This story is a sequel to My Little Pony Friendship is Magic What If?
Back by popular demand, this is the second installment that seeks to answer the question "What if that episode had been written differently?"
This time, we're including episodes from Season 4 as well as a few Seasons 1-3 episodes that didn't make the cut last time around.
As always, I mean no disrespect to the DHX staff responsible for the episodes, or the people who like the episodes listed. But the episodes included are my personal opinion, and I ask that you all respect them.
So if you don't like that an episode you liked is on the list, or an episode you didn't like is not on the list, then don't read.
Thank you,
SuperPinkBrony12
Chapters (11)
Awesome start
Do Power Ponies.
5761692 The list has been set in advance, so I'm sorry to say that "Power Ponies" will not be on the list of episodes rewritten. The same goes for any and all Season 5 episodes that air before this fic is concluded, should any turn out bad.
5761710 darn it.
Please Please Please tell me you are planning on doing Pinkie Pride
5762484 No. Why exactly would you want "Pinkie Pride" to be rewritten, I might like to know?
5762497 Not saying it's bad or anything, in fact, it's one of my favorites of the series, but I think the way the mane 6 acted could have been fixed, and I also think Cheese should have been allowed more time to interact neighBour's, other that explaining what he did in one song, the again,this episode may be hard to do because it's a musical.
5762537 I take it, you didn't mean to double post.
5762703 yeah, sorry about that, ill delete one of those.
All of my f*cking yes.
Clever filly.
That, actually a pretty useful spell.
Agreed, that was impressive.
I doubt Scoots is the type to say alas.
You mean to type I don't THINK I could've done it.
I feel like you're making Apple Bloom too verbose, Sweetie Belle's the dictionary. Not to mention it's utIlizing.
Well, that's gonna be risky, considering that I suspect that if you cut out Glass of Water, I sense fanrage will ensue. I know it's not THAT good, but it IS the one Discord song in the show, so, just thought I'd offer that.
5767145 Well, I can only hope people will give my rewritten version a chance when it comes out.
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If it helps, I will. I think the main problem with the episode is not so much what's in it, but the pacing as it starts off rather slow, mind you once it gets to the good part it's fantastic, but the pacing makes it suffer a bit.
5773523 Well, Spoiler Alert!: Discord isn't going to be in the episode at all. I feel like his role was pointless, and just showed that only Fluttershy would even care if he was actually sick. So I get the feeling a lot of people are going to hate that rewrite, when I get around to it.
Assuming that my "Bats!" rewrite doesn't tick people off first.
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Er, not to sound rude, but, I'm pretty sure that's a terrible idea. The whole point of Three's a Crowd was that it was a Discord episode, a Discord episode without Discord? Again, not to be rude, but I suspect that may not be such a smart move.
Goddammit Nappa.
Pretty sure it's gases. One s.
As right as this is, this feels a bit, clumsy.
You're.
How to shake.
Not surprised, dragon scales or not, that caught him totally off guard and I suspect that falling down from that ladder, dragon or not must be annoying but, from the looks of it, like you said, he's more angry at himself for falling than actually hurt It pays to be nigh indestructible.
A little, yes. Your jealousy is understandable, but you are being a bit too harsh.
Uh, Spike, kid, you're treading into dangerous waters right now... I get that you're mad and trust me, I've been in your same position many times, but just try and keep a cool head before something bad happens, please, for your own sake.
Daaaw...
Agreed. You both screwed up.
Ah, THAT line, the same line I'm sure all of us have heard many many times over the course of our lives and no matter how true it may be, it never stops being annoying.
More like mother figure/big sister figure, really, but fair enough, besides, you're both young, we all make mistakes.
Up next are Dragon Quest and Spike At Your Service, the two other Spike centric episodes that were handled, poorly. Personally, I don't think ALL dragons are like the 3 bullies we see, there are teenagers and teens can be jerks, however, the red dragon was willing to be reasonable and was only antagonistic mainly because Rainbow kicked him in the face, which admittedly would piss of pretty much anyone. As for Spike At Your Service, for whatever reason, it showed him being terrible at stuff he was previously shown to have done well which is, weird. On the plus side, his dragon code thing is kinda cute.
5777604 Well, "Dragon Quest" suffers from excessive sterotypes and turning the mane six into a-holes (Merriweather Williams strikes again), and "Spike at Your Service" suffers from turning Spike into a complete idiot who can't even do basic chores without screwing up (and people think Derpy is offensive, at least she's not messing up on things she's supposedly done her entire life).
You kinda did
Smug only has one G.
Yeah. not her brightest move.
Pony.
Ugh, THESE guys.
Pecking order. Do I even have to make the joke?
Oh great, THIS again.
And cue things going wrong.
*revs up anti dragon chainsaw* Try it buddy.
PhoENix.
You're not f*cking serious.
ExCUses.
Wisdom, no extra I.
Chariot. No extra I.
Whoah whoah whoah whoah. Whoah. 2 MONTHS?! You realize that's a 6th of the time between the Season 1 premiere and the Season 4 premiere? That's a lot of time. And absence.
