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I'm a writer of fluff, kibitzer, and especially interested in canon AU: Equestria Girls, the comics, etc. They are fun to play with.

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This story is a sequel to Mr. Lonelyheart Meets Miss Lovestruck


While recovering from a punctured romance, Braeburn joins Cheese Sandwich on the road. Despite their differences, Bromance is Magic, but one upscale pizza restaurant and one hipster reviewer might break them.

Implied CheesePie going on in the background; rated Teen for some heavy innuendo in Chapter Two and Chapter Three.

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Comments ( 47 )

I didn't expect such a slow build-up, but I can't wait for the next chapter. Loved the bit about playing songs for himself! And of course playing what I can only assume is the Smile song on the ferry. Braeburn is gonna have to calm poor Cheese down though, isn't he? If Trenderhoof is at that restaurant, they're all in trouble. :ajsmug:

Dun, dun, dunnnnnn! :rainbowlaugh:
I'm really looking forward to more of this bromance - it's so unexpected, ya can't help but love it! :rainbowkiss:

I knew this was going to be great. But oh man... this is twice as good as what I was expecting. :rainbowlaugh:

Also, I totally believe Trenderhoof would do dis. But yeah, he needs to stop loving fruit this much. Or not. I'm down with it. :trollestia:

I wish I could do the thing with the art and the drawing because I would totally do that. :raritydespair:
Oh, well. :ajsleepy:
This was a really nice story, as expected of you. I enjoyed it. :pinkiehappy:

This chapter was the best birthday present ever. Thank you! :pinkiehappy:

---also, I would probably commit insecticide to see art of Braeburn, Trenderhoof, and Cheese hanging out in a bar, so if you're dying to do that, don't let me stop you.

:ajsleepy: I haven't really drawn in awhile. I could try, but it would never be up to snuff. This story absolutely deserves that image though.

4138275 Really? Well, Pinkie, Cheese and I wish you a happy birthday, and you certainly can consider it a present!--especially since you kicked off the Braeburn/Cheese bromance in the first place!

The art is just --- it doesn't even have to be *for this*--it's just something I'd love to see because it would be hilarious.
4137575 Thanks so much! It was supposed to be a tiny detour, and it turned it this long thing, but I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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Yep! It's the truth! And thanks. (Sorry to spring that on you; that was just my honest response.) :pinkiesmile:

And what better way to spend a birthday than to read about party ponies? :pinkiehappy:

The art is just --- it doesn't even have to be *for this*--it's just something I'd love to see because it would be hilarious.

True, they just need the art, be it related or not. I would also commit insecticide for that picture. It would be staggeringly beautiful. Perhaps in the Salt Block Saloon even? But any bar would work! I wonder if they'd play some bar games? Cards might be interesting too. :yay:

4138716 I was going to say that Trenderhoof doesn't hang out in the Salt Block, but if he's temporarily living in Appleloosa, he would. Oh, dang, he would be like those tourists who wear the giant hats, wouldn't he? And tons of silverwork, too. But I bet Trend could smoke them both at poker.

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Yes. He'd wear the most awful outfit. :rainbowlaugh:

And I imagine Cheese and Braeburn would be decent at poker, though I'm sure Cheese has tells that he can't entirely shake (his bluffs are probably epic when he pulls them off), and Brae is probably overconfident at times. It wouldn't surprise me if Trend was really good at it, simply because I have a feeling that he likes social gaming and it would come as an amusing surprise to most people. :scootangel:

*Grins and applauds* Bravo :) This was great fun to experience.

4147159 Thank you! I'm very glad you liked it.

I hate Trenderhoof. He's so dumb!!!:flutterrage:

Yep, I hate Trenderhoof. Don't know why, don't care.:ajbemused:

PONYACCI! WAHAHEY WHO'S READY TO LAUGH?!!:pinkiehappy:

Can I use the whole "Trenderized" thing? I`m planning on writing " The Amazing Adventures of Cheese Sandwich". It would be a nice story element.:raritywink:

4246994 Sure! Just stick it in an author's note or something, if you can.

:heart::heart::heart::heart: I loved this I could totally see this happening... bravo! :twilightsmile:

4337726 Thanks! I don't think a lot of people have read this one. I'm very glad when people do.

Your stories deserve far more attention than they've gotten. I've read stories that had ten times the views and likes that weren't half as good as this.

