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shortskirtsandexplosions


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Applejack has always struggled to make ends meet at Sweet Apple Acres. After the chaotic events of the Grand Galloping Gala, she returns home to find her farm experiencing a stroke of good luck. Applejack celebrates her fortune with all her friends, all except for one. Rainbow Dash has gone missing, and Applejack decides to find out why.

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Going to bed now, but tracked because interested and will read tomorrow.

More AppleDash, *Le sigh*

I don't hate this ship.. i just think its repetitive, there is to much of it for my opinion.
I want some unique ones, or more Twilight shipping.

Either of those.
This story is good, or average when you place it among other Appledash ships.
Not to bad, but its just something we have seen many times before.

Cheers
~iraqlobstah

This story is brilliant! I loved it. It was.... A bit sad but still very entertaining. Thanks for writing this amazing story!:ajsmug::rainbowlaugh:

God, this was perfect. Excellent set-up, unique plot device, great mystery, awesome writing, and a helluva good way to wind down for the evening.

I was going to skip over this until I saw the author.

Time to read...

Rather good fic, very sweet, and the romance is so subtle its easy to miss (which is a nice change of pace from it being in your face all the time).

Amazing Parallels, a rather surprising twist, good characterization, and believable dialogue.

Overall pretty entertaining, but after all the praise I throw at you I can't help but feel that I owe you criticism now and then (aside from mechanical issues, which there were very few of here).

First off, this may just be me, but it's a bit obvious what's going to happen. As soon as all the apples sold out for no good reason, bam - Dash did it. Then it makes the development in the middle drag a bit. Especially the earlier, business-y development stuff. That part could use some trimming.

AJ having a few bits to spare for coffee is an excellent replay/reversal of the earlier scene, and the "I reckon you already have" line is absolutely brilliant, but then the very last bit of the ending - the two or three paragraphs after that line - are a bit weaker. They could use some beefing-up or maybe move things around a bit to put that line closer to the end. I think the fewer sentences you have after that one, the better. I can see how a little bit needs to go afterward, but I'd try to limit it as much as possible.

Whatevers. Story is already published and I'm not going to recommend changing something that people have already read. Besides, it's pretty durn good as-is and doesn't NEED those changes. I'm just trying to offer something besides "U R TEH GREETEST."

You are, though.

*Edit* Okay, that line is a lot more than "two or three paragraphs" from the end right now I am bad at offhandedly estimating how much I just read. Point stands.

This was a rather fun read, my only real gripe is more a product of my suspension of disbelief, or lack thereof. I just dont see Dash, Element of Loyalty, an integral part of saving all of equestria twice getting any kind of punishment, especially for a crime that only warrants community service. But like i said thats more on me than it is you. I still think it was a fun little story.

3am but I read it! :pinkiesad2:
Really liked it. Element of Loyalty indeed. AJ and RD were spot on! However, you laid down the Rarity way too thick. She's fancy, not Sex and the City. :pinkiehappy:
A good happy ending to wrap it up too so I can sleep with nice thoughts. Thanks! :twilightsmile:

265956
Tracking a completed story?

OOOHHH, if you need me ill be in the Angry Dome, being angry because this
guy bought a stupid dome and I bought a crappy Angry Dome.

Cheers
~iraqlobstah

A brilliant story, but the ending is a little open for my tastes. In fact, I could count on one hand how many sentences I could take out of this story in order to remove the romance tag.

To be honest, the romance bit is all but non-existent because there's nothing there. That's my gripe. For a one-shot this long, you couldn't actually live up to the romance tag you slapped on?

I like it, but this just irks me. Too open-ended and it doesn't have any romance despite it being labeled a romance. A thumbs up, but no fav.

Good day.

very good story!
I totally :heart: it!
keep up the awesome work!

PS I saw this on EQD, but wanted to read it here, as I can put it into my list of stories already read/ need to read

Definitely good, definite friendshipping. Honestly I could see this as a companion episode to The Last Roundup. That sort of solution is very Rainbow Dash, which I think is why this story appealed to me so much. It's not very often where you see a fic where one of the mane six is genuinely at their best, in a social context rather than an adventure one, and I appreciate it.

That said, yeah, this isn't really a romance properly; I don't think FimFiction has a friendshipping tag, do they? Either way I'd agree with yanking it.

After reading: Well done.

Looks like someone is aiming to explode several thousand hearts with their writing! :heart: :pinkiehappy:

Not really a fan of Appledash, but I greatly enjoyed this story. Usually I see AJxRD and move on, but something pushed me to give this a try... glad I did, it was a good one.

Lovely story. Loved the ending.

RainbowJack Daniels!

Great story but a little open ended on the romance side of things. Non the less an amazing story all around. :moustache:

One of the greatest AppleDash stories ever.

