Celestia has finally left this world, and Twilight has to step up to her place as Princess beside Luna, becoming Regent of the Sun. She has to learn what being a Princess entails, and live up to Equestria's standards.
Two Arcs. (More arcs will be in Sequels)
Arc 1-Chapters 1-6
(7 is a Bonus, all about the laws of Equestria. It will be updated irregularly.)
Arc 2-Chapters 8, 10-? (9 is a Bonus about magic, and will be updated irregularly)
Note: bonus chapters are not necessary for the storyline, but help comprehension.
The battle from Chapter 5 is in a separate story, Maripony Massacre
I now have a Beta-Reader, Arc 2 Chapter 2 -Arc 2 Chapter 6. Thanks to imperfectPacifist!
I have an editor, Arc 2 Chapter 7. Thanks to Commander Fire Starter
Credits for OCs:
Alexandria (by Elric of Melnipony) Alexandria's info here, first post
Paragraph layout is something left to be desired. I have also found the majority of it rather uninteresting and too fast-paced.
I'll try to fix the paragraph layout, I'm trying to fast-pace it on the uninteresting portion so we can get to the interesting stuff, coming soon, but if I leave out a lot of the uninteresting stuff you would have no idea why or how things happen later on. Reasons for later on plot points are in next chapter. Nobleponies get angry for "boring" reasons. That being said, thank you for your feedback.
This is a wonderful story so far! I look forward to the next chapter.
4522130 Thanks! Sorry I haven't released any chapters recently, but with summer coming up I actually seem to have less time to write... Anyway, I hope to release the next chapter within the week.
An excellent chapter!
The assassin seemed insane. His mood was erratic and hard to follow. If that was your intention, then you certainly succeeded .
4528041 Yea. He's supposed to be a creepy insane lunatic. Who else would be an assassin in a world of friendship and magic?
Seriously? A hidden '10 Seconds Flat' joke?!? Also, the dark is never truly over!
Nice xDHannibalxD
I regonized that in "10 seconds flat"
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I knew some of you would get the reference...
4536756 No, its not over. Next Arc begins dark also...
4528634 That's what I thought. Good job. I look forward to reading the next chapters!
So...why didn't Celestia's life force recharged when she met someone else? Or should I keep reading instead...
4555008 Good question! The answer is that it doesn't recharge that much, barely enough to sustain her. If I have time, I'll create an accurate system for measuring Life Force, if I do I'll post a bonus chapter.
Is it some sort of constitution?
4586565 yes... HOW DID I FORGET TO MENTION THAT?!?!?!
So...you get paid less for working more? And 12 bits a day is really low wage. Add tax, bills, odds and ends and food...that ain't much to go by. Unless Equestrian Apples are extremely expensive and the Bit is uber strong that is
4593272 keep in mind that the Princesses forgot to mention tax, it doesn't exist yet... Pretty much the only necessary expenses currently are food, land, and furniture. You can live off 12 Bits a day. I might adjust the per hour to 3, making it 18. As for the government positions, think about it like our system. McDonalds workers get paid really small amounts, while doctors get paid ridiculous amounts. Only minimum wage is 12 Bits a day, currently. I may have to go adjust that now, because once I make minimum wage higher I need to pay the other jobs more. One more thing: if they're saving up for something they really want, they can work overtime for half wages. See you later, time to adjust all of the currency!
4593272 I just realized something... By working more and being paid less, did you mean the overtime law? Sorry, I didn't catch that the first time. I got rid of that... Instead, I'm gonna allow employers to force their employees to stop working. If a company doesn't want to shell out any more money on employees that day, they are allowed to stop employees after 3 hours.
Oh dear, what's going to happen next, I wonder?
4602345 well, next is a bonus chapter about magic. Then, Twilight Study Time!
(And spoilers)
4602617 Well, that sounds interesting!
I look forward to reading it!
May I make a suggestion, though?
4604697 Of course you can make a suggestion! I have used suggestions from readers on many occasions. What is the suggestion?
4605525 I was thinking that instead of wording the passage of time (sorry for the awkward wording) the way you did, maybe you could incorporate it into the story. For example, "In the years since the incident with Sombra..." And then word it however you would like.
I was also thinking that you might be able to benefit from a beta reader.
Liking the concept, this is definitely on my watch list.
Makez da sidez storyz
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make the side story
4611106 Ok, I'll start writing it, when I have its name I'll make a blog post or something.
Very good so far! Perhaps this could be a way that Twilight is giving into her nightmare. She wants so badly for Pinkie Pie to be back, that she is trying to work on a necromancy spell without considering that if she follows through with it, Pinkie Pie might take on a form that will make it impossible for her to be happy and live life. She doesn't seem to be thinking about the fact that wherever Pinkie is, she is probably just as happy as she was in life. In fact, Pinkie would probably just want her continue with her life and be happy.
Side thought: As Twilight grows older and her power grows stronger, does she begin to take on a more ethereal form like Celestia's and Luna's? Does she have eternal life? Maybe she starts to look like the form in the cover art?
4622145 Why would I use this cover art if she wasn't going to look anything like it? Yes, she's growing. Yes, she's immortal-ish (remember the explanation for Celestia's death in chapter one? That's the type of immortality she has). Finally, yes, she's starting to cave in to the Nightmare.
never never EVER say what could go worst! EVER!
Mane 6: 2/6, I think.
4623113 2/6? Twilight and who?
This might be random but this is more reminding me of Game of Thrones
4626488 I've actually never read Game of Thrones, but got the first book yesterday.
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I watch the tv way before reading the book (almost done with book 2)
4627634 From what I've heard, though, it is a little like Game of Thrones. I'm going to have a little more similar stuff, while Twilight/Ether is on the moon.
I like it and I hope too see the next chapter soon.
4627684 Unfortunately, I don't think the next chapter will come out for a little over a week, because of vacation for 4th of July. Then again, that could be considered "soon" compared to some story update rates I've seen...
Nice
Just saying, the reason this almost killed Twilight was inhaling carbon dioxide. Breathing nothing isn't that bad, it's poisonous gasses you have to worry about.
Plz continue this story
4781706 I'm working on the next chapter, but I had a big test and next week I have a 50 mile backpacking trip, so I will update when I get back.
sarcastic oh joy
Already, they're planning deaths?
It's only Chapter Three!
DON'T EVER SAY IT COULDN'T GET WORSE!!! I saw what happens...
Can vinyl scratch play his wubs on full blast?
Yay I got mentioned for my idea
Awesome story but I think you made Twi get over the whole 'trauma of being evil" too quickly, like really a day after trying to kill the bearers she goes and surprise visits them?
4912598 The only reason she agreed to visit them is because they're the elements of harmony, and she is related to two of them herself, and the others are related to ponies she knew. Twilight will have problems with society in the sequel, and she does feel the guilt. She's just afraid to show it. The sequel is being planned, but won't be released for a while. I don't think writing 3 stories at the same time was good for me, and writing 2 now will be hard enough with school starting.