4397821 Aw, thanks! I'm always thrilled when someone likes this fic in particular. It may not have adawwwable foals or shipping--just three stallions getting stupid in a pizzaria--but it's one of my personal favorites.

“Au contraire. It is my business to ‘tell the difference,’ and vive it, may I say.”

This sentence is hilariously and pretentiously bilingual. It's especially funny because the use of "vive" by itself in the final clause is so sheerly gratuitous. Totally in-character for Trenderhoof.

“No!” Cheese exclaimed in horror. “Um, Braeburn,” he winced, and forced himself, “honey, we don’t want you to overdo it, do we? You know how you get when you overdo it.”

I get the impression that Braeburn has absolutely no idea just how Cheese is trying to drive Trenderhoof away. :rainbowlaugh:

“Now this here,” said Braeburn, pointing to the first small glass with the tip of his hoof, “is Calvados. This here is scumble—that’s mostly apples—and then these four over here are applejack.” Trenderhoof flinched. “You know applejack?”

“We’ve met,” he said.

Ha! :rainbowlaugh: What makes this even funnier is that Braeburn knows the real Applejack fairly well for kin who lives in another town.

“Sh. . .sl. . . yes,” nodded Trenderhoof, pushing the sleeves of his argyle sweater up. The leather patches made it stick. “Say, I’m beginning to feel inspired.”

Green eyes, shaded deep, like a deer fern,

Knows apples, at least, and he can learn,

Surprisingly wise,

Did I mention those eyes?

That interesting stallion named—hic!—Applejack.

Heh, so that's a thing for him, and that's how it comes out when he's drunk. Incidentally, the poem might have worked better with "pony" instead of "stallion" because of the contradiction of gender otherwise, but -- hey, he's drunk.

“I have always wanted,” Trenderhoof said, eyes watering, “to live on a real farm. An honest, authentic, working apple farm. I love apples. Absolutely adore them. Do you know I once had an apple so rare that they thought it was extinct? Have I told you this before? I ate,” he glanced down at his hoof, which was moving around on its own, “four of them.” Braeburn smacked his hoof on the back of his head. “Ow!”

“Why in the hay would you do a fool thing like that? Why didn’t you plant it?"

Applejack was just too nice to do that in "Simple Ways." Though I'm sure she thought about doing that.

Braeburn rolled his eyes. “Why does everypony assume I’m so naïve? I come from a small town. Everypony knows everything about everypony else’s business. You couldn’t keep a secret if you tried. Mr. Trenderhoof, I could tell you I’m sorry, but I just don’t like stallions, and that would be the truth. I could tell you I’m sorry, but I just don’t think you’re all that pretty, and that would be the truth, too, only it would be kind of mean to say so. But the real truth is that I just got my heart broken pretty bad, and I think I broke somepony else’s, which is worse. I did some stupid stuff, and I’d be really stupid if I did some more.”

Oh well, that's a relief -- that Braeburn caught on quickly to Trenderhoof's bisexual attraction. Otherwise things would have gotten much more awkward. Good thing that they live in a society that basically accepts variant sexualities.

Hey, I like the idea of Braeburn dude-ranching. Given the nature of apple farming, he could keep running the place as a working farm too at the same time. Actually, Sweet Apple Acres could do the same thing too, but the danger of having guests carried off by monsters from the Everfree might put a damper on that idea. By contrast, you have to travel deep into the desert from Appleloosa to get into really dangerous territory.

Yep. You take that card to Silversaddle, Duke of Appleloosa. Biggest ranch in the area. He’ll be more than happy to take you in, stay as long as you like.”

Ah, you've been reading the comics. :pinkiehappy:

“There’s a Duke of Appleloosa? I never heard of that,” said Cheese, “and I’ve been there a few times now.”

“Is it a new title?” asked Trenderhoof.

