This story is a sequel to My Little Pony Friendship is Magic What If?: Volume 5
It's back yet again, that series which dares to ask the fateful question: "What if that episode had been written differently?"
With the show's seventh season now wrapped up, Season 7 episodes are fair game and we've got eight of them awaiting a rewrite within this installment. But first we have an episode from Season 4, and an episode from Season 6. And some of the rewrites will be bonus chapters, exploring what would happen if a different character was made the focus of the episodes.
As always, I must reiterate that all of the episodes that appear here and end up rewritten are the result of my personal opinion, so don't get upset if an episode you like appears on the list or an episode you didn't like doesn't make the cut. I'll gladly respect your opinions so long as you respect mine, and like always you are not obligated to read any of these chapters if you don't want to.
And while it probably goes without saying at this point, I should mention that I bear no ill will and mean no disrespect to Hasbro, the DHX writing and directing staff, or the people who like any of the episodes that appear here. The intent of this fic, like all of its predecessors, is for entertainment purposes only. (Apologies for the image, once again it was the best I could find.)
Curious as to what episodes were already rewritten? Be sure to check out volumes 1-5. You can find them all below:
For Volume 1, click here!
For Volume 2, click here!
For Volume 3, click here!
For Volume 4, click here!
For Volume 5, click here!
Sounds interesting. I’ll read it later.
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A bit preachy, but better than the episode, at least. Nice job.
Yeah. Your version is worse then the original. And makes even less sense.
Hello there. Thanks immensely for getting the next batch of your "What Ifs"? Up and running. Again, I can understand the reasoning you gave in the author's notes for the re-write. The exchanges, characterizations, general episode wrap-up and references to future episodes (including another one you re-wrote earlier) were quite well done too. Anyway, on to the next chapter/episode.
Again, the re-write was very well done. Yeah, the details you mentioned in the author's notes were very valid points. And, yeah, the exchanges, characterizations and general chapter wrap-up were naturally quite well done. Well, on to the next chapter.
Again, this is an superb re-write. Personally, I would have left Trixie out of the story completely (beyond a VERY passing mention of being on the road), had Starlight and Spike accompany Twilight and the others on the Friendship Retreat and have the B-Story be the main plot (the B-story was ironically better than the A-story [it might have been largely forgettable, but at least it wasn't cringeworthy bad]) and then save the song for AFTER they completed the challenge (meaning they actually SUCCEED in breaking the record).
Still, I can see why you wrote this the way you did. Anyway, the exchanges, characterizations and general episode wrap-up were well done in all the right places. I particularly liked the reference to your version of the "Cutie Re-Mark" AND how you do a MUCH better job on Trixie's character development than the actual show (which, to be fair, isn't difficult in the latter case, but still - ).
At any rate, on to the next chapter.
Superb work on this re-write once more. Yeah, I can definitely understand where it works A LOT better with Starlight doing the foalsitting. Anyway, splendid job on the exchanges, characterizations and general chapter wrap-up.
And, now, I'm on to the next chapter.
Again, this is some very good work on the re-write. And, yeah, you bring up some excellent points on the reasons in the author's notes. As usual, the exchanges, characterizations and general wrap-up were superbly done. And, yeah, expanding the Wonderbolts' roles and toning down Rainbow's parents to a more sympathetic level was definitely a good call.
And, I'm on to the next chapter.
Once more, you give some great reasons for the re-write in the author's notes. And, yeah, the exchanges, characterizations and general wrap-up were quite well done. Indeed, changing the judge and critiques makes a great deal of sense.
And, now, I'm on to the next chapter.
Again, very good reasoning behind the re-write. So many points quite well taken. Anyway, the exchanges, characterizations, action and general wrap-up were quite well done as well the reference to another future re-write.
I also really like the idea of stretching out "A Royal Problem" to a two-parter (which would give a good reason to cut out "Secrets and Pies" entirely without stretching "Shadow Play" out to a three-parter (even if THAT would have worked too) .
