An enormous robot pony has come from deepest space, crash landed near Equestria, and followed school age Apple Bloom home. Now, the filly has one big friend and an even bigger problem: How do you keep a secret that's 50 feet tall, especially when paranoid government agent Twilight Sparkle is on the "alien invaders" trail, bringing with her the full might of the Canterlot Royal Guard to destroy the giant.
Yes, I know I copied that from the back of the box. No, I don't care. Yes, I apologize if my writing of Southern accents is horrible. I'm so sorry.
And yes, the R63 names used are from On a Cross and Arrow. I like continuity.
Chapters (2)
A story based off of one of my all-time favorite movies?!
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love the concept.......
and im sure this will be a good read.
unless you fuck this up real bad............
This was my favorite movie!
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Didn't see crossover coming. Keep going! =3
I love that movie........*favs*
Thanks for all the views, favs, and upvotes! I never, ever thought I'd wake up to 16 notifications!
709181 I'm using the movie itself as a guideline, so I'm sure I won't...
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THEN I WILL WUB YOU FOWEVEW!!!!!
The picture reminds me of something but i cant remember. plz give me the title cuz it is killing me to remember
715491 Sorry, man, I just had found it off the internets. I don't know the title of it...
709156 Your picture won't come up for some reason...
714168 Yay!
709156 I just realized... you're Hivemind... and you're commenting on my story...
I loved the movie and it's interesting to see a cross over like this.
Hello! Bellum from Authors Helping Authors here to review your story.
Name of Story: The Iron Pony
Grammar score out of 10
I'll gave it a seven
Pros
Nice cross over
Like how Applebloom interact with the robot
Nice sentence structures
Cons
Not really a con, but I find it strange that you gender blended some of the character.
The story is progressing a bit quickly.
Notes Section: Overall, I like the story. Can't wait to see the next chapter.
Hope the review is helpful. Please help me by reading my chapter: A Choice.
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Name of Story: The Iron Pony
Grammar score out of 10: 9.5
Pros:
I love the Iron Giant/MLP crossover idea, and I don't think I've seen anything like this before.
All of the Mane 6 that have been introduced have been in character.
The story is faithful to The Iron Giant
Cons:
I thought Cherilee was a little out of character in her scene in order to fit with the original story.
The fic seems a little bit too close to the original.
If I went back and tried really hard, I guess I could come up with enough grammar points to make it a con, but that's all I can think of for a third con.
Notes Section (how you can improve your fic, at the very least an elaboration of Pros and Cons section)
I realize that you are trying to be as close to the original story as possible, and I commend your efforts. This doesn't mean, however, that you have to sacrifice anything for faithfulness. I haven't seen anything like that yet besides Cherilee being a bit OOC in the school scene, but remember that this isn't just a ponified retelling of The Iron Giant, it's its own entity. Your grammar was amazing. I think I saw a few things in dialog sections, but I can't entirely remember. That's why I gave you a 9.5 instead of a 10. In short, don't be afraid to deviate from the original story and tell your own thing. Also, well played with the r63 versions of RD and Pinkie. Well played.
Enjoy your review! Please help me out by looking at my story: Discord and Cthulhu: College Roommates
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Alright, I'll read those when I get the time. Hopefully.
1909256 Also, I've been thinking, I may re-release the story with the dialogue changed so it's not exactly what's said in the movie. However, I will be doing that for the rest of the 1st story I'm writing right now.
Hey there, Rennoc215 from Authors Helping Authors. I noticed this and thought "Ooh! A crossover from one of my favorite movies? Yes Please!"
Name: The Iron Pony
Grammar Score out of ten: 8
Pro's:
Loyal to the original story
Characters are realistic and close to their originals. You found good counterparts.
Con:
Too loyal to original story. Don't be afraid to throw in some original ideas. I felt like I was reading a mirrored parallel to the movie. If that's what you were going for, you hit that note impeccably. But I still agree with Bronze Statue, remember that this is YOUR story. Try to deviate a little bit, throw some spice into the mix.
Hope this might help. I would appreciate you looking at any of my stories. Take your pick, I don't mind. Any review helps!
And, I want to see where this goes! Liked and Faved, Eagerly awaiting more!
Would be nice to see sweetiebell and scootaloo have fun with appleblooms secret here in the junk yard keep going with this
4883672 I was doing it, but I thought that people wouldn't actually like the whole "directly taking from the movie" thing. A re-write is in the works -- with an extra day in it as well -- so that'll be posted when it's done.