Braeburn shrugged. “Beats me. Around Appleloosa, we’ve always just called him The Duke.”

Heh ... I'm old enough that I remember when they used to play a lot of John Wayne Westerns on the major channels.

“I told you I love you like a brother. You think I was just blowing smoke? I’m telling you, you have kin in Appleloosa. You don’t come see me, I’m gonna come and see you, like it or not. You know how I am about kinfolk.”

Awww ... That's incredibly nice. :pinkiesmile:

“Hold it,” he said. “Does that mean I have to be kin with the whole Apple family now? Because I don’t think I’m up for that.”

That's kind of ironic, given the genealogy of the pony with whom he's fallen in love ...

I really like the way that you turned this into a win-win scenario for everypony. That is very much in the spirit of the show and of the specific characters. And you got that Trenderhoof is just annoyingly pretentious, rather than villainous -- in fact, you dissected his character and took his claim to admire Earth Ponies seriously, which is more than I had thought to do. But actually, given the degree to which he was smitten in "Simple Ways" with Applejack, who is sort of the Ultimate Earth Pony -- that makes a lot of sense.

I also like the way you characterized Braeburn. Tough, but nice and not letting it get in the way of expressing softer emotions when he needs to do so. And smart, which makes sense given that he's one of the more prominent Apples.

You start small, and make it grow. Everything’s gotta start little before it grows big.

And with every revolution, we move a little further! :rainbowdetermined2:
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Sorry about that. :twilightsheepish: Though earth pony magic as Spiral Energy would certainly explain party pony accessory conjuration.

In any case, I really liked this story, from including other boroughs in Noo Yoke to the horror that is a gentrified hole-in-the-wall to further insight into Cheese Sandwich's mother. Thank you for it. Now to delve further into your work! :pinkiehappy:

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There is quite a lack of stallions just hanging around with other stallions doing guy/stallion things. I realize this is obvious as all of this is based on a mostly female cast, but when moments like this come up they always entertain me to no end.

There is another good story with Time Turner, Thunderlane, Big Mac, and Caramel (and Cranky and Spike) just sitting around playing cards, drinking and doing guy things. It's The Temporal Manipulations of a Victorious Timekeeper, one of my all time favorites.:rainbowkiss:

Whenever I read

Western Hay, Grain and Feed

this is what I think of:
11points.com/images/simpsonssigns/sneeds.jpg

I might have joined FIMfiction just to post this picture.
i.imgur.com/cN30gr4.gif?1

4864943 EEEEK!

You have NO IDEA how much I wanted a picture of that scene! That is amazing!

Today is officially a Good Day. :pinkiehappy:

I hate TrenderHoof. CheeseSandwich should pull an hammer out of HammerSpace and knock some sense into TrenderHoof. Unlike his cousin AppleJack, Bræburn does not have enough sense to stay away from this AppleLover. I just hope that TrenderHoof does not ruin Appleloosa. If he does, ¡the Appleloosans will wish that the Bison would have destroyed the town!

Once TrenderHoof writes his article, ¡millions of wannabes will flood Appleloosa! ¡Appleloosa is doomed!

It is sad that CheeseSandich contemplates his drink with pink cottoncandy it it. :pinkiesad2:

Cheese and his attempts to act like a "jealous boyfriend" just make me laugh. So hard. :rainbowlaugh:

Hipsters?! NOoooooooo:raritycry:

After he’d puffed out his thick brown tail last thing at night and curled up on it, trying to get some sleep

That is an impressive tail ...

“Just for a party?” Funny was serious business, but nopony understood that anyway, except for Pinkie Pie, of course.

And that, in a nutshell, is why they're perfect for one another -- and ill-suited for most other ponies.

He’d done such a great job distracting his mother and telling her stories about real-life cowponies that she’d forgotten to ask Cheese a lot of questions, and there were some he particularly didn’t want to discuss right now.

"So, have you met any nice mares? I'd like to have some grandchildren someday ..."

Heh, at least he could honestly answer "Yes" to "Does she cook ...?"

