We already know that this show is not perfect. Looking back we can all say that there are some episodes that for one reason or another completly bombed.
Naturally I'm sure many of us have wondered "What if that episode had been written differently?"
Well that question is about to be answered as I present the first offical rewrite of several episodes from Season 1, Season 2, and Season 3.
Now I want you all to know that the episodes that are rewritten are ones that I believe should've been written better. They are my opinion and I will not change them so if you don't like that an episode you thought was good is on the list then don't read. Remember you promised to love and tolerate.
Thank you,
SuperPinkBrony12
Chapters (12)
And thus we have my 8th fanfic. A rewrite of some Season 1, Season 2, and Season 3 episodes that I felt could've been much better.
Now I hate to sound like a broken record but the episodes that were chosen are my personal opinion and I trust that you will all respect them.
As for this rewrite I hope you enjoy it.
I saw a couple of punctuation errors, but I mentally corrected them so I forgot where they were.
One of the many side effects of having the best teacher in the county.
You should rewrite The Mysterious Mare Do Well
2455288 Next is Look Before You Sleep, then Feeling Pinkie Keen, then Green Isn't Your Color, then Over A Barrel, then Luna Eclipsed, then Cutie Pox, then The Mysterious Mare-Do-Well, then Hearth's Warming Eve, then The Super Speedy Cider Squeezy 6000, then It's About Time, and finally One Bad Apple.
2455479 The big change will be that Pinkie Pie is present in an episode that clearly needed her (Seriously a Slumber Party and you don't invite Pinkie Pie who lives for parties, what the heck)
2455491 I won't entirley criticize her but she was kind of out of character in fawning over a slumber party. And of course the explanation at the start about the rainstorm is total b.s., how could the pegasus ponies just "miss" a scheduled drizzle and more importantly how does a massive storm that took down a tree which very nearly landed on a ponies house make up for missing one little shower?
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Respect an opinion? On the Internet?
You're funny.
I have one of those here.
can't wait for Season 3 episode 13 rewrite
2468812 Sorry but I'm not rewriting that, if you scroll down the comments section a little you'll see what episodes are being rewritten and which ones aren't.
If you want you can rewrite the episode on your own, no one's stoping you.
When's the Next Chapter?
, I Actually Love This Story. 
2516804 Should be coming out within a week. I'm sorry but finals were approaching and I didn't have a lot of time to write.
Next up is "Look Before You Sleep".
2455272 I will eventually. I know a lot of you will thank me for that.
And thus we have the rewrite of "Look Before You Sleep" finished. I hope you enjoy it.
As for the telivison thing. Well that's another reason to warrant the alternative universe and if the Rainbow Dash micro series comic is cannon then telivision already exists in Equestria anyway. Besides I'm the author so I get to say "Poetic Licence".
Remember don't hate.
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I can totally see why you chose that episode you chose here. I totally like how you present 'Boast Busters.' I know it's not listed, but seeing you rewrote this episode, why are you not rewriting 'Magic Duel?'
2543775 Because I specifically wrote the ending to Boast Busters so that I wouldn't have to rewrite Magic Duel. Everything in Magic Duel stills happens because Trixie took the fall for the Ursa Minor incident. The Alicorn Amulet merly implified her negative feelings.
And thus we have the rewrite of Feeling Pinkie Keen. Hope you enjoy it.
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Chapter 1:
That's an awful lot of empty space at the end. Were you planning to add something later?
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Just kidding. Seriously though, it's an ambitious project and I like the idea. Grammatically, comma issues are a problem, but that's easily fixed. Some of the dialogue is OOC, but overall, most of it is in character.
>> Remember don't hate.
Too late
Boast Busters: I liked AJ and Rarity pointing out RD's hypocrisy, but RD seemed to learn that lesson too quick for her character. Bragging is a major component of her character; she wouldn't easily turn that around. Also, Fluttershy would NEVER get on stage without half the episode being about that. And I have no idea what Pinkie was supposed to do. I think they were added for completion, which is a nice sentiment, but not all of the Mane 6 need to play active roles or even be mentioned in every episode. I did like Twilight's response to Trixie better than the show version. The rest of it was alright. Making Trixie into a known rival was a good choice.
Look Before You Sleep: The big problem with this one was the tension between AJ and Rarity was constantly defused by apologizing to each other and teaming up against Twilight. Also, I liked the idea of Twilight recruiting Pinkie for her slumber party... But that was negated by Twi's book. If Pinkie was recruited to run the party, she would be the one running things, not the book. Also, Twi NEVER would have planned a party on a day she knew somepony couldn't make it. She's über organized, so making the party as a planned event during the rainstorm wouldn't make any sense. I think adding Pinkie Pie either detracts from the focus of the episode (AJ and Rarity's bickering) or is an unnecessary addition. I realize that is most of the changes you made, so I'm not sure what you would have left to work with. I suppose you could make the same changes you did, but making it more in line with the characters. Perhaps Twi, AJ and Rarity find shelter in Sugar Cube Corner and Pinkie suggests a slumber party. Twi mentions she never had one and Pinkie gets excited and we're off to the party. Pinkie is trying to keep things fun, but AJ and Rarity are ruining it with constant bickering.
