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Stay - Magenta Cat



What's more important? To be free or to do the right thing?

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Still here

Special thanks and dedicated to: Frazone, Giz, zaku666 and Diamond dust.

Co created by Giz.

Thank you guys.

Monarch's diary. October 12th, 1985.

Dear diary, today was a very fun day.

Remember that creature that mommy called 'human'? And how after that it spoke and said that his name was James?

Well, now Jimmy has become my friend too! It's like having a big brother. Don't misunderstand me, I love my brothers and sisters around the hive but he's way closer. He's like, I don't know, but he cares about me like mommy. In fact, he's like a second mommy to me, how do they call it?

A daddy!

Well, some days ago I asked mommy if Jimmy could be my daddy, but she said that I didn't need one. I asked her about my daddy, the real one, and she only said that he should never be mentioned again. She didn't speak to me the rest of the day, until nighttime when she visited me in my room. I was sad because I thought I did something wrong, but she said it wasn't my fault, but that my daddy father wasn't good for us. I've never asked again since.

See ya.

October 13th, 1985.

This day was really weird, starting with this morning.

It was very early in the morning, like, before the roof crystal started to glow. I had that nightmare about running in a hallway and ponies chasing me. As always when I have that one I went to mommy's room but she wasn't there. I thought she could be in her study, like most of the time when she's not sleeping, so I went there but she wasn't.

I started to worry, mommy's usually a sleep by that early in the morning. It's only when something bad is happening that she's awake before. So I searched around the home to look for her when I saw it through the window.

It was beautiful. A light even brighter than the roof crystal, and shining with a great emerald light. It was the most beautiful thing I have ever seen. When I followed its glow, outside the castle, I heard mommy and Jimmy arguing.

Not really the first time. They would usually argue because of Jimmy wanted to leave, but mommy says we would die if he does so. I don't want my brothers and sisters to die, I like them. I don't wanna die either, I got a lot of things to do. Someday, I will be a detective and solve mysteries.

When the glow stopped, I looked back and saw how mommy began to cry. I couldn't catch what were they saying but she told Jimmy he would be king. I didn't understand that but it seemed like mommy wanted to marry Jimmy, because that would be the only way for him to become a king. Then he just looked away and mommy was whispering something very very low, but he just ignored her and went to the big door that goes to the surface. I still don't know what was happening.

I was so worried. When they argue I usually hide in my room till it's over but now it seemed far worse. I just went there and asked mommy what was all of it. She asked me back what I was doing awake so early, at first I thought she was mad at me but she only hugged me. I asked if Jimmy was leaving, but he said that he was only going for a short walk. He offered me to come with him and mommy let us go. Tomorrow I'll tell you how it went.


October 14th, 1985.

Mommy doesn't know, but away from the main exit, in the morning sun's direction, there's an oasis. I found it this time when she was too busy in her study with government stuff or something, and since then I go there when nobody is watching me. It's a secret spot and it's mine. Princess Monarch's Kingdom.

Jimmy never went outside since the scouts found him near the cave's entrance. At first I thought he was like a desert bug, and couldn't survive being under the sun. But when we finally reached the exit, he seemed very very very veeery happy. I think he went a little crazy when he also found Monarch's Kingdom, because he almost felt face first trying to get inside Monarch's not-so-big lake.

At first I only watched, I don't like taking baths and water makes my wings heavy. Not that I figured out how to fly yet (soon diary, soon) but still. I also can't swim, although Jimmy offered to teach me how to float. I have to admit that at first I was scared, every time I tried to float I sank. But it wasn't that bad either since Jimmy was by my side and never let me go down the surface. Then, there was this moment when Jimmy told me he wasn't holding me anymore and I realized I was floating. Then I sank again.

Before that, I felt like I couldn't fall, it was amazing. I wonder if flying will feel like that.

***

A young Changeling Queen closed the small tome. Fifteen years have passed since that time.