Anyway, on to the next chapter.
Again, I can definitely see the reasons you gave for the re-write in the author's notes. Anyway, superb job on the characterizations, exchanges and general wrap-up. I particularly liked Spike's contributions AND the stuff concerning the more stable and respectful fans in the end.
I'll most assuredly be eagerly looking forward to more, but definitely respect your real life obligations.
That hypothetically sounds like a healthy drink, albeit with its healthy effects hyped with regard to degree of efficacy.
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8847433 The thing is, I would love to be able to rewrite "Secrets and Pies". But I'm at a loss as to how I'd make it into a workable episode. The best I can come up with is the Wonderbolts hiring Pinkie to investigate who keeps sending them pies. And even then I don't think I could stretch that concept far enough for a rewrite. "Secrets and Pies" just seems to be an episode that shouldn't even have been written, because there just doesn't seem to be a way to turn it into a workable, believable concept.
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Yeah. That certainly makes a lot of sense. Which is one of the reasons we said the only thing it WOULD work as would be a three-minute Equestria Girls short (and maybe not even THAT).
Hey there. Thanks very much for getting the next chapter up. Anyway, yeah, the reasons for the re-write DO make sense, but I have to admit I would have probably had Spike fess up to the scheduling mix-up straight away and introduce Thorax to Ember immediately (correctly trusting them enough to assume things will work out for the best), but that would have meant the problem would have been solved in five minutes tops and I would have had to come up with something else to eat up the remaining seventeen minutes or more. Which I probably would have done by having Spike, Ember and Thorax dealing with a team-up of Chrysalis, Garble and the Diamond Dogs (hey, Garble and the Diamond Dogs are pretty much the only ones among the show's past villains who would realistically be stupid enough to actually work with Chrysalis [in addition, Chrysalis would have a good reason to hold a grudge against Thorax, Garble would logically have it in for Ember and Spike would probably still be fairly sore at the Diamond Dogs]) while the Mane Six and Starlight were all busy with other stuff.
Which, admittedly, makes me glad that I WASN'T writing this, because THIS is better.
At any rate, very good job on the exchanges, characterizations and general wrap-up in all the right places.
I'll very certainly be looking forward to the last re-write in this volume, but I get you have other stuff to take care of too.
Hey there. Very little I can say beyond, very good point outs on the actual episode's issues in the author's notes AND great job on the re-write as usual. Again, the exchanges, characterizations, action and general wrap-up were well done in all the right places. I particularly liked how you made all of the centrals in the episode more sympathetic and the increased set-up for "Uncommon Bond".
And, yeah, so one of your plans for Volume Seven (which will probably be either during the usual mid-season break or shortly after Season 8 is over) will be to make Celestial Advice a two-parter too? I suppose you'll be cutting out another one of the Season 7 episodes other than "Secrets and Pies" (which will be removed to make room for "Royal Problem" to be a two-parter) to make room FOR the further two-parter. (I know it won't be "Hard To Say Anything" because that rewrites for THAT one are going to have it take place ENTIRELY in "Our Town" and have Party Favor be the main character besides Sugar Belle [making it the first episode where NONE of the characters from Ponyville {Mane 6, Cutie Mark Crusaders, Spike, Starlight, etc.} appear]).
But, well, at any rate, I very certainly will be looking forward to more of your work, but will understand if real world matters need to take top priority.
Do you think when Twilight starts the school of friendship, Spike would be the vice-principal? Because it would be great having him as that title. XD
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Makes sense. :)
Does anyone at least know a story of which The Mane 6 in this episode DON'T miss the record at all and then sing the song as victory?
the episode is one of my favorites, the truth if they were offended by the message of the episode maybe it's because they felt identified with the hateful fans that appeared there
I agree too. But the writers love to forget about spike.
I’ll admit, I do like your versions of Flim and Flam better than the canon ones, since they are portrayed a bit more sympathetically.