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Oh, shit. General debauchery?!
We got a badass over here:
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4503203 Sorry you didn't like my joke, hope you at least like the fic.
4503249
Not really. For one, it's Fall of Equestria, which is a retarded AU even in the realm of porn. Also the massive walls of text, the boring exposition, the bland setting, and lack of anything vaguely resembling MLP.
Not the worst story ever, to be sure, but this doesn't have much going for it, which it desperately needs since it's FOE.
Loved it.
Considering her purple collar right now... I'd say "not much"^^
Interesting contract. Does Night Light not have a good standing in Canterlot that his slaves are so much in danger of being taken away? Is he not forceful enough? Twilight Velvet's thoughts appear to hint at that.
Ah, another FoE story. If I were to generalise it, it would be "read for the clop, ignore the so called plotline". I meant that for the whole FoE Porniverse, not just this.
Clopwise it's... well it's anthro clop. Storywise... eh so-so
After that Twilight one I vowed never to read a Fall of Equestria fic again in my life, and I will stick to those words. However, I love the uncensored picture over on Derpibooru, so you got my upvote.
One question though: Can you tell me what the differnt collar colors mean?
4503429
Red is willing, Purple is broken beyond basic thoughts and black is unwilling
4503429
Gladly!
Black Collar: Unwilling. This slave would like nothing more than to go back to the way things were (depending on individual temperament, with some serious buttkicking thrown in for good measure). Most are still too cowed to actually fight back.
Red Collar: Willing. This slave willingly submits to the new order. Most start out as thinking they'll receive marginally better treatment (which is true), but tend to slide into a seriously masochistic mindset over time. That is, if they didn't already have one to begin with.
Purple Collar: Broken. This slave has, for whatever reason, lost most of her mind. The vast majority are only barely able to function and completely fixated on sex. They tend to act like loyal, if hopelessly horny pets.
I hope this helps!
4503595 Mhmm, I like that purple one.
oh god,another shitty fall of equestria fic.
worst type of story you could think of writing.
im sorry but it is.
4503333
I have to agree with Jake on the exposition in this story. While not totally boring, it's clunky. Getting into the mindsets of both Velvet and Daring is a little distracting. While it's nice to go into the mind of a mentally broken character, it seems the focus should have been solely on Velvet and her sudden plight. One thing about this prologue is that... well, prologues in generally are never needed. They provide information that setups up the main story, like a structured info dump to help readers catch up on what they need to know for entering the story proper.
This prologue didn't do that. Instead, this comes off more like a first chapter to the main story. No vital information is given other than Velvet is going to look at Rainbow Dash's fanfiction and change it up to be something she can sell. That raises lots of questions, such like "How is black collared Dash allowed to write fanfiction?" and "What kind of stories is she writing that FoE Velvet considers to be bad?"
As Jake said, this isn't bad, but now the story needs to pick up speed and start hitting major selling points. I won't tell you how to write this, I'll just suggest that you tighten the focus on this story and work out some major points on interest. There's not a lot of canon material out there, so you have an opportunity to showcase the FoE world as you continue with Velvet's main conflict of getting a story done that can keep her with her husband/master.
You have a few challenges ahead, never mind the fact that you're writing a story about a character that has to write a story lol.
I wish you the best of luck in this! 
I will also give a bit of advice on the sex scene - break those up into smaller paragraphs to make it easier to follow the sequence of actions.
Great, now I want to read Daring Do and the Cave of the Diamond Dogs.
I personally like FoE because it appeals to so many of my fetishes (oddly enough I find that more dudes hate this verse than us ladies), but I do have to agree with 4503333, the story itself is a bit on the clunky side, and it seems you've made exposition your bitch in this instance. Also, walls of text are not your friend, definite paragraphs are!
All stories have their haters, and this one is no exception. Just because this attracts the exact people who hate it doesn't mean that no one likes it, and those of us that do definitely appreciate when someone goes above and beyond like this. Keep up the work, and don't let people who say otherwise get you down.
And, uh, more knotting, 'kay?
I am a fan of FOE mainly out of curiosity, but this is the first time I've ever seen a fic about it that has Diamond Dogs in a big role. I'm not a giant fan of the Dogs, but their inclusion could make this very interesting.
I'll be watching.
4503595
Indeed it does. Thanks!
nope
4505386
Second.
4504131
none of the artwork I've seen really says that black collars are tortured constantly or they're attempting to break them into red or purple collars. It means they're not trusted and force has to be used on them. If there's some period when she's not being ordered around I see no problem with her writing fic.
4506910
It's probably just my interpretation then. I think all the artwork I saw had black collars always doing something or having something done to them.
4504131
The idea is that Dash wrote the fanfiction before the Fall.
As for its quality, perhaps you'll see.
4506910
Well, the black wing sleeves are designed to be uncomfortable for their wearer, anyway.
4504940
I have a theory about that, drawn up after a very open discussion with a critic: It could be that it speaks to parts of themselves they would rather not acknowledge. Add in some protectiveness and moral outrage, and you have a recipe for a lot of the backlash.
I mean, it is fascinating how most of the creators and fans seem to be either males who take on a female perspective or actual females.
Now this has promise in one degree: Puppies. A pony and a Dog made puppies. That's something that's at least unique. All that Fall bullcrap can get stuffed but there's at least something here.