The old Queen was enjoying her retirement in the lowest chambers of the hive. The tradition stated that, when a young princess was ready to become a queen, the previous one was free to do one of two things. The first one was the long walk, to taste real freedom outside the hive and away from the swarm. The second was to rest in life, away from the society's problems to stay in peace and served in every possible way by a personal escort of maids and butlers to repay her for protecting and guiding the swarm during her younger days. The tired ruler decided she has walked enough for her lifetime and only wanted to rest. Still she decided to break the tradition and visit the rest of the hive to stay at contact with her kind, not bounded to them, but willingly part of their lives.

It's been a while since her father departed too. Being locked inside the Hive Castle for years had made him more and more thirsty of freedom. Since that day, when he could finally let them by they own without risking their lives, he took what he needed and parted his own path to walk the earth. Every once in a while, he would visit but only with years in between. The changelings still would receive a letter or a package from him at least once every month. That and the stories of an odd creature traveling from town to town with only curiosity driving him.

The Hive changed too. It wasn't hidden under the endless sands of the Badlands anymore. The time of fear has ended and now they weren't outcasts anymore. In her foalhood, the Queen remembered how they were always apart from the world. Visiting it from time to time and only for an emergency. Now they were part of the world too. A spectacular vision of carved stone and obsidian dominated the desert. Not an inscrutable fortress, but a whole citadel that server now as shelter for its inhabitants and travelers as well.

"Your Majesty." A call from closed door of her mother's study pulled her back to reality. She never though she would end herself sitting at the same desk, reading and ordering those same papers that seemed so boring (and they actually were even more boring) as her mother did. Although she always loved her mother, and she knew that her mother loved her back, they never managed to really coincide since she grew up. And she never expected to become the same as her mother. A Queen.

"In a moment." She put her old diary back in the highest shelve of the room, next to the storybook her father wrote for her, and went to open the door. A changeling wearing a navy blue light armor was waiting for her. "Walk with me and tell me."

"At your command." He replied as holding a quill and a parchment in his magic while both went down the hallway to the throne's room. "First is the Saddle Arabia situation, Prince Faith n' Glory himself wants to negotiate the desert's trade routes with you."

"*sigh* Already told to his dumb Vizier that there's no way I'm going to give personal escort to their merchants." A black hoof reached for her temple in annoyance. "The Citadel is a shelter for travelers, we're not mercenaries."

"So, before or after lunch?"

"After, definitely after." She said. "If he is like that bad comedian of Vizier, I will need all the wine I can drink before dealing with it." He scribbled the hour in the parchment.

"Then, we have the Roani." He continued. "They are willing to pay for your hospitality as they do every year."

"The problem then?" She already knew that Roani were coming these days. Only a problem would be worth of addressing her.

"Not a real problem. Just a formal invitation to the party. Music and celebration to honor your good disposal."

"Tonight, I suppose." He nodded. "Tell them I'll be there by nine. If I'm not back in two hours send a praetorian to call an emergency that requires me." Although she used to love the music and general happiness in a Roani celebration, she knew that more than two hours would likely end with her awakening with a migraine that only being around such an amount of hope and good feelings could cause a changeling to get drunk in way too many good emotions.

"Most of the day is the usual routine. Attend the court, read the Parliament's last debate, read and approve a couple of urban projects." His voice monotone as they turned around a corner. "Oh, and King Armor is coming to visit this week." She stopped dead in her tracks, just as he expected.

"Again?" There was one thing she never managed to handle as Queen; a visit from the Crystal Empire's rulers. The very pony that crippled her mother (in self-defense, but still), her biological father. As usually, she asked her personal praetorian about it. "What do you think Shrapnel? Tell him to stay away or pretend we aren't home." The praetorian seemed to ignore the bad joke and think about it, but not for too long before answering.

"If you allow me to speak freely." He waited and interpreted her silence as permission. "I think he means good. After all, he didn't know of your existence for years, so he wants to be present now he can."

"Mother knows he's coming?" She closed her eyes, wishing for the answer to be 'no'.

"Naturally. Our Spy Corps are steel loyal to every queen, in charge or retired, above anything else. She probably knew even before the letter arrived."

"Then arrange the encounter, prepare some kind of welcoming and warn the praetorian's to keep those two away from each other. I don't want to deal with another 'who attacked who' discussion again." This time she had both forelegs in her temples. "Anything else?" He finished taking notes of her instructions before talking.

