Pinkie Pie's granny comes to visit her granddaughter in Ponyville, nice, right? Maybe it would have been, if one comment about a mare Granny Pie once knew, years before the main six birth, hadn't set the whole world rumbling, discovering long forgotten secriets
Thanks to SteelxPaladin, Follow Focus and Starshipranger01 for Proofreading/ prereading t this during various states of the writing of the story! also thanks to Larona (the writter of Wrath of Can and Playign Doctor) for editing.
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Hey I remember this story :D
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You should, my friend. A greta deal of this is based of your helpfull review!
Now how about Rarity and Fluttershy's grandmas hooking up. Just kidding... That was kind of weird, but a nice read. You could probably tighten the story telling up a bit and give it some polish.
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Yeah, how about it...... I've already paired Granny Smith and Thunder Belle, Granny Pie and......!
I know it's kind of weird, but that how things turn out when I don't have a plan!
I worked very much on this and done a hole lot of editing, but maybe you can do some more.....
Huh, so granny pie was datin twi's grandma before t move also
? Heh, that is kinda shockin 
- not by much tho since supposely pinks taks after her granny in some ways 
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Yes. I know. Yes, pinks take after her granny.
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will start datin each other (if they aren't already yet 
) soon if they both tak after they're grandmas 
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So, does this mean that maybe
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Maybe that. Maybe in a sequel? Oh' and maybe Rarity's and Flutter Shy's granny's can hook up?
Totally stole that idea from you, Zeyon The Green!
Anyway, we'll see if it happens.
Plus, if you want to do those ideas to a story, knock your self out!
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. Otherwise i'll be doin t usual til then 
Heh, thx i'd be glad to whenever a idea or two involvin that concept pops up someday n' if u havn't done t job urself
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Ok. Rember, yiu don't even need to run it by me, just drop me a PM with a link when it's finished! That's my only rule!
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I'll try if i remember otherwise i can't promise t PM or link whenever it happens
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Eh, I follow you. I'll notice.
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. Also care to explain ur reason 
? i don't mind 
but, i'm almost always curious on why somepony would follow me 
whenever it does happen of course 
Yah, that's true
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Mm. I'm always curious, too. But, I don't relly have a reason. You found your way to my story without following me, and you seems nice.
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Well, it appeared on my feed list n' t name caught my interest; so i followed for a read. Oh plus thx for followin me and also for the nice compliament
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NP
I do like this. The ending is delightful.
I do think you have a few moments when your writing gets redundant. You repeat things you've already told us, you also sometimes tell things we already know well from watching the show.
I also think the grannies need more dialogue. Most of what we know about them we learn from other characters talking about them.
It's still cute, and I plan to read more of your stories.
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Thanks! Maybe I could've made them talk more, and I noticed the problem with that I repeat things when I read it through yesterday....
Anyway, thanks for the review! Any story for me to review! ^^
So, to be truly honest, I really didn't expect the things that happened. But here is the review for you.
The story flows pretty well and the grammar and spelling are good. Overall, it is written decently. Unfortunately, this is all I can say for pros.
Though it may be mostly on my part, I am not fond of the multiple relations that happen here. First, your story is called Two Pink Pies and yet I find myself reading a completely different story. Your title and description put forth the idea that the story is about Pinkie Pie and her grandmother yet I read an AppleDash story. The idea of the various grandmothers dating one another, even for a time, seems to be a try at a romantic approach for tying the mane six together. I don't think this works and seems to be an excuse to have them, not just be friends, but be lovers.
To move on is the flow, there are some parts that seem to jump to new scenes without much of a reason or explanation as to how or why. Also, there are elements introduced that are hardly or never addressed again in the story. First is the other Apples and their gossip. The rest of the story has no further mention of any pony finding out about Applejack and Rainbow Dash's relation. Plus the fair was a large part in the beginning then turned into a passing piece. Also, as mentioned, Pinkie is hardly mentioned despite the title. Even the grandmothers don't share the light as much as I thought they would or even should.
Ultimately, I feel the story changes from one idea to another mid-telling and begins with Rainbow kissing Applejack. Overall, I would rate the story at a 3.5 out of 10 and, unfortunately, must give this a dislike. I am very sorry for this but I hope you continue to write stories and grow. Good luck in the future.
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Thank you for your honest opinion. I guess my unplanned writing not always turn out that good!
Came for the clop.
Left when I realized it wasn't clop.
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Why do I always forget that I need to fix that error?
Are you actually gonn read the story or not?
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I used to read a lot, but now I don't.
I actually read very little, interestingly enough.
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Oki. If you were to eead one of my fanfics, I'd prefer that you read "The things that really matter...", anyway. This just some wacky nonsens my brain spit out after I read a fanfic of Eqd that I unfortunately can't find anymore....
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I actually have eyes that find and take note of every little error I come across. Not sure I want to embark on this journey just yet.
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Oh! Then I don't think you should read any of this....
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It's not that I take issue with the number of errors, especially for those who don't speak English as a first language. I just recently got through Midnight Sonare's story that hasn't yet been published (after a month of me being lazy and her having the patience of an immortal), and she doesn't speak English as a first language. It was a lot of work, but she makes some really great stories, and I felt it was worth the effort. Once I got focused and actually worked, it wasn't bad at all, too.
That's editing the story. When I read, I still notice everything. I just tend to ignore the errors because I'm not editing/proofreading. It can be detracting, but I've learned to live with it.
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I see. Mine, unfortunately, containe some errors, because I got English as second languahe and I'm still learning...
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Yeah! That's not a big issue.
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Good! Just don't read Sparkling Rainbow Adventures! It was never preread because of time limits and is quite terrible!
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*frolics off to read Sparkling Rainbow Adventures*
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