFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFUUUUUUUUUUUU!

21712

It's Twilight.
Of course, she's going to wait until she's alone to freak out.

Alrighty, then....Derpy is pissed at Vinyl and she's got good reason. AJ is acting like a stubborn lummox again and she thinks she's got a good reason. And Whirlwind/Legion wants to rule the world again and he can't be reasoned with.

shit shit shit shit SHIT SHIT SHIT SH-
:twilightoops:

For every problem solved another three :facehoof:

*Girlly Screem* :fluttershbad:

Oh.

Bucking.

Horseapples and Ponyfeathers!

...is it wrong of me to hope Suprise recovers from this? :scootangel: I mean, her being "immortal" is KIND OF being countered by her being attacked by someone who is at least IN PART the same person who made her immortal, but we don't know if Legion is accounting for that. And if she DOES recover, I will pop some corn and watch a mare scorned do what she does best on a deserving target.

...if she recovers, that is...

...she isn't going to recover, is she? :fluttercry::raritycry::applecry:

Well, that's it for your avatar, isn't it? I should think that he took take back Zephyr's gift of eternal life because, as both The One and The Many, he doesn't need minions any more.

WHOA WHOA WHOA WHOA! MASSIVE RETCON ALERT! :duck:

This chapter...
She began to recount for him tales of the Old World, of the war between Order and Chaos itself, she told the final battle between the forces gathered by Princess Luna and her siblings, and how they had all been snuffed out. She told him about Surprise, and how she had tried to murder her several times. She told him of the missile, and how upon setting it off, it had given them all a second chance at life.

Previously stated canon...

Whirlwind remained completely in the dark about his true identity for his entire life, and likely wouldn’t have cared even if he did. He continued to pursue his love for Rainbow Dash, even after Rainbow would leave Ponyville to follow her dreams. Whirlwind replaced Rainbow Dash as the leader of Ponyville’s weather team. Continuing the tradition of being able to clear the skies above Ponyville in ten seconds flat.

Holy Celestia, I squee'd so hard when Whirlwind started approaching that bridge. You really know how to ramp the intensity up to eleven.

A few noticeable typos on the first chapter, you might want to iron those out. Other than that, this was really well done. Great job.

WHIRLWIND YOU ASSHOLE!

Well, Surprise, an already insane pony, has gotten triple-mindfucked. :rainbowderp:

Well this doesn't look good.

And there is the shit hitting the fan again!!!

21158 Sorry about saying completely unrelated to the fantastic story, but I love your profile pic. :rainbowlaugh:

This story keeps making my face look like this! --> :pinkiecrazy:

Not like I'm complaining... Hahaha!!!

Well isn't this a SURPRISE? :trollestia:


I have another problem...

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