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An unfortunate turn of events finds Spike changed into an Earth pony. Rarity unintentionally crushed his heart and now she has to fight hard to win back his trust, his friendship, and maybe something more.

The story continues with Curse of the Werepony 2


Don't know what the heck is going on? Then start to story right by going all the way back to the beginning with And Tootsie Flute Makes Three

Chapters (4)
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Comments ( 284 )

Dam it people, stop using ideas that I'm working on!
Other than that, nice story.
Good day.:moustache:

*Spike aims at Rarity*

*Boom*

*Heartshot*

Only one question though, why is it tagged "Complete"?

Read this on DA a while back and liked it. I just read your new revised edition, and I liked it better than the original.

....oddly specific indeed....

good written some mistakes like her instead of here and such.

and what is up with the descriptions on the ponies, i mean they are good but stil feels alittle weird.

I like it, but I do have to wonder why its listened as complete as well. Its not even like an ambiguous ending, just sheer faced cliffhanger at the end. The in depth pony descriptions is slightly strange, but it works out well. I did enjoy Spike ripping into Rarity though, she deserved that one.

seems legit
WHY U SO COMPLETE:twilightangry2:

Wow. Great story. Also another note:
It say in the story: After a week, we won't be able to cure you at all. With that in mind, I'm giving you two days to decided."
Shouldn't it be decide?

406757 406902 406921 It's not complete. There's still one or two chapters to come. His finger must have slipped or something.

406968 That's what I figured, but it is always safe to ask :pinkiehappy:

406757
It's tagged complete because it is, i haven't gotten around to uploading the rest of it, but I will, soon.

i confused 'werepony' with 'weaponry'

You. Do not. Play Bruno Mars. On the site. Understood? :twilightangry2:

Very touching story.:raritycry: I never thought about Rarity's relation to Sweete Belle. I'm wanting to know Spike's story now.

C'mon, 'werewolf' = 'man wolf'. A werepony would be a man who turns into a pony / pony who turns into a man.

That's an... interesting (?) twist on Rarity and Sweetie Belle. And various other characters...
Liked story. Also; you may want an editor.

407574

Well, what I mean is that the word 'were' in 'werewolf' literally means man. 'Were' is Old English for 'man' so it doesn't many any sense for it to be a dragon that turns into a pony. There's no man involved.

Wyrmpony? Dracopony? No idea

407574 Chupathingy would probably work

Dracafri├żhengest (DRA-ka-FREETH-hen-gest) would be correct, though Spike would technically be a f├Żrdraca (fire-spewing dragon), with the possibility of being an ├║htfloga (Twilight-Flyer)

The important thing, though, is understanding. And yes, Were = human, but it implies the idea of an unwilling shapeshifter, which is what the author is intending. So STFU, n00bs!

Also, good story. A clever way to delve into dark backstory. I shall have to ask for help building the frame for my own tale ;-)

Nice story, but i noticed some grammer errors.

"You've known something for six months and you didn't tell me?" He asked, his voice getting louder."
Unneeded parentheses

"Hey, what the heck do you mean by that, I'm no loser?" Spike shouted at him.
You need a explanation mark insted of a question mark.


The police mare galloped off around the corner but returned shortly with tree other police ponies and a stately well-dressed unicorn stallion. Three not 'tree'

Spikes stomach growled softly.
Spike's stomach.

"Now, off you go before it gets any later, we'll clean up here. Rarity and Spike both thanked him and the police ponies before trotting down the road, side by side.
You need a quotation mark after 'here.'

Spiked steadied himself
Spike steadied himself

Overall this was a VERY good story. The sealing scene was a little too quick, but the rest of the story made up for it.
Rating: 4.5 / 5

Needs a copy editor badly. So many little spelling and homonym mistakes, but luckily they didn't break immersion. What did nearly break immersion for me was the almost nonexistent use of commas or compound sentences, making some parts read almost like an auctioneer when it needed commas or a telegram when the sentences were choppy for too long.

I'll read the rest, though. This is pretty good storytelling. The word choice is good, the characters are believable, and the plot device is rendered nicely.

Work on those two little things, and you'll be golden. Keep up the good work.

>3 chapters
>Incomplete
You have my complete attention, sir.

Very good. And I hope your considering a follow up story or two. One with Spike's dragon sister, and one with Rarity telling Sweetiebell the truth.

407574

Worry not. The translation of 'were' as 'man' is simply the one most people are aware of offhand.
A different theory has the term 'werewolf' coming from the old English 'weri', meaning 'to wear', thereby making a werewolf a person who wears the skin of a wolf. In this sense, it is perfectly appropriate for _anything_ that shifts into a pony to be described as a 'werepony'.

my profile pic says it all. also quoting this website was kind of a dick move and the ages seem off from my perspective. 9.5/10

408282
Right. Draconequus, then? I know that's what Discord is called, but it fits this situation better.

I actually said, "Well that's oddly specific" right before reading Pinkie's line. And she said "Well that's oddly specific." My mind is currently blown.

407601

I am aware of the word etymology it was simply a play on words, a pun if you will

408019

Most people have been telling me I use too many commas, but I'll have another look.

The inclusion of that song... that was a nice touch. Pretty good story :moustache:

408368
You're going to have to explain that one a little more

407733

Fixed all the errors, thanks for pointing them out to me.

407402 Why not? He is great so why should he not play any of his songs just for you?

408429 In the MLP:FiM universe, a draconequus is the offspring of a pony and a dragon. How Discord looks is due to him using magic to make himself look more chaotic.

The only real issue I have with this story is that I have a hard time believing that Twilight, Celestia and Luna all together don't have the power to cast the spell, given that they're probably the three strongest magic-users in the world at this point. Other than that, this was a very entertaining story, and I liked it. :eeyup:

Good story, thanks for all of the d'awww.

*cough* D'aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaawwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww! *cough*

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