"Officially, nothing else. Extra officially, a letter." Putting the quill and parchment back in his saddle, the praetorian produced a simple envelope and hoofed it to his queen. Said queen lost any trace of nobility and professionalism when her magic reached for the letter and shredded the envelopment around it with the same glee that a foal in Heart's Warming would open his gift.

Dear Monarch and Chrysalis:

How are my two favorite’s changelings doing? Is old grumpy Chrysalis still fighting with every visitor? And how is my big grown up Queen? Hope you're fine and dandy.

I'm cool by the way. I finally reached the Austral Ice Fields and the fresh air and weather are wonderful. It's not that I don't miss the dessert with you, it's just I had enough sand and sun for the rest of my life.

Or maybe not.

I just met a lovely group of thestrals nomads and they don't mind me traveling with them. And it results that they heard about the Badlands are quite nice around this time of the year, so I will go to visit you guys. I'm not sure of the date right now and I can't tell how long it will take for this letter to reach you. But the thestrals say that there shouldn't be more than one or two days of difference. So, if nothing stupid happens (like that 'situation' with the griffins that I told you in my last letter) I'll be there in two or three days. Eager to see you again since the last time.

James 'Jimmy' Olsen

Monarch just stayed still for a solid minute after finishing the letter. She read it again and a third time to be sure. Her praetorian, getting worried, decided to look at her emotions to see what was happening. Although the pony-changeling was way more complex than the rest of her race and thus her emotional spectrum way larger than the average changeling, he knew her since she was a foal and didn't expect any surprises.

When he saw her, he was surprised out of his mind.

In the years of being a ruler, Monarch had managed to keep her emotions under control and stay calm and collected at unexpected news. Now, Shrapnel wasn't seeing any of that in her. Instead, she was glowing with almost every possible color. Red, orange, yellow, green, blue, indigo, violet and everything in between. A full rainbow, ready to explode at any second. And he was right next to ground zero.

"Shrapnel." Monarch barely moved her lips as her hooves started to shake. "Please tell Prince Faith I can't meet him, the same with the Roani's and to every pony, griffon dragon or anything else that I won't be available for a couple of days."

"My Queen?" He asked very carefully. "You are aware that the Citadel, being in the middle of a really transited trade route, needs an administration working every day to avoid any disaster."

"My dear Shrapnel, I'm aware of that. But the very man responsible of that happening in first place is coming to visit for the first time in years." Slowly but constantly, Monarch's features started to change. A very creepy smile that inspired fear in her praetorian's heart was now adorning her face. "In fact. Declare a full week holiday to everybody in the Citadel and start arranging for a party."

"You can't be serious, right?" Ever since the changelings were able to feel emotions for their own, Shrapnel never hoped something as much as now. In response, she took his parchment with the day's agenda and burned it. Then tossed the ashes out of the window. And then, she took a clean parchment, scribbled something and hoofed it to the praetorian. It said 'Yes, I'm very serious. PARTY! NOW!!'.

"Oh, and to any spy hearing this. I'm going to tell mother first. If she isn't surprised, I will severely injure you three, starting with the one in the other side of the wall, then the one in the roof and I'm going to take my sweet time with the invisible one behind Shrapnel." Hidden in those exact spots, than nobody should be able to guess, three changelings stayed still as their current Queen, and recent nightmare fuel bringer, started to gallop down the hallway with filly like hops while shouting.

"DADDY'S COMING BACK HOME!"

Author's Note:

I have no idea of how to write a slice of life!

Also, I really don't like sad fictions. On general principle, I like my characters (canon and originals) to end better that they started, or at least to have a happy ending. So, I just did that. As John Lennon said “Everything will be okay in the end. If it's not okay, it's not the end.” Well, this is the end, I'll let to you what happened in between.

Oh, and I officially declare that any story set in this universe ans using these characters will have my full permission as long as I'm asked about it first and both me and Giz get recognition for the original creation. In other words; if you think that this could be expanded I actually agree with you but now you are responsible of making that happen too.

