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Midnightshadow


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when the ponies first appeared, their offers of ponification and a simpler life in Equestria attracted people from all walks of life. This is one of those stories.

Bonus Chapter incoming!

Chapters (7)
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“With....with that rainbow mane and tail though,” she sounded like she was working up to something, “are you sure that...you’re not...inside...a little pegasus?”

“Quite sure.”

“Do you wanna be?”
:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:
That was buckin hilarious! Nice work. Keep it up!

Most enjoyable so far. I look forward to seeing how you show this next step in the process.

I am soooo glad you put your story here, Midnight. I loved your story, and it is one of the one's that most influenced me to try my own hand at doing a set of Conversion Bureau stories. I enjoyed reading it all over again.

You rock!:yay:

Question, first and foremost, are you planning an continuation of this story? I would very much like to read the progression of young Midnight. If not, I can always read some of your other works, however, I understand your muse leaving you, Thus my inquiry. I await your correspondence.

13526 Midnight also shows up in A Twist in the Tail, and I'm guessing he'll keep getting used.

Normally, an OC like Midnight would be the worst kind of Gary Stu, but somehow you make it work.

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I might continue this proper, one day, but I do have a continuation...

Oh... this could be awesome. Just... Awesome. :twilightsmile:

I would kindly ask for MOAR!!!:flutterrage: please?:fluttershysad:

No comments? This is fanfic is pretty damn decent if you ask me. Was looking for a new fanfic since Chatoyance decided to pursue Alexi's and Caprices rather boring life. I wish there was more humans though, I like seeing the interactions between the two species.

It says "Peachy and Cobalts Excellent adventure" and yet not much peachy and cobalt... Please continue sometime!

Well, That was a good experience!
I finally decided to get my grips on the conversion bureau universe and this story is something which I sincerely do not regret reading!
I will read onwards and I woulds appreciate it if you could pass on my thanks to "Purple Prose" or whoever wrote "First Contact"
As I found the story and technical explanation to be very reassuring and satisfactory in filling the gaps left purposely vague by the original (and this story).
Now I get to see some of the other authors work, I hope it stands up in quality in comparison to this tale.^
Also I like the semi rivalry you have set up between you character and Twilight I am looking forward to seeing some grudging cooperation between them as well as some arguments and conflicts all ending well in the end of course.

About your admittedly most helpful guide (the RRARSETCBEAUSACD) (Yes I do feel welcome and I agree; those metaphors do get tricky at times).
I think that It basically underlines what I will be reading primarily in the first month of the new year :D
However I do have some qualms/remarks about certain features which it exhibits:
In your description of "A twist in the tale- community service" you have "When she breaks into a Bureau to steal some Potion and is caught, he downs it. She wakes up" I think that the underlined she would be better (and probably was intended as) he; the twist rather showing itself at the second Italicized she.
In the description of "The Breaking Point" the it is funnily enough broken off by the new page divider this leaves us with:
"The Human Liberation Front has been pursuing its agenda of pony" And this ends up as humorous and horribly wrong in the apparent meaning.
"Founding fics" why are they only listed at the near end? and what Lore do they each encompass respectively?
The "Random" section why is there only a single fic in there (I want MOAR random!) that said I really like the looks of said fic in accordance with it's desc...

I think i bruised my forehead facehoofing so hard at Dash's last line... Now I feel bad for not reading this sooner!

I like your theory on the reason why human technology but not humans can cross the Barrier.

113418 Same here!

... Is it sad that I didn't notice what Dashie said/meant until she muttered to herself later?

~ Moonstone, Minstrel of Equestria

HUZZAH! *Continues on to chapter 3*

O.o

That's all I've gotta say 'bout that....

~ Moonstone, Minstrel of Equestria

I LOVE that song! *Keeps reading avidly*

~ Moonstone, Minstrel of Equestria

HUZZAH! A cutie mark! And the peasants rejoiced!

~ Moonstone, Minstrel of Equestria

... I have to say, I was confused! I read the second part first, so I kinda thought that Midnight and Twilight were going to become a thing! XD Still, that ONE scene with the uh... The punch makes a bit more sense now! XD

~ Moonstone, Minstrel of Equestria

OH NOES! That... THAT MAKES SENSE! STOP MAKING SENSE! IT'S MAGIC! IT'S NOT SUPPOSED TO MAKE SENSE!

~ Moonstone, Minstrel of Equestria

(hasnt been updated in 2ish months) PLZ CONTINUE! :flutterrage::pinkiehappy:

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It's on the back-burner, so to speak, but it will be continued in some format.

Wow, Dash was coming onto Midnight pretty hard there. Talk about moving fast.

You should've named the treasure-hunter humans. I vote for Splat and Squish

Princess Luna, the Goddess of Night raising the moon? Pfft, that's nothing check out this! *pulls out a flashlight* Behold! I have brought light!.....After I find the batteries!

I liked the story and I'll definitely look into the next few chapters. The one downside is Twilight seems a little ooc to me. I can understand some frustration, but then it just keeps going. To the point I was wondering if she was Discorded to act so bitchy.

Well the expansion does neatly fix the huge plothole from the original fic. Nicely done.

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I needed a foil to bounce off of, and a frustrated Twilight was too much fun to pass off...

I'm not positive, but I don't think that the security on his bank account should be able to be overwritten so easily. I mean, Couldn't anyone have done that Adjustment to get into anyone's account?

I thought those thugs were pretty well written. I think this is my favorite part of the story. The gory turn out caught me by surprise. I was so sure Mindight was going to stop the bullests with his mind. That would have been so badass:rainbowlaugh:

386352 No it seemed like a typical Twilight meltdown to me.

I enjoy frustrated Twilight. :twilightangry2: Now she knows what it's like to be threatened with replacement. :moustache:

... I. F******. Hate. SHIP-FICS. DO NOT MAKE THIS A SHIP FIC.

I JINXED IT!!!

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