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ShadeJak


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This story is a sequel to Mare Do Well: As The Sky Falls


Rainbow Dash had thought her brief adventures as Mare Do Well were over and sought to move on with her life; but destiny has other ideas. New villains rise and cause mayhem, and Rainbow Dash is ready to put the costume back on and become Equestria's most awesome superhero once again!

Now has a sequel: Mare Do Well: Raining Of Fire

BIG thanks to drawponies for the new cover art!

Chapters (15)
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Epicness overload:pinkiegasp:
Looking forward to the next chapter:twilightsmile:
I salute you :moustache::moustache::moustache:

And now I have a source for my superhero and pony fix in on go. Hay yea

>>Amethyst: Thanks! I'm real excited about the next chapter, which I'm hoping to have done by some time next week. :rainbowdetermined2:
>>Flutter: Awesome! Glad to give you that! I hope to have the next one up soon

2482600 you really don't know how to reply, do you? :facehoof: >>>>>
Click the button that looks like an overlapping speech bubble, it should be in the top right coner of the comment /\. /\ /\ /\

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New chapter yay:yay::yay::yay:
Looking forward to seeing the next villan to join big shot:twilightsmile:
As I have said before this story is so epic!:rainbowkiss:
Really liked the villan profile:pinkiehappy:
Keep up the good work :moustache::moustache::moustache:

Gametime reminds me of the Ridler

captive pony’s face, causing him to cough for a moment, then start grinning and staring off into space in a euphoric delirium.

JOKER!!?? Big Shot is The Joker!?

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Yes, Riddler, along with Toyman and especially the Marvel villain named Arcade were Gametime's main inspirations.

And no, the effects of the drug aren't like Joker's, think something similar to the Love Poison in Hearts & Hooves Day.

You just HAD to go there, didn't ya? :ajbemused:

Then again, so did I. :twilightsheepish:

I'm liking this a lot, looking forward to more! :twilightsmile:

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Frostmare

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Villain whose primary ability is turning ponies into popsicles? It'd have been a crime NOT to! Plus I had a feeling if I didn't, sooner or later someone would have cited the meme in the comments anyway :twilightsheepish:

I honor you sir with that joke but i swear if i hear another mr freeze joke from that god bad movie ill die

You're hitting all of my favorite comic villains. Another awesome chapter. Also dat reference.

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Hence I did my best to avoid bad ice puns as I couldn't stand that movie either LOL I also had to take care not to use ice-themed adjectives to describe her behavior and vocal tones(i.e. "coldly", "icy", etc)

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Thanks! I'm working on the outlining and villain for next chapter, tho I'm not sure when it'll be out by.

Someone really needs to put those Gizmonks under closer observation. Selling what are essentially weapons to anyone who pays in cash is not something intended to make the world a better (or safer) place!

It looks like Rainbow isn't the only one with former friends whose thwarted self-image has turned them into homicidal psychopaths! And who is 'Big Shot'? Beyond another Big Bad, this one clearly wanting to put together a Quirky Miniboss Squad to act as his/her foot soldiers, that is.

Pitiful creature, motivated by petty revenge when he very clearly has the power to achieve whatever he wants... even being happy. It's sad that so many dedicate their lives to hurting people instead of just being happy.

Poor Frosmane! She reminds me a lot of Mr. Freeze - not evil in herself but driven by a personal pain and tragedy to do evil things. The fact that her powers have left her unable to survive normal environments or interact with ponies safely will only greatly worsen the psychosis we've already seen started here.

Twilight is getting more and more involved in this, isn't she? Maybe she should think of investing in a costume too? The Amethyst Witch perhaps?

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More likely Ra's al Ghul; he doesn't have the mania that I would associate with the Joker. Using Gametime as a disposable lackey to test Rainbow is also in Ra's's playbook.

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LOL yeah she is, she's mostly in an Oracle-esque role tho, helping Rainbow with resources and information, as well as with her status of having Canterlot nobility ties and as Celestia's personal student helping Rainbow get info, resources, and into places that would otherwise be inaccessable to her on her own.

And yeah, Big Shot is more akin to a master planner like Ra's, not a hedonistic maniac like Joker. He is mostly modeled after 'crime boss' villains like Black Mask and Kingpin

Hmm... Fascinating. I get a possible romantic entanglement vibe from Max Diamonds right now. I'm not sure if that would be a good idea for Rainbow, though. That sort of distraction can be fatal in a fight.