The most important thing is that I'm not dumping on you or "hating". I don't want you to stop writing. On the contrary, I would love to see more of these "what ifs". I think it's a great idea to tweak things around like this, but not at the expense of established characterization. I'll keep an eye out on this story.
Chapter 2:
I'm not trying to be mean. Run-on sentences are just a pet peeve of mine.
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In an unrelated note, I think I've watched joshscorcher's review of "Look Before You Sleep" one too many times. When the pillow fight scene started, all I could think of was this:
Good idea for a rewrite. You just can't have a party episode without Pinkie Pie.
Chapter 3:
Is Pinkie Pie narrating her action or is that extra quotation mark a typo?
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Well, I enjoyed that and I felt it was a much better moral than the rushed job from the original episode. Thank you.
I Love Alternate Universes, It's an Awesome Rewrite of Feeling Pinkie Keen.
I Can't Wait for The Rewrite Version of "Green isn't Your Color".
By The Way, I Love The "My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic: What If?" Story
And now we have the rewrite of "Green Isn't Your Color" sorry if this one took a little longer to come out but Mother's Day was last weekend so I didn't have as much time to work on this one. Hope you enjoy it.
Looks like I'm not going to be the only one rewriting episodes. The Ruber Fury 981 is going to be doing his own list of rewrites. Once it's out I'll link you all to it.
~Do you wanna know a secret?
Doo da doo
Do you promise not to tell?
Doo da doo...~
2589208 Nice one.
And so with the Season 1 episode rewrites finished I now move on to Season 2 rewrites. First up is "Luna Eclipsed". Remember don't hate.
Also see if you can spot the references in the "Over A Barrel" rewrite. I put at least three in there.
2591878 The latter. It wasn't quite bad but that's mostly due to Luna. Rainbow Dash and Pinkie Pie didn't get handled very well. I will make sure to make use of that Rarity scene that got cut. I'm also going to make Pinkie Pie play a slighlty different role. She'll end up helping Luna.
is that one of the references???
2594789 I suppose. I didn't know it was one. Anyway there at least three other ones to spot.
Here's the link to The Ruber Fury 981's rewrite. Check it out and see what you think.
And now we have the first Season 2 rewrite. A rewrite of Luna Eclipsed.
And in case you might be wondering here's where the inspiration for the song came from:
Remember don't hate.
Spongebob reference?
2615426 Yep.
YAY FOR PONIES! (AND SPONGEBOB!)
And now we have the rewrite of "The Cutie Pox". My shortest rewrite so far.
Remember don't hate.
The past tense of "panic" is spelled with a "k". "Panicked". I know it doesn't make a whole lot of sense, but trust me. That is how it is spelled.
Oh thank gosh. I was really worried that someone would throw St. James' brother at someone else.
I haven't see a what if story, but this is good!
Favorite, like, and follow!
"Oh, so you're actually this guy in disguise? Well... shit."
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I liked all of the changes you did. Though, I think you should've kept Applejack's old line "My sister's speaking in fancy." It just seemed so fitting. :P
And now we the rewrite that everyone has been looking forward to. The rewrite of The Mysterious Mare-Do-Well. Hope you enjoy it!
This is MUCH better. No OOC's of the Mane 6 and no horribly taught lesson. Seriously this is how the episode should've played out.
2648666 Glad you like it.
If I may recommend a "What if?" scenario, how about one with Owl's Well That Ends Well? I feel that episode needs some serious work as well. Like maybe Twilight and her friends hear it from Spike about how he felt jealous and that he gets after them for showing more love to Owlowiscious, despite Spike doing so much for each of them and promptly tells Twilight to leave him alone, leaving her with the task of finding a way to make amends with Spike. If you want more details, just PM me then.
2648705 If you want to do that rewrite feel free to do so. I've already made my list but part of the reason I created this fanfic was to inspire other fans to think about episodes they felt were bad or needed work and rewrite them.
2652283 I don't inteded to leave a large blank space. I assume it's just a mistake of the publishing software on this site.
Also I corrected the mistake.
Eh... As much as I like someone attempting to rewrite the episode, now it creates a new problem.
This makes her too overpowered too soon.
Twilight's scanning spell.
One other thing:
Do you mean a backup Mare-Do-Well?
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Anyway, I digress. It was an entertaining read.
2653883 I corrected the mistake. Also the spell was temporary.