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Tundara


Sea Otter Druid-Bard that enjoys gaming, writing, commissioning artwork for her (his) stories. Currently floating somewhere on the Northwest coast contemplating the stars.

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When I was young, I woke up in the Everfree. I couldn't remember my name or where I came from before waking in that cursed forest. All I could remember was hunger and the need to hunt. Yet I travelled with a filly I should have turned into a snack. The only thing that held me back was that she held a clue to my missing past.

Danger surrounded us in that evil place; a pack of wooden wolves, an angry dragon, little blue flowers with a twisted sense of humour, and something else even more terrible than the rest combined. But the biggest threat of all lay hidden in my past. After all, what is worse, the threat you see coming, or the one that you trusted?

Chapters (8)
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Comments ( 125 )

This is really well written so far. I like the main character a lot and I'm genuinely interested in the backstory/how it turns out! Well done for drawing me in like that, I have a short attention span :rainbowlaugh:

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Thanks! Comments like yours really make writing worthwhile for me. :twilightsmile:

583392 I always love comments so whenever I read I fic I'm sure to leave one :twilightsmile: Looking forward seeing how this turns out!

Interesting. The concept itself is nothing new, but being told from the TIGER'S perspective? A stroke of genius right there.
Also, is the tiger's name Richard Parker by any chance? :moustache:

Very nice indeed! :twilightsmile: I've never read a story like this from a tiger's point-of-view. Very original!

Can't wait to see more! :twilightsheepish: :heart:

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Yeah, the concept isn't anything that hasn't been seen before, I think. :twilightblush: Richard Parker? Should I know that name? *opens a Google tab in browser* :twilightsmile:

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Not sure how original it is really. I'm sure if people looked something similar would turn up.

I just hope I can keep the tone and ideas coming. I really wasn't expecting the response Tiger Bloom has gotten already. The story came to me a couple days ago while walking and wouldn't be shaken. :twilightoops:

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Yeah, I just read that. The tiger's name, not the book. :twilightblush: I was in the process of writing that when I got the notice of your reply. :facehoof:

As for the tiger's name in this story, I've not honestly decided on one yet. I'm turning several possibilities over in my head.

583663 If you named him Ayav he'd be Ayav the Tiger. Hehe

This is a really great story! I can't wait to read more!
Any compliments that I would say about this story, so I'm just going to say
Good Job and Please Continue!:pinkiehappy:

584320

Thanks! :twilightsmile:

I hope the next chapter, and the ones after, are as good. I'm getting pretty nervous to be honest. :twilightoops:

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Don't worry about it, just do what you think comes naturally to the characters and story,
and I'm sure no one will be disappointed :twilightsmile:

I love this :twilightsheepish: Wonderful idea for a story.

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Thanks! :twilightsmile:

I'm hoping to get the next chapter out tomorrow, and have them out every 3-4 days. This isn't going to be that long of a story. 5 or 6 chapters at most each between 2 and 3k words each. Nothing fancy, just something to have fun with and get some practice. :twilightsmile: I honestly couldn't see stretching the concept beyond that without it becoming clunky.

A quick word to anyone who's returning; the edits to the first chapter or complete. There has been changes both in tone of the story as well as the character of the Tiger.

I was unsure how to exactly handle the posting of the edited version, if I should just go and do a text swap or like Kobolstromo did delete all the chapters and then start adding them fresh. I didn't want to loose every ones comments though so I went with the text-swap method, even though for returning readers it'll show as already having been read.

I've also un-published the following chapters for the moment while I work on bringing chapters 2 and 3 more in line. 4 and 5 should be almost entirely unchanged when they return, but in the mean time I figured it better to remove them than have the story with a gaping hole in the middle. No promises on when 2 and 3 will be edited as I don't have any editors helping me. :twilightsmile: When the final versions are ready will be easy to see as they'll have a sub-title similar to the edited Chapter 1.

Thank you anyone reading, or re-reading the story, and this comment. I've been pleasantly surprised to see every few days a new 'Favourite' notification for Tiger Bloom.

Been awhile, but here it is, the revised and edited Part 2.

Questions, comments, suggestions; all are welcome.

I think I'm liking the new direction it's taking

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Thanks! I've spent a lot of time worrying about the stories tone and if I was doing the right or wrong thing. It's been a huge factor in how long it's taken to get the edits done.

This is really, really good. Once Applebloom sees the elephant in the room (tigers are carnivorous), it's going to be interesting as to how you write her.

I like how you've written the tiger as just that -- a tiger. I get the feeling that he's had a MAJOR IQ boost from the transition, though, which is probably a good thing.

937708 Yeah, I like this tone a lot more. One thing I'm not sure on, can she understand him? I remember she couldn't before, and I really liked that aspect of their companionship, but the way you have it now, it's not that clear.

937833

The tiger, as I've written him, is more intelligent than the average kitty. He's also capable of thought processes that are normally limited to humans, as far as we are aware. This is a bit of me pushing my own beliefs that animals are smarter than most people give them credit, and part it makes for a more interesting character.

As for Apple Bloom and that elephant you mention, you'll just have to wait and see. :twilightsmile:

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I'm being purposefully obscure at this point about if she can or can't understand the tiger. In the old version conversation was something I tried to limit to just Apple Bloom, with a few key exceptions. I had a couple family members read the new version before it was posted and they didn't mention any concern about AB and the tiger talking. Now I wonder if they just assumed that she understood him. :facehoof:

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I wasn't sure on the tiger's verbosity myself, so I'm just rolling with 'maybe, maybe not' for now until it gets firmed up a bit. With how you worded it, it was clear that you were deliberately ambiguous. For me, at least :twilightsmile:

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That's a weight off my mind. I was beginning to panic that the whole tiger/AB conversation thing was handled wrong and needed to be wailed on harder with the edit-hammer.