I enjoy the romance undertone, but in my opinion it's obviously not what you were aiming at. Romance doesn't always have to take center stage. This story seems to be about strong friendship first and foremost, and the lengths someone is willing to go to to help out their friends, whether those friends admit they need help or not. (and getting in over your head)

The length made it a bit dry, to be honest, but a very enjoyable read.

This feels...incomplete...you ended it far to early IMHO...I'd've gotten Rainbow's community service at the end (I mean seen that it was completed)

Nice but I want more!

266047 Meh. Who cares if they track a completed story or fave a two star? I don't. And really, you shouldn't either. :ajbemused:

And as for your earlier statement here: 265731

Sure. AppleDash is pretty over done. Sure, Fluttershy's shipped with 99% of all ponies - including OCs. Sure. Rainbow Pie is most likely the second most over done, or maybe MoonLight, Celstilight, or TwiDash. Who cares? Why do you care? I don't really see the point in saying a fic isn't as good as it could be just because the plot's a bit over done.

That'd be like me saying that Fallout: Equestria is stupid because it's over done. That line of thinking doesn't make sense, not even to me. So, please. Get the lightning rod out of your ass, and stop pretending to be shocked at the fact that AppleDash is a popular ship.

Anyways, This was a great story, man! Gonna have to read some more of your work, methinks! :yay: Imma Fave this, for sure!

395142 ... :ajbemused: Y'know, I'm really, really sick of your attitude. If you wish to be ignorant, please go right ahead, but... do it somewhere else. Please. I rather enjoy having intelligent conversations with others.

Good day to you, sir.

395188

You see? What is with that attitude? I'm asking you nicely to just be a little more ethical, or whatever, and not just be a dick. I was a complete asshole when I was a kid, and I know what it's like to be both the bully and the bullied. Now, I'm not saying that you are a bully, nor am I saying that anyone is bullying you, as far as I can tell. But, I really would rather not get into a gif/jpeg fight with someone on the internet. So, please. In this community of love and tolerance, can you not throw slander at me, or any of my fellow bronies? I am, in no way, shape, or form, a faggot. I am not a bundle of sticks, or a cigar, nor am I a homosexual. And I do not like being called a peasant, especially by someone who is either in the middle working-class, or the poor class. If you are, in some strange way, in the rich class, then I must implore you to show some dignity in your status and not be a Blueblood. If you would please just act as you wish others to act towards you, then I believe we can ascertain a common ground upon which we can either agree to disagree, or at least be respectful towards each other.


And if you really want me to pull the card, then I shall:

I live on a twelve acre plot of land, the house alone in which I live being valued at 3.5 million dollars. We also have two other houses that we have rented out. One with five acres, and the other with only three. We are financially secure. So, in all fairness, I am no peasant. But that doesn't mean that I treat anyone else as if they were, and neither should you.

Once again, good day to you. Please let this find you in good health.

395354 My god you're a douche... pretty much a troll who can't take being wrong, and that's were the pictures come in, am I right?

395444 Well, at least you proved me right. Dumbass. :ajsmug: Plus, you're pretty much the type of brony that makes us look REALLY bad.

395444 You really have no life. I am now done. You've destroyed one of the last vestiges I had of faith in Humanity. Thank you, you giant fucking asshole. Have a great life, and I'll see you in hell. Maybe we'll even be roommates in my summer home.

395511:facehoof: My god you're stupid...

395511 Wow, you really got me there. Good job.
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And now, I have stooped to your level. Congratulations.

395547
Lol, the picture is broken

Thanks a bunch dude, im glad this
pleased you so much.

Cheers
~iraqlobstah

395549My job here is done. Have fun with the rest of your lonely, virgin life. :twilightsmile:

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No seriously, Cheers bro.

Perhaps we shall cross paths again some day!

Cheers
~iraqlobstah

395549 Hey, did you know that trolling is out of style? 99% of people do it and you're not doing it successfully. I suggest you come back with something better. Calling people gay is way too overused. Besides, what's so wrong about being happy?

Trey

395567

As much as I hate to say it,
You're really just all the trolls.
And with the way you play it,
I forgot it's April Foal's.

So to you my good man,
Or as good as you can be,
I'm not going to make a stand,
I'm going to let my anger free.

So this poem to you,
I write with no remorse,
For I know deep in my soul,
That petulance is your main course.

So I bid thee adieu,
as I crawl back into my cave,
It was nice to meet you,
Whether or not if we behaved.

I am now saying goodbye,
To you and all your troubles,
For when I'm on the fly,
Why trot o'er ground that bubbles?

So, FUCK OFF.

395615
Took ya long enough to realize that.

Cheers to you to, bud :trollestia:

395613
Hey Did you know that replying to the
trolls only feeds their power?
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^ Please let this be you

Cheers
~iraqlobstah

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There. Three random as all fuck pictures. Love them. Hate them. Just don't berate them. I'm feeling dead, I need to eat. So, give me head, or play in the street.

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