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Although it left it, it knew that it was right, it made it down, because it didn't know what's up.

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As Twilight revisits Star Swirl's time spells she finds herself stuck in ancient Equestria.

Additional tags: Star Swirl

Twilight for a time. Twilight for a spell. Twilight for a time spell. A story about Twilight stuck in ancient Equestria.

Chapters (7)
Comments ( 56 )

I like it. I can hardly wait till the next chapter.

Bahaha cute. I like it so far. Very creative.

I really hope that this story will not go on hiatus. I read like 5-6 story with twilight in ancient equestria and almost all don't go far 2-3 chapters most. So far, good story.

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I'm glad you all like it!

I will try my best, I can promise you this will eventually be completed, but I do have about 10-15 active stories I'm publishing for. Hehe. I really shouldn't take challenges.

Sorry for not commenting on any of the stories that I favourite from you, but my iPad`s commenting system broke. Anyway, this is an excellent idea, and I cannot wait until Twilight forces him to grow a beard.

His had a grey coat, yellow eyes and…

I believe that you meant he.

“As I’ve been saying, me dear Applejack, I couldn’t have prevented it. It was out of my power.”

I believe that you meant my, but it could be a dialect thing. Stupid Americans! Why do we have to be so different in our way of speaking and spelling!

I like it. I can hardly wait for the next chapter.

Tehehehe brilliant. I like this a lot.

More chapters please ^^.

5622421 Thanks as always, fixed in a jiffy.

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It`s my pleasure, especially if my memory is correct in assuming that the chapter was unedited. All the more reason to praise your skills at either hiding mistakes or learning from them! Only two errors if the dialect wasn`t a problem, after all!

I see what's going on in this story... it's the typical 'go into the past and effect things so they turn out how you know them in the first place' type of thing, also if this is before the unification and Twilight has a castle, that means shes an alicorn so why wasn't Star Swirl suprised and kept calling her a unicorn? Also... I see what Discord did there, messing the spell up on purpose so she goes back and does what she needs to... man you are one sneaky dude Discord, you knew what was going to happen from even before your 'reform' and yet you still played your role perfectly to the max just so things turn out the way they did :rainbowderp:
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Maybe the reason he went through all the trouble to do so was Twilight had some sort of hand in his creation? Would make sense why he's trying so hard to keep the timeline in check when he could just as easily mess it all up for the ultimate chaos... maybe im over thinking things :twilightblush:

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shes an alicorn so why wasn't Star Swirl suprised and kept calling her a unicorn?

Presumably, Twilight's still caked in mud, so Star Swirl can't see her wings yet.

Yay! Update! This was fun thanks!

This is all kinds of entertaining, and I can't wait to see starswirl's reaction to Twilight's wings once he spots them - if this is still the period of tribes, then Celestia and Luna aren't around yet and she would be the first alicorn he has ever seen. I wonder if he will pass out of that ... or ask if she is some weird mutation from a breeding between a pegasus and unicorn :P (I bet at this point in time the tribes hadn't exactly intermingled yet and the notion would probably carry all sorts of assumptions about it).

It's a bit weird to see Twilight being portrayed as that clumsy, but I guess that can be chalked up to being logged down by a thick layer of mud and stuff. Anyway, I want to see more of this, been a fun ride so far.

5775969 I can see it. Hooves aren't exactly that easy to use, and Twilight's probably been using her magic to do things since the age where her parent's would do it all for her. I doubt she has much practice at all living without magic.

for now she had * get clean.

The astrik that does not exist should be the word "to."

Anyway,meow that I'm back and not so busy I can finally look over Just Roll with It. Sorry that it's weeks later, though.

As always, this chapter was highly entertaining and far too short.

“That’s enough you two,” she started her voice carrying a slight edge.

Hm... might want to change that sentence up a bit. The reader has to either infer the she above is Fluttershy or read on into the paragraph to rule out it being Applejack.

If only the chapters weren't so short.... I love the story, though! And Starswirl's reaction seems spot on to me (given the amount of information we're given).

Yay! An update. I love this fic!

5984159 Thanks! I fixed it.
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5988598 I'm glad you two like this fic :D

*points at the disguised Twilight* Introducing Clover the Clever!

“Wh– Wha?!” Twilight whipped the material out of her face to reveal a deep emerald cloak. “What’s this?”

Twilight is so Clover the Clever! and I so love stories where she is her because I believe Twilight is Clover the Clever.
Love this hope more soon :heart::pinkiesmile::twilightsmile:

6070659 Makes sense, it was shown in the show that time travel can't change the past so having Twilight as one of the historical figures she knew in her time actually fits.

She basically helped create her present with her interference in the past.... dang paradoxes and time travel scenanigans always get me over thinking things :applejackconfused:

Twilight is friends with one of her historic idols and is another all while getting to be the pony that changes history by uniting the tribes...AWESOME!!! :twilightblush: I can't wait for more.

Wait why would they check in the mud pool?

6206974 It's not mentioned here, but the filly alerted the pegasi to the 'monster' in the mud pool. Makes sense to check the pool and the surroundings. I should have probably mentioned that explicitly, but I was in a rush.

Yay! A wild update appears! Thanks

Stitch In Time. I see what you did there.
Great chapter can't wait fore more :heart::pinkiesmile::twilightsmile:

So a bunch of meat heads found Twilight's saddlebags and decided to poke at the shiny thing? Great. Just great.

I would be interested in pre-reading for you if you have the stuff in a google doc i can work with or something like that?

6208746 Thanks! I can give you access if you send me a PM with your google email!

i like the little detail of making Hurricane a female, not that i have read a lot of histories similar to this but whatevs
i just found this recently and i'm lovin' it :yay: :twilightsmile:
insta fav btw

I like it, please can we have s'more?

Why Twilight.... You had to invoke Murphy's Law now everything is going to go wrong!!

Very good intro, specially the ending, good work. :twilightsmile:

Twily is already altering things... this will be fun. :pinkiehappy:

Clover!” he exclaimed, pushing his way to the front. “And you better be thankful to her, she changed my mind.”

Oh I see where this is going... very Clever :pinkiecrazy:

“Oh come on,” Twilight growled. “Despite what I look like, I’ve had some experience in Royal Courts before. How hard can it be?”
Star Swirl shook his head, muttering to himself. “Don’t say that. Never say that,” he groaned.

:rainbowlaugh: Indeed. :derpytongue2:
Very good story so far, nice work.

Comment posted by Ocean Man deleted Nov 12th, 2016

One small detail, there is a "Starswirl the Beared" tag available. Use it as intended.

Wait, are you naming the chapter within the Episode too? Why?
Is your word count too low? Don't use this kind of padding, I don't think you even needed it in the fiurst place.

According to sitecanon, it is spelled "Starswirl", just one word and not "Star Swirl" as two words.

PS: you actualy published this entirely unedited?

8147452 It used to be a quick way to get G Docs to title the document as the first words I wrote in the chapter. Even when I moved to other writing software, the software still used the same convention, other than that, I have no reason other than it is aesthetically pleasing? Since going through all my stories and removing all the chapter titles will bring a lot of work to my full plate, I will just keep this going, mostly because I like it. Thank you so much for your suggestion, though.

8147457 Yes, sorry, and I never got around to editing this fully. As a side note, I used the naming convention found on the wiki: Link Here. I quite like the naming convention as two separate words, and I don't think there's been a canon spelling that will significantly alter my opinion to change it. It's very similar to Cadance, Cadence, Cadenza sort of thing. I hope it doesn't distract too much from the story. Thanks for the comment.

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