If I'm disappointing someone here with all of this, I'm deeply sorry but this is the actual extent of my skill. You can make a Rage Review if you feel the need of calling me for my crap, just avoid calling this a 'Gainax ending' because that would be just plain rude.

Now I command you to comment.

Comments ( 52 )

I found it to be a great conclusion to the story. Very good job :pinkiesmile:

5052906
Glad you liked it.

Woot I helped something.....sorry couldnt help it :twilightblush:

I am glad to see this had a happy conclusion.

that was really really cute actually, good work

5052983 first half had me worried about your goal the second was so charming and lovable I totally forgot about whatever it was that was bugging me. I love your odd new queen and its a delight to catch up with them. Good work

I really liked that.
......moar?!?

Have you ever considered submitting this story to Equestria Daily? You can find out how to do so here.

5053040
Yes, yes you helped. Thank you.

5053179
I'm glad I could write one. Before this I visited some dark places.

5053234
Many thanks.

5054099
Well, now we're being honest, I felt intimidated when your review called this a 'good hie' and was afraid to not live up to such tittle. Glad to see that you guys liked it.

5054307
Open to recursive fictions. If you want more and you have an Idea, I encourage you to roll with it.

5055736
Equestria Daily?! :pinkiegasp:
I mean, yeah, this seems to be my best fiction so far. But E.D.? Those are the really big leagues. This is not the P.O.V. Series, not Fallout Equestria and definitely not Past Sins.
I don't know mate, I will check the requirements but I don't thing this story is that big.

5075433
Heh, as I explain in the blogpost, the thing about Stay os that I wrote it in the dark. I don't really read that much HiE, unless they're a crossover (Rorschach iE) or very well written (The Man With Two Names).

About Jimmy, I treated him more as an accidental savior than anything. It's like that guy who arrives last at a party, but when he looked into his pocket, he has all those coupons for premium pizza and-- I don't remember where I was going with that metaphor, but now I'm hungry.

THIRD PLACE! WOO! HOO! Celebration MUSIC!

This gave me a smile. I just wanted you to know that. :pinkiesmile:

5086604
Gladd to know, that's the kind of things I was aiming to. Thanks for telling me.

Needs proofreading, but otherwise very cute.

5430747
Yeah, I know, but at least is a worthy conclusion. Glad you liked it.

Wow, a nice little Changeling story. I like to read these from time to time.
Guess I have come to love the Changelings, as bad reputation as they were given in the show?

I would love to see Paragraphs in the Summary, if it isn't too much to ask for?
Otherwise, this does look like a good and interesting story.

Speaking of crusades, how about a crusade for stories and good comments?
I am pretty sure you can enjoy one more comment, while I can enjoy one more good story.

5541414
I do actually, thanks for your comment.

Now, google is failing me again, so could you please rephrase this:

I would love to see Paragraphs in the Summary, if it isn't too much to ask for?

So I can understand what you're saying.

5541903 The Summary is basically a single block of text.
If you wrote the summary the same way as the story it is to showcase, with Paragraphs?

5541940
Oh, you mean the description, right?

5541963 Yeah, the front page description is refered to as the Summary.

Even if you only have five Neigh's, the improvement could still help.

While we are at it, there are a few small details, like the description of the Dragon that may be better phrased?

I have come to like the Changelings, and as something other than the Menace.
Hay, they even started a group for saving Prince Blueblood from the obscurity oblivion.

I have enjoyed a few other stories about changleings too.

5541963 THIS WAS FUCKING BEAUTIFUL! I WILL SHOUT IT AGAIN AND AGAIN FUCKING BEAUTIFUL I LOVE YOU HAVE MY LIKE FAV FOLLOW HAVE IT ALL GOD FUCKING DAMMIT!!!

5573149
Okay...
Glad you liked it... that much.
Thanks for the follow too.
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I'm literally out of words.

5573373 Yea.. XD Anyways I know you think you could do better but still the thing you got here... it's beautiful. I like it. I guess Monarch comes from Monarch Butterfly? Chrysalis being the second stage to the evolution of butterfly? Like that's clever.

