This is a story about Baby Celestia and Yoshi...
A story that took place a long, long time ago.
Yoshi belongs to Nintendo
My Little Pony belongs to Hasbro
Story by Blazing_Mane01
Chapters (13)
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Looks alright so far
I like how the story keeps flitting back from the Yoshi story and the present day; I find it interesting in many contexts
All I can say is that the line between thought and speech could be a little more obvious, because sometimes when I was reading, I didn't realise it went into internal thought or sometimes a private monologue, and the unexpected change in tense was a little confusing.
So maybe you could put every thought in speech marks as well as itallics. 
Other than that, it looks pretty decent
P.S: I didn't realise I had to enter the password for every chapter: it caught me off-guard every time.
Super Celestia World 2: Yoshi's Island
2395238 Pretty much. It did seem more of an MLP crossover into Yoshi's Island.
I understand.
Oh neat, a story about Piccolo!
4814674 LOL! that DBZ abridged refrence!
Hmm thats too bad I'm actually pretty intrested to the story
I read this with the Yoshi’s Island theme playing in the background. Nice concept. I liked what you had.