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Tundara


Sea Otter Druid-Bard that enjoys gaming, writing, commissioning artwork for her (his) stories. Currently floating somewhere on the Northwest coast contemplating the stars.

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Velvet Sparkle and her family are relaxing away from the hustle and intrigue of Canterlot, when her foster grand-foal falls ill. To help pass the time and comfort the filly, Velvet recounts the story of her younger years. It is a tale filled with loss and heart-ache, vengeance and redemption, hatred and love, and a small filly, lost in a land vastly different from Equestria, that just wanted to go home. A tale whose origins were formed before the founding of Equestria itself, and the struggle that birthed the great nation.

It is the story of how Velvet Sparkle met the Queen in Stone.


A Myths and Birthrights side story.

Edited by Honey Mead
Art by Companda

Chapters (16)
Comments ( 370 )

... awesome! :pinkiehappy:

Loving the story so far! Can't wait to see how it goes.

Good show sir! :moustache:

Nice start, Keep going :)

Now wait...are the Halla deer or Elk?:rainbowhuh::twilightblush:

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The Halla are based on Elk and Reindeer.

I've been excited for this since working on the picture. :yay:

All of my yay!!:yay:

Should I be embarrassed that Tyr having her wings, and by extension part of her identity, stolen away from her triggered the heck out of me?

I feel so miserable for that poor little filly, to not even have it be an illusion, but to be stripped of them outright... It just sounds absolutely awful.

It... certainly has my interest so far.

Great fic, hope to see more of this and and Myths and Birthrights soon!:twilightsmile:

Seems pretty good, tracking to see where it goes.

-Mis

Hmmm looks interesting so far...:pinkiesmile:

Just a question: why "Velvet Sparkle" while her actual/official name is Twilight Velvet?

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Because of how noble names and titles work in the Myths-verse. Also, I wanted to have the name both similar enough that people would equate the character quickly to Twilight's mother, but different enough the pre-conceived ideas don't come into play so readily. Essentially, I wanted to stamp that this was my take on the character.

Hope that clears things up. :twilightsmile:

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No, because it is Fridge Horror. When I was writing that bit of the story (of Myths and Birthrights) it took me an embarrassingly long time to realise all the implications. One of the dangers of getting 'Writer's Goggles' where you become so focused on certain aspects or ideas of a story you don't fully consider all the implications. :twilightoops: I then had to make a choice whether to deal with the implications of Tyr having her wings stolen, or to do a hand-wave and move on. I chose the later. :twilightblush:

Cloak Of Feathers - The Sword

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I will write it as a one shot thing, then send it to you to see if you think it's cool?

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Write what now? :rainbowhuh:

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Some prose for when the spell was cast on her, and maybe immediately before/after?

Wow...I am stunned. This was beautifully written; I was right there in the cabin along with Velvet and Blue Winter. The imaging was so powerful and the characters were very lovable. Except for Bright Briar, but I don't think he was supposed to be that way. :twilightblush: Please keep up the amazing work. I can't wait to read more! :pinkiehappy:

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Sure. Tyr's fostering isn't something I am currently expecting to directly tell, just a few of the repercussions and consequences. I wont tell you not to write something you feel strongly about, just be aware that Myths and Birthrights and Velvet Sparkle and the Queen in Stone are both works in progress and my plans do change and flow fluidly. I am planning on dealing with Fostering in greater detail in a later chapter with one of the other alicorn foals in Myths.

:twilightsmile:

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Thank you. I'm glad Blue Winter and Crisp Winds came across as well as they have. Same with Bright Briar. The Lodge scene was one of the easier things to write in this story. It just came together wonderfully, I feel. :twilightsmile:

This deserves to have more views than it does, despite being in the future box. I'm sorry that it was overshadowed by a story about a human-turned-dinosaur-in-Equestria story, this is much more worthy of top slot.

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Shrug, the Feature Box is what it is. I'm just glad you enjoyed the story. :twilightsmile:

Very much enjoying this and looking forward to more! :twilightsmile:

i cant believe im saying this but .GIVE ME MOAR DAMMIT, this story is epic, oh and just curiols why does cadance and shiney have to adopt cant the little one be there own foal??? and why does she have to be disguised???

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The answer to why Cadence and Shining adopted Tyr can be found in the much larger story. The short version is that Tyr appeared near Ponyville. Alicorns in the Myths-Verse (of which this story is part of) 'Foster' their foals, hiding them in plain sight. Normally this is done at birth and the fostering parents are regular ponies. Because Tyr was already over a hundred years old, it was decided that she'd be too problematic for a regular family to manage. So she was fostered with Cadence and Shining.