5573376
Well, it was Monarch or Mothra, but both Godzilla fans and non Godzilla fans would be at my throat if I'd do the second one.

5573381 Nope you did well. Anyways if you seek further chat and exchange of ideas you can pm me or add me on skype I am dionysiosbbbb

Gainax ending !

But seriously continue it, even that short it was very good read

5636650

Gainax ending !

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Well, even if it IS a Gainax ending, I can say on my defense that at least you can actually tell what's going on. Thanks for reading and glad you liked it.

5636872
You know that was irony ?

5639070
Sorry, translator crashed again and I confused the tenses.

5877845
AWESOME!
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So, I put this one in the description or something?

5878808 Unfortunatly, no. That annoys the mods. Cheers :pinkiesmile:

5879075
Okie, dokie, lokie.

5879095 Gratz bro. Btw is there a thought about a sequel or whatever?

5936051
Hmm, sadly no. At least not in the near future. Stay is literally all I don't usually write, so it's kinda harder to bring it up. But as I said in the author's note, I'm not against anyone writing a story placed in between Please and Still here, so if you know anyone with a good idea, or you have a good idea, all I ask is to be notified about it and that the credit goes equall for me and Giz

5936623 I see... how come you don't write stuff like that?

5936714
I'll put it this way; Stay is something that could have been a Nolan movie because of its emotional charge, impossible moral choice and open ending. Most of the things I usually write are more in tone with Spielberg or Bay for my love of action scenes, good vs evil setting and happy (or at least non bad) endings.

In other words, Stay is my 'playing against type' fic. To be honest, it even puzzles me how I managed to write it.

5937080 No it was good. You challenged yourself. Nice!

Loved it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

6237915
Very glad you liked it, then. Thanks a lot for reading.

I daw'ed pretty hard. Good stuff.

6979503
Glad you liked it. Thank you very much for reading.

D'awwww, that's a nice ending.

Hah, no wonder Chryssie chose that. For the first time in her life she can kick back and relax without a care in the world. Though I hope she eventually recovered from her injuries, at least enough so that they didn't hinder her in any way.

and Monarch seems really fun.

7987101
Very glad you liked it.

Now, I' not that fond on 'word of god' when it comes to my stories, but I can say the following: Chrysalis' injuries were the irreversible kind, so she's never going to be back at 100%. However, none of them were completely incapacitating beyond impeding her the use of any amount of magic bigger than the the needed to lift a spoon.

When it comes to Monarch, she was thought as a chance at redemption for her species. She doesn't follow the 'standard' changeling from canon (back in the day this was published) , but at the same time, she doesn't make a bigger effort in rejecting her own heritage. Yes, I was very surprised when canon did something very similar with Thorax, and I was rather pleased to see where that idea ended.

Thanks a lot for reading.

Will there be a continuation of this story?

10142631
Not in the foreseeable future. I wouldn't know where to start from here, much less where to go. But, this being a fanfictions site, I'm always open for anyone taking the story.

Mommy doesn't know, but away from the main exit, in the morning sun's direction, there's an oasis. I found it this time when she was too busy in her study with government stuff or something, and since then I go there when nobody is watching me. It's a secret spot and it's mine. Princess Monarch's Kingdom.

Somehow I awwwed.

The tradition stated that, when a young princess was ready to become a queen, the previous one was free to do one of two things.

I many stories I had read such things are decided by an battle to death.
The winner becomes/stays queen.

"Then arrange the encounter, prepare some kind of welcoming and warn the praetorian's to keep those two away from each other. I don't want to deal with another 'who attacked who' discussion again."

Sounds like she has experience with this matter.
But I'm sure if Cadance would be with him it would be even more sour...

In response, she took his parchment with the day's agenda and burned it. Then tossed the ashes out of the window. And then, she took a clean parchment, scribbled something and hoofed it to the praetorian. It said 'Yes, I'm very serious. PARTY! NOW!!'.

:pinkiehappy:: "I approve this!"


Nice story!
I enjoyed reading it.

10553167
I'm very glad there are people still enjoying this. Thanks for reading.

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