That said, I loved Primsa Glimmer, Rainbow's upper-crust fake identity. In some ways, it's an inversion of Batman's down-and-out undercover identity, Matches Malone, allowing him to walk streets and get into places that the rich Bruce Wayne could never do. I also think that, on a certain level, she loved the release of being able to be somepony she wasn't; the ability to live a night as someone and do things without it reflecting on the rest of her life.

I'm going to make a prediction here:

Grand Cargo is not Big Shot. It is possible that he is the 'public face' of Big Shot but, if he is, he's only a patsy, or a 'Dragon' as TVTropes.org occasionally puts it. I'm going to take a big leap here and say that Max Diamonds is Big Shot. How better to disguise one's crimes than to portray oneself as your criminal alter-ego's number one target? It would explain why Big Shot has never been seen by Rainbow and has certainly never personally been involved on the attacks on Max before.

Don't tell me if I'm right! :raritywink:

Further to my previous comment, EqD reports that The Hub is thinking of making a spin-off of one of its' series. I suggested 'The Mysterious Mare-do-Well and the Justice Herd Equestria' would be a nice spin-off show! :rainbowdetermined2:

Awesome! :pinkiehappy:
I have ideas for some more villains if you are interested.

I feel like Black Hex is sorta a combination of various assassin for hire type villains, but I can't quite pick out the inspiration

I demand that someone make art of Prisma Glimmer!
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I DEMAND IT!!!

...Please? :twilightsheepish:

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I second that request. :pinkiehappy: Any who does that request gets a free set of these: :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

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She's got a little bit of several. Deathstroke, Lady Shiva, David Cain, Black Widow pre-SHIELD days, essentially any assassin-for-hire who mostly specializes in martial arts, tactical gear use, and such. She'll get more development in the future

I reall love this story and was wandering if I could draw your villains and post the pictures on Deviant art I'll even draw Prism glitter if u let me

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Thanks!

Go for it! Just link back to my story and send me the links to the art when you're finished so I can see them! :pinkiehappy:

2593266 ok i will thanks for letting me draw them :pinkiehappy:

Decepto is a real mix of Scarecrow with Mysterio isn't he? The combination of illusion magic and hallucinogenic toxins makes for a particularly powerful combination.

Those nightmares really were frightening and you made it that more powerful by leaving the right amount of doubt in the reader's mind about whether or not they were real. It wasn't until Rainbow's breakdown in Twilight's library that it became increasingly clear that this was some kind of illusion. A good job on this part!

This was really great. You have really improved in writing tension, and I dare say this is your best written episode yet.

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Yeah, he's mostly based on villains who focus on illusions and mind manipulation, especially the two you mentioned. And like them direct combat isn't his strong point, so once MDW gets past his tricks he's not gonna be able to take too many hits from her. I'm glad I was able to make things scary :twilightsmile:

a villain called the Condiment Colt

:rainbowlaugh: he really was a crap villain, firing ketchup and mustard at Batman

Also
SCARECROW!

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Thanks, and just for fun I added a sketch of Razorbeak in the Authors Comments as there's otherwise not really a villain profile.

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Well, I believe I owe somepony a set of moustaches, don't I? :pinkiehappy:

:moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

Great work, love it! Replied on my DA title.

2596026 Nice work! Added to my DA favorites! :twilightsmile:

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He's also got some of The Orb (Ghost Rider) and Spellbinder (Batman Beyond) in his character design.

I can also see Shriek (Batman Beyond) in Sonicboom while Frostmare is obviously Mr Freeze. Hex seems to be Talia, Catwoman, Inque and Curaré from various Batman variants and Joymaker seems to have Riddler in him amongst others.

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Joymaker is most directly like Arcade from The X-Men - a mundane who uses a huge amusement park-like secret facility to assassinate and/or brainwash people in needlessly complex ways.

This was awesome! You are turning this more and more into a psychology piece, and I like that. The entire storytelling and pacing was also very good and the actions of all characters well thought trough.
And I would not wonder if Rainbow eventually still becomes a Wonderbolt - as a honorary member.

Rainbow Dash, smiling sadly and trying to hold back her tears, bids farewell to the Wonderbolt Academy... and her lifelong dream.

As this chapter in Rainbow's life comes to a close...

... a new one begins.

too bad ive already figured out Shadowbolts ident...she could really only be one mare...

Shadowbolt reminds me of the green goblin from spiderman

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