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15 years ago, Twilight said goodbye to her friends and stepped through the mirror for the last time. Now, it's finally time for a Twilight to once more attend Canterlot High. But she is not THE Twilight - she is her daughter. At Canterlot High, Twilight will meet the next generation of legendary friends, and enemies. But when the pressure increases and the stakes are high, important realizations will be made.
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Awesome first chapter, I love how the next generation of girls had the g1 pony colors and names. Keep up the good work, and I can't wait to read the next chapter!
Paradise
5815060
Yay! thanks!
Just curious, who are the Ponies?
5815254 G1 main six, and OC, EQG main six, EQG Luna.
Nice! I like this already!
5815265 These are the once tagged for? Sadly they cn't exactly give hints towards these things in the tags, we already lack half of the cast. I still need to find Surprise, for starters.
Hmm, on the poster or cover image?
5815286
Yeah. And don't worry, the others will appear soon.
5815284 sarcasm?
5815359 what? Why would you think that's sarcasm? I like this story. I didn't mean to sound sarcarstic...
I looove it, when will there be more?!
5815400 because you used trollestia
5815444
Thanks! And you bet your ass it will. Next chapter should be up some time after the easter.
5815357 Does this indicate there will be 13 ponies in this show? Aside from the OC and others the tags show-case?
I need to dig up the originals to see who and what the counterpart G1's would be like.
Am I correct, assuming you include all known about the characters in both films, now?
As a side note, the second film kind of rearanged the expression Mane Six, just pointing it out.
Looks as if Sunset are taking the pint, or at least co-leader of the group from the consert point.
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...ohh, sorry about that.
5818698
It's okay
5818131
The main characters will be a bext generation of EQG main six, Sunset included, which, all besides Sunset's daughter, got their looks from ponies in G1
who are the fathers to this
5834733
To who?
So if Twilight Sparkle last visited the mirror dimension 30 moons ago, how come the children don't know of her other than photos? It'd be strange for the human mane 5 to hide their children from her.
5865109 Well, 30 moons is a logn time. the kids are 15/16. They were babies when she visited the last time, and odn't recall it.
5865128 30 moons is only 2 and a half years. Every moon refers to a lunar cycle which is roughly a month. I feel like twilight would have visited more often than what your implying, unless she was too busy with royal duties or something.
5865479
Guess I'll refine that part. But I still hope this does not ruin the story.
And 5865109 if you downvoted the story because of that, it's really uneccesary...
Huh, I still found small grammar errors. (Nothing big, I can fix it if you'd like :twilisgtsmile:)
But so far, I like the story ^_^
So far, I like it :) (Very small errors. I don't even think you had any this chapter)
5865819
Thank you. (Yes please )
5865859
Yay!
A few errors, but definitely good so far.
5890487
Thanks.
other than that I didn't see any errors at all. I'm enjoying it so far and can't wait to see where it leads.
5890508
Great you enjoy it. I need to fix that
The only error was in the chapter name.
Surprise is Pinkie's Daughter in this world? Never would have guessed that.
5890557
Lol
XD
Bleeeggghc...
5902859 XD
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Hi there, thanks for the review. Grammar, as is the 'biggest' problem according to you, IS a well known struggle, as I am, in case you haven't noticed, not American nore British and do not have English as first language. But I will start looking for an editor before promoting this again, thank you.
5928026 Thank you!
Drop the so
Pretty sure it should be once,"
Try She was aware of her cousin's worries or She knew about her cousins worries
Try going on this journey
Perhaps you should try returns?
Maybe try she swore she could feel the pain down in her bones but it's just a suggestion
Curled
Equestria.
a white
[Wasanaged
Drop the first comma, and it should be Twilight decided and alternatives
She
Maybe try Or face-palmed.What ever it was called in this universe.
Was
It's okay.It's just that...This Twilight Sparkle you mentioned...She's my mother
Remember always big letter after .
I (Remember, you ALWAYS write I with big I. Never i.
)
Okay, I went really grammar-natzi on these, but I seriously love the story so far!
It's really original.
I will do the rest tomorrow.
5948569 thanks! :)
5948569 Hi, not to stress, but have you had time to edit anymore?
5902859 Congratulations, you just ruined school lunch meat for me!
Adagio and Crescendo. LOL! Couldn't have done it better myself... i think. Loved that!
6024955
Yeah. That's their names.
6005578 (Sorry, I didn't get a notification about your comment!
)
But I have some time again, here is the rest of chapter one errors:
aware of
managed
Try: all or some instead of any
Luna,"
Truly
There
Drop the a
What are the news?
I remember it annoyed the teachers a lot last term,"
upon hearing
I'll do the next chapters whenever I can.
6029510 okay thanks
That was good. Wish it was longer but I take what I can get..
6164213 don't worry, there will be more of 'em, short things like these first, then full-blown chapters.
I'm taking a break I just review your story up to this point I'll do the rest later... Into then later.
6631536 you're reviewing my story? Nice! Where can I see it