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Cancellation of Casualties of War
Twilight and her friends embark on a mission, one in which failure would result in an almost certain destruction for all of Equestria. The mission's difficulty only intensifies when their friendships are strained and their trust in each other put to the test. Surrounded by betrayal, mysteries and deception, the mane 6 must choose their allies wisely and find the true meaning to the Elements of Harmony
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Don't sell yourself short. You are a better writer than most on this site. Are there mistakes and areas to improve? Yes. This prologue, however, is tense and cinematic. I liked it. I want to know what happens next.
dang pretty awsome hopefully we can find out next chapter what happened to them and what they were fighting.
its really a good story please continue on it if you can.
Man, that was pretty great. I enjoy sad stories, and this looks like one of them. So far it's proven that this might end up being something great. keep it up!
got me hooked, can't wait for the next part because this sounds very intense.
375699 this
The title for this story is from a movie during the vietnam war, where a group of U.S. soldiers rape a vietnamese girl.
375836 That I uh.... I didn't know....
Thanks for all the positive comments guys, really means a lot to me :)
376936 Shocking? Yes, but if you like the title, go with it. I digress, this is actually good for someone new to fanfic. Although you could tell us as to why are they in this scenario.
I do hope you write more.
I will :) Thanks to you all I'm more than happy to continue writing this. + the idea still won't leave my head ><
great story so far (i know this is th eprolog) but in the atual story do make this alot longer per chapter (perahps in the tenthousand word range(well the story could do that grante di have trouble getting 1000 words per chapter) not realy but make it a couple thousan dplease an dat leqast 6 chapters long i dont want a talented author throwing in the towel to early in a story with great potinal so keep up the good work (srry if seem like a jerk im still sad about your other story :P )
typos typos everywhere
I know this chapter is extremely lacklaster from the previous chapter. This is always the hardest part for me, getting to the action scenes so please bear with me on this painfully bad-written journey.
Nice!
As a great man once said, "Write lots and lots of shit!"
You're doing well for a newcomer (although I'm one myself)
haha thanks :) I'm still trying to improve as much as I can. The support has been really great!
What was with the new names you gave to some of the mane 6,were they undercover names? Anyway great chapter!
OMG HAHAHA THEY APRIL FOOLED THE WEBSITE! THEY CHANGED ALL WORDS WITH PINKIE TO SURPRISE ETC!!! HAHA it'll set back tomorrow... i hope
Oh Luna...
This cannot end well
hmmm i wonder if twilight knows any fighting magic in this story or if its forbidden to nonmilitary ponys like in others (i support the right to bear horns!)
412726 that wouldn't stop twilight.
also, I sense impending Flutterrage
Pinkie shouldn't forgive AJ
i must say since i was linked here through funnyjunk i've loved this story.. please upload soon i cant wait to read it some more and find out what happens
460007 Hello fello funnyjunker! Glad you like it! It'll be updated about every 4-5 days :)
AJ is orange. You called her yellow.
499126 Whoops sorry, wasn't thinking clearly at 3am in the morning.
Thanks! 
you got a mistake in the frist line.(Twilight, Pinkie Pie and Applejack ascended the stone steps ) (it sould be Twilight, Pinkie Pie and Rarity ascended the stone steps ) as applejack is with RD unless you changed it?
other then that it was good
I need to go read some Flutterpie shipping now...
528950 Yes that was a mistake. Thank you for pointing it out ^^
529685 Haha there is not really any shipping in this story (even though it looks like it, it'll be explained in the next chapter) but yes, Flutterpie, Appledash and Flutterdash are 3 of the most awesome ships
aww i was expecting twilight to blow that generals head off then his replacement would come and they would be on thier way being chased but at some point i want this to happen
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...this is going in my read later due to the cover pic
653997 I do hope you enjoy it!
sweet update keep it up bro anyway atleast rainbow dash has broken the stupid controll over her. that i'm happie about.
659822 Thanks! Hopefully the other updates will come quicker :)
661071 agreed
didn't know you'd go this far with the story, bravo!!
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And the story still has a LOT more to tell ;)
YES!!! You didn't use lines like the purple maned pony again!!!!
If you don't remember me that lines gona sound fucked up to you... But anyways good job! Next chapter
381962 can't help it, simple plot development
702697 I remember :D I'm really cutting them down!! ^^ Prepare for a new chapter either up today or tomorrow!
"That time I misplaced the oven... Perfect title for your next fic
War Ensemble - Slayer
Happy National Day Of Slayer! FUCKIN' SLAYER!
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nice to see you again :D \m/
I liked this chapter, making rainbow dash go against her element, nice
460007 brohoof fellow funnyjunker /)
You specifically added the "white space" for us funny Junkers didn't you?
708411 Thank you!
709142 Sadly, I'm gonna have to admit that wasn't for the FJers :(
i really hope these griffons are friendly and i also hope rainbow survives anyway doo keep going on this story is fabulus and your getting the characterations dead on.
I read
"the dark sky seamed to be get darker than twilight."
I was like "da heck that is so out of context" then I reread it, and felt stupid lol