938562 You do a good job on the ambiguity.

Max

Really good so far!:pinkiehappy:

939751

Thank you. The ambiguity is cleared up in chapter 3, which should be posted tomorrow if my pre-reader is satisfied with the latest round of edits. She found the previous changes to be... not so good. Otherwise I would have posted the latest chapter days ago.

973169

Thanks! I'm glad you find the story good. :twilightsmile:

Max

I wonder what will happen to mr. kitten.. if those were poison joke flowers, doesnt that mean they are close to ponyville?

Excellent chapter as usual. I really think it adds a lot to the story, her not understanding him.

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Could be close, could be on the other side of the forest. No telling how many patches of Poison Joke there are in the Everfree. :applecry:

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I think so as well. Yes/no answers is about as far as they'll be able to communicate. It prevents things from being too static, but keeps that wall between them.

As I was expecting when I started editing, this chapter, and the one after, are getting very little in the way of changes. Mostly touch-ups, certainly nothing that's warranted such a long delay. I've just been busy writing other stories and hoping for a flash of inspiration. Part 5 is in the process of being edited and should be ready in the next few days. Once that's done Part 6 shouldn't be far behind. Hopefully. Usual disclaimer that I am slow and easily distracted still applies. :twilightoops:

=. .=

Part Five has the fewest amount of changes yet. Mostly just some toning down of swearing, tidying up a couple things, and that's about it.

Comments appreciated. :twilightsmile:

I really like this story, and I cant wait until you get to the new stuff.

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Thanks! Chapter 6 (ie, new stuff) is just about ready. Needs a few hits with an editing mallet, but that's about it. :twilightsmile:

You, my good sir, have won.

It may have fewer changes, but the changes work best here. Subtle changes, but they improve the writing quite a lot

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Working on part 6 right now. It's a bit rougher than the stuff posted and it's pacing is all wrong. :facehoof: Oh well, that's what the Mallet of Editing is for. :rainbowdetermined2:


1018714

Yay! What did I win? An Ipod? A car? A refill of my Tim Hortons coffee? I like the last one best. Mmmm... coffee.... :raritystarry:

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Very subtle changes indeed. I wonder if anyone who's read both versions would even notice the differences. :rainbowderp: :twilightblush:


Thanks for the comments everyone! :twilightsmile:

1019339 I did read both, and I heartily approve of this version. It seems to flow mch better.

Do want more as quickly as possible, please! :fluttershysad::applecry:

I wonder if tigers even exist in equestria naturally; considering most fauna and flora are either mythical or magical in some way.

Sorry for the delay, I was waiting for a response from EqD about getting the story featured. They said 'no', again. I had a moment of sad. :fluttercry: But they pointed out some problems (stupid commas), so after I hit the grammar I may give it a third, and final, shot.

But I have a question; Is the narrator too verbose? :rainbowhuh: It's something that's been mentioned to me a few times from different sources, and I am having a lot of trouble seeing it myself. It seems to be a sticky point for the EqD pre-reader, and I'm not sure what to do about it. :fluttershysad:

Something else mentioned that I don't know what to do about is that the cover image is 'squished'. Since it's just a cropped screen shot taken from the episode Read It and Weep, I again don't know what to do. I'd replace it in a heartbeat if anyone suggested something better. Apple Bloom alone in the Everfree would be great. I know there is nothing with Apple Bloom and a Tiger; I've looked. :applecry:

So yeah, that's what's been on my mind lately.

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Huzza! :yay:

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Given Daring Do fights a Tiger in Read It and Weep, they at least know of them. :rainbowdetermined2:

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:pinkiehappy: :moustache:

1075520 I'm quite an intelligent kid, so I find this story to be exemplary! (That's another word for excellent mind you.) And I find the narration to be just fine, not too verbose.

1075520

I don't consider the narrator to be too verbose, in fact it is one of the reasons I like this fic.

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Thanks. That was my thought as well, but like I mentioned, I have been having trouble seeing this 'verbosity'. :unsuresweetie:

I was gone for three days at my grandma's house and there's. O computer there and I couldn't bring my kindle fire.:applecry: was almost the wost week ever if my cousins did bring SKYRIM!FOS RO DAH!!!:pinkiegasp:
But still miserable.:fluttercry:

1075520 It's not about the commas. It's about 'they don't feel like reading it so they just say no'.

They reject 9 out of 10 stories simply because the prereaders don't feel like giving it a good read.

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Based on the email's I got from them I don't think that is the case. At least not here. The first time in particular there was a heaping ton of comments. Which lead to the re-write, and the story is much better for it.

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Skyrim, Oh, how I love and hate you... So fun, but it just eats up the days. :applecry:

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Yea, but they brought some game formers and one had mop in it. And I read that after a defeated alduin and forgot about mlp so I'm like
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I hate auto correct.
ITS FUCKING MLP MOTHER FUCKING AUTO CORRECT!!

1081292 Ok, at least they actually gave you feedback. One of the best, most inventive stories I've ever read on here was just dismissed out of hand a few times with an "Oh, fix the grammar".

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