Exist.
While this is an interesting rewrite, it's riddled with spelling mistakes. I honestly suggest that next time, you run it on a Word doc and use spell check.
5819841 I see each season as being the equivalent of a year. There's no way 3 seasons worth of episodes can be crammed into a single year. It's just not possible.
5820028 Not all of these are on my least favorite episodes list. And in any case, the show writer show know better than to write what they did in those episodes. I mean no disrespect, I'm simply trying to correct their mistakes. If at all possible, I would love to send these installments to them as a way of showing them how they can improve.
Awesome job on Dragon quest
5820413 Thanks.
5820973 you're welcome
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Tell that to the one who wrote that line. And still, 2 months is a long time.
A Friend In Deed was rather mean spirited.
Magically Mystery Cure was a summary of an episode, not an actual episode; and at least two of the songs were big lipped alligator moments. What My Cutie Mark Is Telling me was a brilliant way to introduce the conflict but that idiotic episode used that to portray the episode.
Bats! had a moral I'd expect from PETA, and apparently this episode thinks it's wrong to come up with compromises.
Testing Testing 1 2 3 did nothing right. RD should already know the material, in fact she should be teaching THEM the history of the Wonderbolts not the other way around; Sweet And Elite showed that Rarity knows everything she knows about them from RD but this episode says that she knows more than RD, and apparently Amy Keating Rogers believes country people are stupid since she had AJ not know. It should have been Scootaloo instead of RD, RD instead of Twilight, and Cheerilee instead of the Wonderbolts. In theory the moral is talking about how people need to learn things their way, but instead it came off as "it's okay to be a disruptive punk at school and if you fail because of that it's the teacher's fault not yours; and it's okay to force people to do things they don't want to do." Last but not necessarily least, rap is an evil form of music, having Pinkie rap is like having Fluttershy (or somepony) dress as a member of the KKK.
Rainbow Falls thinks that just because Fluttershy is a Pegasus means she's an athlete; that sounds like the Equestrian equivalent to saying that all Asian people know martial arts.
5843093 I will agree that "Testing, Testing, 1, 2, 3" should've been a Scootaloo episode and not a Rainbow Dash one. But I think the reason why Amy used Rainbow Dash was because the moral about how there's more than one style of learning would resonate better with the target audience if they saw someone like Rainbow Dash going through the same thing they go through on a daily basis. If it were a kid character like Scootaloo, the target audience would just think that said kid was lucky or an exception. That being said, the moral is too optimistic in regards to American schools. Until they shift their focus away from testing, they will continue to hold back anyone that doesn't comply with their methods of learning. There is hope though, seeing as a lot of parents are starting to rebel against the education system's insistence on testing.
5843734 And so that episode justifies not trying and thus is a very bad episode. And like I said, RD knows that material but not in this episode just to make that plot happen. It may actually be the second worst episode of the show, number 1 most defiantly being Magical Mystery Cure.
1. Twilight had no right to force RD to play school.
2. RD was a jerk. If she behaves like this when she's studying then why would the Wonderbolts want her? She should be trying but she refuses to try and just wants good things to happen to her with no effort whatsoever. This episode is Mare Do Well level flanderization.
3. RD should already know the material better than all of them, or at least more than Rarity and Pinkie Pie, but for this episode and this episode only RD is ignorant of what she fangirls over.
4. Rap is racist.
5. Applejack not knowing in this episode is Amy Keating Rogers downright stating that country people are stupid.
6. The happy ending is not deserved, RD should be trying but she isn't.
7. Rancid moral stating that it's okay to be a disruptive punk at school and when you fail because of it it's the teacher's fault.
5843810 I honestly think that Rainbow Dash is trying, though it could've been convied to the audience a lot better. And both Rarity and Applejack could've been cut out of the episode entirely without the episode losing anything other than a few jokes.
I can't wait for Bats! This was actually really good. I like the redesign of this episode, and how it focused more on Spike as a character and not made him so incompetent.
5850804 Thanks, but "Bats!" isn't the next episode on the rewrite list. Next up is "Just for Sidekicks" and "Games Ponies Play". "Just For Sidekicks" will actually change into the Rarity episode of Season 3 that never was, and will have Spike in the Crystal Empire with the mane six. That's all you need to know for now.
And cue shenanigans in 3, 2, 1...
DevAstated. Also, this feels a bit, clunky to me, maybe instead (just suggesting) "You're like a son to me." I dunno, just thinking out loud.
Any more. 2 words.
My shenanigans sense is tingling.
YES! You remembered! Thank you!
Yeah, timberwolves are made of wood, and you're a dragon, your scales are nearly indestructible. Isincerely doubt they'd be able to harm you.
AnyPONY.
Yeah, I know what you're doing, but this isn't in the slightest bit subtle. It feels a bit forced honestly.
NobLE.
YES! HE'S NOT INCOMPETENT!
Uh Dash, that's not a good idea.
Very good IDEA. Also, considering Pinkie was a rock farmer, this is pretty clever.
Applebuck Season.