That is the gist of what is going on. :twilightsmile:

why, oh why, did you have to fall asleep tyr!:raritydespair:

Their breath can freeze the hairs of your coat, and their bite steal all the warmth in your body.

I think either you need to make "bite" or "steal" plural; also, not sure if that comma is needed.

He herd is gone because of us.

Think you intended that to be a "her".

The fostering spell that suppresses Tyr's alicorn-ness might be looked at as a way to show the foal what life is like for a non-alicorn. Some sort of a "walk a mile in their shoes" thing to help provide perspective once they get their full powers back.

At least for me that helps to reduce the fridge-horror aspect. Not just as camouflage, but teaching an important life lesson as well?

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The Fridge Horror aspect is still rather strong. The 'walking a mile in their shoes' aspect is a part of the reason for the Fostering. But as with all things, there is more than one reason why they Foster. :twilightsmile:

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it would seem that Bright Briar was correct. After all, the Queen did end up being released.

Sparkledale, I like it.

This expedition is a terrible idea, I can already tell.

"I am taking the foal to the Eagle Lodge, there she will be—,"

Should be Raven Lodge, I think.

This is really interesting, I can't wait to see more of it.

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Whoops! Yep, it should be! :facehoof:

I'm glad that Velvet's inexplicable exaltation regarding Iridia is getting clarified, but this story does present a spoiler to Myths and Birthrights.
With Tyr still being in Equestria rather than back on Gaia. I'm assuming this taking place after M&B though, since there's no mention of Cadence moving out of Canterlot in M&B.

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Actually, this takes place between Part 1 and Part 2 of Myths during the period of roughly a month or so that Myths skips between the two parts. Essentially it is between Twilight's coronation and when she leaves on the Bellerophon. :twilightsmile:

2474064 That's a relief. Thanks. Keep up the good work please. :pinkiesmile:
2135446 Just bumpin this comment because the latter error mentioned was still uncorrected when I read this.

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Doh! Thought I'd made all the corrections. :facehoof: Thanks for the reminder. :twilightsmile:

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HAHA! You've been caught, bad Tundara, that is a bad, bad Tundara! :twilightangry2:

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I've been a ba~ad otter. :fluttercry: :ajsleepy:

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This is how I feel when I see a story that needs heavy editing. (Not sure how this applies, but hell, you said "otter" and I thought of this.)

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Ha-ha! I've not seen that gif before! :rainbowlaugh: Oh, as an aside and only tangentially related to VSatQiS; I'm hoping to get the new version of Myths chapter 13 finished today. It's a little rough, and needs to be heavily edited, probably. :rainbowwild:

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Alright, I will await the email, I have a test tomorrow so won't be able to do anything tonight. Will take a quick look at that other document you have going though.

“I see a past scared by fangs."

Do you mean scarred?

Other than that awesome!

That. Was. AMAZING!
I want more!

This was awesome, you must update again soon!

If you are going to mix in story teller embellishments, be sure to include hints, suggestions, and possibly even one or two points where there is a clear flaw in her story that one of the listeners (such as Tyr) notice. That way readers can tell that not all of Velvet's tale is true from the story itself.

:twilightsmile:

That was Beautiful

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Thanks! :twilightsmile:

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More is in the works! I have a much more detailed plan and idea now and, finger crossed, the story will update quicker.

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I hope to update soonish. :pinkiehappy:

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There will be. I'm slowly working things up to that point. :raritywink:

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Thank you. :twilightsmile:

Woot! I got The Hobbit reference there correct then.:pinkiehappy:
You did well with the chapter:twilightsmile:

I'd almost forgotten about this story... and you know what? ...this is one of my top favs, if not my number one fav. I don't know exactly what it is about this story that I love. Maybe it's the Halla? I LOVE these guys, and have only ever read something similar to them once before, and even then the only similarity is "they're dear."

...hu... I just don't know why I love this so much! xD :twilightsheepish::twilightsmile:

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Yeah... I think I've only seen deer/elk used... once? Twice? Maybe?

I really like the Halla and they'll be playing a bigger role in the main story sooner rather than later. :rainbowdetermined2: :pinkiehappy: :raritystarry: :twilightsmile: :yay:

One of my goals with them is to not make them too much like anything else. There are influences from Tolkien, the Haida and other native american cultures, the Norse, the Celts, general fantasy staples, and adding a dash of the caribou herds of the Yukon and Northwest Territories. I toss them in the pot, bring to a boil, and let simmer. Serves one AU setting. :pinkiehappy:

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