This was where he remembered it, but instead of a plain storefront and a glass window with a picture of a pizza slice on it, there was tastefully exposed brickwork and tastefully placed stones and a line going out the door, with a tasteful moon-shaped sign reading “Slice of Life.”

It strikes me that Rarity would love this place.

I really like that map to which you pointed.

“Are you aware of how our menu works?”

“Am I— what? How the menu works? I read about food on it, I tell you what I want, and you bring it to me. That’s how a menu works.”

Yep. That's how most menus "work." When I see a menu doing anything else, I back away slowly, keeping an eye on the menu, and head for the door.

“Trenderhoof,” he said, “is Equestria’s biggest party pooper. He can ruin a party just by being at it.

He's the Anti Party Pony! :pinkiegasp:

“Au contraire. It is my business to ‘tell the difference,’ and vive it, may I say.”

This is such a perfectly-pretentious sentence right there that I am in awe of you for composing it.

Like that Tatzelwurm entrail casserole he wrote about in the same issue of Gallop and Prance where he gave up cupcakes.

Blergh. And I'm an omnivore.

“Oops, sorry,” he said, and carefully leaned the rubber chicken back against his almost full glass.

The line between comedy and cosmic horror can be quite thin ...

5265616 Oh, no--Cheese's Mom already has a nice mare all picked out for him--her best friend's daughter, Balcony Flowerbox. The face that they can't stand each other doesn't matter. So any leading questions about mares he's met would have an overtone of "you better not have."

But she does want to know, partly because she's really nosy and partly because when Miss Totally-Inappropriate-and-Probably-No-Better-Than-She-Should-Be inevitably dumps Cheese, because of course she will, she can be a nice supportive mother and point out that she told him so and that he should have married Balcony Flowerbox, but luckily she is still available! And this is a serious future possibility for Cheese, actually, under certain circumstances.

Of course Rarity would like this place. It's been Trenderized.

5265648 I read that Trenderhoof is partly modeled on Anthony Bourdain. Hence his issues with substances (which I'm happy to say he's going to get some help with) and his willingness to eat anything. The Tatzelwurm entrail casserole is a toned-down version. Straight from Wikipedia:

Known for consuming exotic local specialty dishes, Bourdain has eaten sheep testicles in Morocco, ant eggs in Puebla, Mexico, a raw seal eyeball as part of a traditional Inuit seal hunt, and a whole cobra – beating heart, blood, bile, and meat – in Vietnam. According to Bourdain, the most disgusting thing he has ever eaten is a Chicken McNugget,[39] though he has also declared that the unwashed warthog rectum he ate in Namibia and the fermented shark he ate in Iceland are among "the worst meals of [his] life."

I told you I'd get to reading this. I love the CheesePie a whole bunch, but darnnit if I'm not loving this bromantic pair-up you have going here.:heart::pinkiehappy: At least they can both agree on visiting Ponyville whenever Cheese needs to. (Haven't delved too deep into your stuff yet, but I like the concept of your party-pony magic and how it works.)

Couldn't get past Braeburn mentioning scumble without giving you a thumbs up and a Captain American-esque, 'I understood that reference'. If it's indeed what I'm thinking, wonder how they'll be standing after.:derpytongue2:

7085730 Thank you!

"Flash and Trend Steal All Your Waffles" is sort of a sequel.

This here is scumble—that’s mostly apples

YAY, A Discworld shout out!

And I love the whole speech Braeburn gives Trenderhoof about not being interested in that way and making the offer for Trenderhoof to go work in Appleloosa. It was brilliant and so him!

Braeburn shook his head, clicking his tongue. “I’m surprised at you, Cheese. You’re an Earth Pony. You know how this works.” Seeing Cheese’s perplexity, he explained, “You start small, and make it grow. Everything’s gotta start little before it grows big.

For all his faults, Braeburn is an Apple and has those moments of Apple wisdom.

And that moment where Braeburn calls Cheese a brother and said he'll have kin in Appleloosa... I teared up.

Braeburn shrugged. “Beats me. Around Appleloosa, we’ve always just called him The Duke.”

Ah, a John Wayne reference.
Classy.:moustache:
This was a really good story!

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