4521502
For me, it's political. And social. I'm a socialist. If half the population of a nation were actively tortured on category lines (racial, religious, gender, etc) and collared according to how the order percieves them, at the very least I'd write a stern letter. At the most I'd go all Vidal Sasoon/Battle of Cable Street/Free French/White Rose.
4528210
My hypothesis doesn't work in every instance, of course. And I don't have the resources necessary to verify it either. Still, how much if it can be explained thus? It's an interesting question, at least to me.
4528780
You may actually be close to it in some cases. But do beware of casting too wide a net. It's funny when we accuse homophobes of being closet cases but that's not quite factual. There are lots of factors. As I said, it's a matter of sociopolitical things. Plus natural huamnist empathy.
4528210
Except this is just clop. The creators are by no means trying to push the Caribous political beliefs on anyone. The Caribou are presented as victorious villians, who are only victorious because that leads to more kinky sex scenes per Equestrian capita then if they didn't. And FoE is clop. So more kinky is good.
4548076
You have a point there... in a sense. One thing about Fall is that it tries to be all things, and that seldom works out. Thenimpregnation by Diamond Dog gang bang bit is sexy; the devaluation of females is a bit eroticism-draining; knowing the setting includes amputation and foal-fiddling drops an ice cube into the trousers, as it were. General things work for those whose interests are wide but require others to ignore so much they may as well be compartmentalized anyway. There should be a dozen universes just to increase thenaggregate enjoyment. But that gets into some complicated maths.
4550345 You're referring to personal preferences. If something isn't working for the audience, the commissioner is willing to change it up, and has before now. Besides, he has said fillies were written out of the general story.
4557747
That's a big change. Though the question will always remain: what happened to all the small children, the elderly and those not up to the standards of beauty? As well as non-ponies. There's a lack of them that initially made me assume some kind of purge (to be least-inflammitory about it) to purify the land.
4557872 Now, you're confusing unchangeable circumstances with things that can be altered easily. The Sirius coms involve Apple Bloom and Sweetie Belle because non_creepy decided not to include fillies per Tumblr guidelines. More than likely, children will eventually return once he finds a more suitable venue. Although, they won't show up in fics per FIMFic guidelines, thank your stars. :3
I'm starting to think you've more issue with the cohesiveness of the plot than with... Well, in the end, if I can't convince you this series isn't meant to be taken as seriously, nopony can. <.<
4557938
It's presented as a universe. It has no cohesiveness and thus fails at one of its stated (or rather implied) goals. It makes no sense. As a sex thing it goes all pear-shaped because it tries to do too much, without even touching practical questions like what happened to the non-sexy, elders, children, non-ponies and dissidents.
The lack of cohesiveness is just the part I can mention with something approaching objectivity. If I mention it practically reads as sexual dada then there are fewer complaints about the content objections because there was a decent lead-in.
4560466 Alright, enough of this. I talked to you about this on my other fic, it's porn, not my political views. Please stop politicizing the porn I've written. It's not a manifesto, it's not a well thought out article on the current gender dynamics of our society, it's porn that appeals to fetishes. They're not your fetishes and that's fine, but don't come into the comments and spout political diatribe. It's to jack off to, not to invoke deep political discussion. I hope one day to write something that intentionally provokes deep philosophical discussions while being entertaining, but My Little Pony porn I wrote because I like submissive sex is not where it should be springing from.
4561687
If you require. I'm not going to go on because it's not the point. I'd argue the point about politics and ideation but sure, I'll go with your assertion.
4565411 Thank you, I'm going to be writing a non-clop story soon as well, and I'd love for feedback on that, I just ask you don't bring politics of any kind into the comments of my porn.
4569074
My pleasure. It's just hard to manage. In my own life, I've found how politics, philosophy and sexual ideas interact. Plus with mental materialism it is clear all our ideas are ours and not separate from our personalities.
Still, I'll hitnyour page and give you a follow so I can see when you post the story up.
I love the FoE stuff and adding one of my favorite milf mares just makes it so much better! Very nice job and I'll be following to see if it updates again.
Ahhh... I needed a quick release and this was just the thing I needed to read. While I'm still in the afterglow, I'll thumbs up!
4503429
This picture moved you to read this? Could you link it? I can't find it by searching Derpibooru.
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Won't give a direct link, as that is against the rules.
Ugh, I hate this fandom.
When is next chapter?
5248220 Soon. The next chapter's about half way done but will the full thing likely be split in two. Part 1's nearly complete and part 2's been started.
Edit: There was someone here yesterday asking about it again, it's in final editing now and will be posted pending approval by NCN.
5256154 chapter 2 eventually, I hope
5668548 1k+ words written out already and leading into a second, shorter story that'll be worked on intermittently beside this one. Depend on your opinion of a certain creepy unicorn stalker from the show that can't take a hint, you all may love it.
5720702 awesome!
Wow, this fix looks pretty controversial. Still, you've managed to entertain hundreds with it, and that's all that matters.
Again, I see a good story downvoted merely because the people of Fimfiction can't get their heads out of their own asses. Aparently all the other porn out there is ok, but FOE is way too extreme for quite a few people.(a laughable statement seeing as how tame and basic the universe actually is)
Sorry about the others giving you crap, dear author, I liked your story and will give you an upvote to balance out all those negatives.
6123959
I wouldn't say this is the best among FOE stories, I would suggest reading this if you have the time.