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This story is a sequel to Who Wants To Be An Alicorn?
What's a poor blank-flanked filly to do when she wakes up as an alicorn? That's exactly what Apple Bloom is asking after she somehow grows a pair of wings overnight. Needless to say, hilarity ensues.
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Okay, definitely a good comedy story. An upvote and a follow for you!
Wait...she's stuck in a time loop?
She deserves the love. She hasn't gotten it.
And, for the ending? Here we go again. Or a time loop.
She shoulda put diamond tiara in a dungeon for her amusement
This story rushes through very quickly, especially early on. Scenes come and go so fast that it's hard to get invested in anything that happened. Plus, there's some "Lavender Unicorn syndrome" going on.
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Could be why it seemed rushed.
And a horn too......
She was an earth pony after all..
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Congratulations!
I won't lie This is a great concept buut a bit rushed. its good for a one shot.... but it could be so much more if it was expanded upon. Such as now that AB is a princess what does she do to Diamond Tiara...
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I don't think it's actually a time loop, I think it was just the authors way of saying "This aint getting any easier"
Thanks for all the positive feedback everyone!
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Thanks for the screencap! That's my fist featured story and I've been kinda away all day, so it's nice to be able to have a record of it!
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To be honest I was getting worried about the length -- it was only ever intended to be a oneshot, after all -- and wanted an easy way to end on a humorous note.
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I personally like rushed comedy.
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To be honest I never really thought about including something like that. Sequel inbound.
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Not a problem.
Enjoyed the story.
3161276
Well, you definitely did that, considering it became featured and has gained almost fifty likes in a mere six hours.
A+ on everything.
was entertaining to read
Ah'm confused.
3162370 It isn't a problem unless it's used too often. Descriptors are best used to give variety in a long conversation, where you'd end up with "Mary said" "Gary replied" over and over.
That said... this story has MUCH bigger problems with it. Namely, it's so random that there's no rhyme or reason to anything. I'm not even sure what the ending is supposed to imply.
Did she think it was a dream? Was it a dream, but now she's woken up to find it's become a reality? Is she just upset that she has to face another day as an alicorn?
There is no internal structuring to it at all. Even silly random stories need SOMETHING to tether it all together, otherwise it's just gobbledegook.
I'm entirely lost, and loving every minute of it.
3162370 Well, I'll admit that I do it too. However, using alternate descriptors can sometimes be wordy and hurt the flow of the story. Like if you said "the pretty pink pony" for Pinkie Pie. It was just something that jumped out at me as I read this.
Curses, and just when I had a similar idea floating around in my head.
Needless to say, a pretty solid story here. Good on you, man!
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3162391 I've also only heard that abusing those descriptors (i.e., inserting a different one every time you refer to a character) is bad, but that occasional use is good style.
3162413 What I do with the story I'm working on now is that I have Luna as one main character, and an OC filly as the other. I tend to use "the princess" when Luna's status becomes relevant in the current conversation, as she isn't as used to a more common lifestyle. For my other character, I use "the filly" when I'm indicating that she's young or short. However, throughout my story, these are the only two indicators I ever use other than their names and "her/she".
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Oh, believe me, this isn't the first Apple-Bloom-icorn (yeah, I'm calling her that now) story ever. There a few more floating around on the site.
3162463
That there are.
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It's all up to an individual writer's stylistic preference. So long as the descriptor's aren't horribly spammed, I like them. But to each their own, I suppose.
3162463 Odd, I haven't come across any such story. At least, not any that I can recall at the time being.
But, I can't worry about that now. I need to get back to writing my stories. Or at least, what I call writing.
Anyone reminded of Twily and Shiny?
Cider is made from apples, you're the princess of apples.
you just lost me, how did she get back in Sweet Apple Acres?
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Yeah, sorry 'bout that last bit. Fixed. Your comment made me realize that I hadn't put my revised ending into the story -- I edit in Google Docs and some inconsistencies are bound to occur during the copy-paste process. Reread the last scene again and I think it'll make more sense.
Go Sabres!!!!
Princess of apples... what an honor
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See the CMC folder of "X Becomes An Alicorn" for several examples. Notably, Discord's Parting Gift to the CMC is excellent.
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I did love that one, and it in part inspired me to write this.
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I'm personally a Caps fan. But the voice cast is from Vancouver, after all.
No "the".
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Didn't catch that. Fixed. Thanks.
Well......
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Well, at least she'll be better prepared this time around.
In any case, all hail Princess Malusia! (Not to be confused with Princess Malthusia, the princess of overpopulation-induced famine.)
3162655 I know, I've actually had twitter conversations with her about hockey.
I was about to be pissed because I assumed that it was all a dream and then the day (week?) starts over. Well crisis averted, that it was all a dream ending is garbage. Good job.
Even then, there are not enough faces and palms in all of the multiverse.
hay Apple Bloom, ask the guy from Groundhog Day, what he did to escape the time-loop
But, d'nt he kiss the gal at ta end?
Oh, now that I remember... This is a guess from the TwiDash Family, Do you know Spike, you know, purple gr-
Uh, GROSS! No way ah am kiss'n Spike! He's a dragon!
Don't be racist, anyway, if it helps, reptiles have long toungs
Never mind
-Lightning
Time loop? In the words of Celestia:
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I'd love to see a sequel of her having been in the loop for a long while. That would be hilarious.
Suddenly Groundhog Day
Finally, AppleBloom has a way to escape the next time Mando comes after her and doesn't take no for an answer!
Ok. This was a fun read. I enjoyed every word of it.
~Skeeter The Lurker