Just weeks ago, Rainbow Dash, the Element of Loyalty was murdered by an unidentified pony. A member of the town of Ponyville(?). Everyone is heartbroken to know that she is dead, especially her sister, Scootaloo. Just what will she do without her, and better yet, what will her friends do without her?
"Agent Scootaloo"
Very good I like..
Looking at the favorites and...OMG...at least 6/7! In only 15-30 minutes!
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Interesting. I'll keep an eye out on this story.
Let the investigating begin...
........hmmmmm, got to say, i do like the idea so far. just don't go gore crazy like you did with most of your other stories.
4339944 Sir, yes, sir! But believe me, it won't be. Gore-this-and-that isn't me anymore. Not intense gore, but mild or minor, or whatever ya want to call it.
I'm interested to see where this goes.
Im intrigued... Tell me MOAAAAARRRRR. BTW MOAAAAAAAARRRRR is my trademark.
Nice,
i like gore,
im clicking the watch button
sad as well to see my idol die as well
Why is there a * there?
The "Maybe" is not really needed in this
If you want an editor send me a PM, I like the general idea of the story and I would be happy to lend a hand.
Keep up the good work :D
I had an idea for something like this once. Me like this.
I ain't such a fan of Dark fics or Tragedys....
This one passed the test.
Fav and Follow, friend.... fav and follow..
4342856 If not, why are you even reading it...?
I like this story.
I will edit and proofread for ya!
This going in my read later list. I wonder, did you get this idea after watching The Crow?
U should contiune :3
4347591 No, not really. I had an idea for something like this after watching the crow, but decided against it. I made this after watching a few horror movies and adding it to some other thoughts I had in mind that'd be good for a story. The outcome was Dead Loyalty.
Jesus...I uploaded this two days ago, and only seconds after, I already got a few favorites and 6 likes, but now...I'm a loss for words....all I can say is thank you!
I love ya all for the favorites and likes you gave this story!
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DAT PLOT TWIST, DOUGH!!!
so when is rainbow coming Back?
4354197 Um......? You really didn't just ask that did you?
What kind of author would I be if I gave that answer away? It would ruin the story. Celestia, what would Pinkie say if you asked her something like that?
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I changed the description, everyone. Reason being that it gave away the biggest part of the story. Sorry if it disappointed/s you all. javascript:smilie('');
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ok so at 1st i thought that twi, rarity, pinkie, applejak, and fluttershy killed RD now i don't thank thats the case....
4354347 I did ask, but it was rhetorical, guess I should have made that clearer...
What has me excited for this story is the upcoming reveal when she dose return and seeing how everyone reacts to her being coming from the dead. (or at least appearing to, who knows what you have planed for us...) Those moments of revealing are what I live for in stories like this and the build up you are giving it is making me excited.
What I should have asked is how long do we have to wait until we get to the part of the story that many of us are looking forward to. yes you are releasing chapters on a daily basis so , but they are so short they really don't satisfy. I personally thing the 3 chapters that are out by this point should have all been put together, It would have served much better then just giving us small bite sized pieces.
Of course that's just my opinion.
Also to the fact that you changed the description: it was what you gave away that made me interested to read this in the first place, be careful that this dose not just appear as another one of the thousand "Rainbow Dash is dead" sad fics that have already been overdone. Just a friendly warning.
I bet the twist is, Rainbow is still alive.
She escaped whoever tried to murder her, and fell unconscious on the cloud because of her injuries. Fluttershy saw her, and the murderer quickly took Rainbow back. Who still isn't dead yet cause the murderer has other plans.
4356857 eewwwwww
4354367 what the hell is with the saying javascriptsmile?
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by other plans, I meant ransom. If they have an Element of Harmony, they could get anything and everything from the princess, just for Rainbow's safety.
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What?
4357280 you said that vagely and i could not understand it.
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Okay, my apologies
My theory is that Rainbow is not dead. When Fluttershy saw her on the cloud, Dash was actually unconscious. She escaped her capture but due to her injuries, she fell unconscious on the cloud. Her capture found her- after Fluttershy saw her- and took her back.
His/her reasons maybe to use Rainbow (who might I remind you, is an Element of Harmony) to get money and treasures from the princess and Twilight. In return of her life.
Is that clearer?
This reminds me of a horror movie I saw once. *shivers*
4354961 Believe me, it will be a lot different than all of you think this story is going to be...
I just dont know how its getting so much attention! :D
As for the short chapters, I will try to extend them, but I dunno...should I add all of them together?
What length of words in chapters were you hoping for? 2,000? 3,000? 4,000?
If so, I will attempt it, don't get me wrong, but the reason they are so short for chapters of an interesting story is because I can't think, mainly because my brain has been killing me lately and possibly will do at some point. If it happens, who can possibly finish this?
Don't worry, I'll try it tonight or on monday.
4356857 Holy shit! I just had a badass idea to what to do with this story! Dont bother asking, only ONE PERSON who is helping with this book has guessed the right answer, but I didn't confirm it.
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When will there be an update? I love this story so much
This is gettin' darn exitin'!
4357991 Update will be tonight at around 11 or earlier.
4357991 Hey, read the next one as soon as you can: it IS the one you are all waiting for!
Hello, i've been watching you for a while but i didn't get the last bit where they just talked, i did not know who was talking please tell me, Other tha that nice!
I wonder how long it will take untill lightning is brought to justice?
Oh my...
4373672 A while.
4373714 So she will be caught! YES!
I do have a better idea as to what I can do with this story. These chapters are only going to be chapters until I get the story finished, then I'm going to edit it all into one, long, gruesome and exciting story!
Finally an LD story not a lot of people write lightning dust anymore.
4417715 The reason shes in this is because it seemed rather fitting and made sense whenever the writer (me) made their minds up were to take the story.
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I like that LD was perfectly suited for it. Nobody writes revenge fics for her I was expecting a shit ton of LD gets her revenge on RD after that episode aired but they never came. If i had to wait a year for that revenge fic then this story was worth it.