Spike switching from AJ to Rarity? That's an AWFUL solution.
5852904 It's not that awful if you think about it. Spike would do anything to make Rarity happy, and as I showed here, Rarity would be more than willing to reward Spike for his help.
5852921 How Twilight Sparkle instead.
5852930 Well, you got me there. I didn't think of that, probably would've been a more practical solution for Applejack.
you going to do power ponies what if
5853341 If you look at the list of episode to rewrite you should know already that the answer to that is "Nope!". I'll admit Power Ponies isn't entirely flawless, but for it's worth I still consider a good episode and leagues above the unholy Spike triology.
5843093
I hope you dont hit someone just because they said good morning to you. I can see people who hated what pinkie did to cranky as the types to growl at someone just because they smiled at them and said hi or good morning. I had a customer threaten me just because i told him to have a good day and you remind me of him because of your attitude with being friendly as being mean spirited. Funny someone who watches a show about friendship doesn't like a character for trying to make friends. I am not apologizing to this dimbfuck anyone who calls a friend in deed mean spirited can kindly go throw themselves off a cliff. Only cynical people who probably punch babies and growl at you when you say good morning to them hated this episode.
Your face is mean spirited you just didnt like that pinkie was trying to be friendly yeah the way she went at it was going too far but its no excuse for you be an ass about it. Heaven forbid someone is nice to me AAAHHH IT BURNS OH GOD THE FRIENDLINESS IT BURNS! gah! suck it up you cynical friendship hating brat this is a show about friendship not being a cynical asshole. You want cynical asshole instead? go watch a different show.
the dumb ass who called a friend in deed mean spirited probably punches people who say hi and good morning to him and he probably kicks puppies for looking happy. Stay away from he's a very toxic person who thinks trying to be your friend is mean. I say let him wallow in misery because only assholes like this enjoy being miserable if they hate a friend in deed. Don't like a friend in deed then you are cynical.
5865191 It's okay to not like an episode, everyone will have different opinions and you should learn to respect them. "A Friend in Deed" was far from Pinkie's worst potrayal, but it's certainly not her best potrayal. "Maud Pie" managed to correct most of the problems present in "A Friend in Deed".
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I agree maud pie did it better. It's just I only liked a friend in deed for the smile song in fact that's the only thing memorable about it
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First Off, Huh?
Second, What Does That Mean?
Thirdly, It Would Makes Sense With a What-If Scenario of "What Would Happened If Fluttershy Didn't Turn Into a Fruit Bat Vampire?"
and Fourth, I Hope So...
5775943
Well, Maybe Pinkie Pie will both get sick & Sing "Glass of Water" in Honor of Discord from the Randomness and Craziness from Pinkie Pie Herself.
This is a Good Start for the First Rewrite. Great Job!
5874933 "Bats!" from what I can gather, is one of the more popular Season 4 episodes. Pretty much everyone likes it. "Three's A Crowd" is also one of the more popular Season 4 episodes, no doubt due to it having Discord. Naturally, a lot of people will probably not be pleased to see those episodes rewritten and more hated episodes like "Power Ponies" or "Equestria Games" not making the list. (Despite me having already made it known ahead of time where my preferences lie).
That is AMAZING!!!! Spike Finally Get to Go to the Crystal Empire!!! Plus This is Better than the Original!!! Bravo, My Good Man, Bravo!!! You Deserve a Round of Applause!!!
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The Crusaders? Twilight, while they can be mature at times, oh never mind, Cheerilee's there to make sure there are no mishaps, carry on.
OK, that is funny.
Good to know Cadence is willing to keep her cool and only possibly vent her frustration when she's alone so as not to make a scene.
There we go. That explains the rather vague description in the show, it kinda bothered me a bit in the episode that it was so vague when all they needed was just one quick line to explain, like here.
Oh boy. I can see where this is going. And occasion only has one S.
behind theM.
Convenient!
I KNEW IT I knew she's have a witch hat cutie mark, then again, this is a story, so carry on.
Yeah, this bugs me, story or not, the witch is a unicorn, herbivorous by nature yet she eats foals, who are meat. What?
OBJECTION! Your Honor, I have found a contradiction in this story, Miss Harshwinny NEVER smiles.
Was that a pun? Because they're CRYSTAL ponies?
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They are both realty warpers so that makes sense. What if they both sang glass of water now that would be chaotic.
Dude, you SERIOUSLY need an editor.
A "nobel" dragon is one whose last name is "Nobel", as in "Nobel prize". You wanted to say "noble".
That's one of a hundred mistakes I kept stumbling over while reading your story.
She's right.
Hilarious. One l.
Discord is a nigh omnipotent reality warping mind screwing chimeric being voiced by John De Lancie. Ms Harshwhinny is just a normally pony.
Oh dear.
I can imagine this. And it is adorable.
THis is actually pretty nice.
Fair enough.
I suppose I should have seen that coming.
Habits. One B.
Knowing him? He just plans on trolling the buck out of anypony unfortunate enough to cross his path.
5894868 The secret hoofshake takes place in the actual episode itself.
5895468
What, really?