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spidersean


I'm a dude who just started college and I'm a diehard brony. That's about all there is to say about me.

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Years have past since the Infection swept throughout Equestria. Ponyville lays in ruin. The sun only hangs in the air for a few hours, the landscape is barren, and the skies are in utter chaos. So much has been lost to this plague. A single filly searches for answers amidst Ponyville's ruins. She seeks to unravel the chain of events behind this terrible blight, but finds much more in the shifting wastes.

Chapters (4)
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And here's the first chapter! Hope everypony enjoys it! :pinkiehappy:

Aaaand chapter numero dos! Once again, enjoy! :pinkiehappy:

It starts with a zombie bunny and now we have a grown applebloom and no information...

go on

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I dunno. I've been juggling which part to use first. Some people one way, others tell me the other. I guess I just need a really good transition... Which I don't really have.

What was the purple liquid supposed to do?

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Mmm, you'll have to find out. :raritywink: What do you think it does?

The title is completely at odds with how creepy the fic is, man. I have been deceived!

I had assumed the purple liquid was a poison, meant to infect the infected zombies and thus destroy them. Sure Applebloom would be dead but somepony had to sacrifice themselves.

Doesn't look like it's playing out that way, though. So I'm guessing it's causing these migraines. Timetravel? Communication with the dead is more likely.

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just like any other Zombie movie

~yay~

Anything it was, we will find it out in the next 2 chapter I think.
I want to read it!

i want chapter 3:rainbowhuh:

Writing Pinkie Pie in this chapter was a trick. You see, I had to take a few different "kinds" of Pinkie Pie into account.

The first kind was that of the No Fear song. She was able to openly laugh in fear's face, and I wanted to show that in a way that made sense.

Despite this, she freaks out during Bridle Gossip when she's hiding from Zecora. She showed a moment of fear when discussing Spike's zombie pony idea and had a paranoia about Zecora throughout the episode. She's able to laugh at some fears (perhaps illogical ones, like a tree with a scary face), but when there's a real threat, she becomes terrified. She might occasionally have trouble differentiating the two.

Next, I had to [REDACTED]. It's hard to write Pink[REDACTED] nowadays without coming off as cliche, but hopefully I did it right. :applejackunsure:

Lastly, I had to make sure she was still Pinkie Pie. That she still talked enthusiastically and excessively. That she still had her spirit, which hopefully I managed to do right too.

Well, after that long-winded comment, enjoy chapter 3! :3 Feel free to comment, question, whatever!

PS, when you read "Pinkie Pie tried to slam the door shut," click on this!
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=iKwRm4SYu68
:pinkiecrazy:
You're welcome.

This is amazing... Plus with the music... The whole scene is before my eyes... O.O
Make the next chapter ASAP.
...
I think I found the good word for this writing.
EPIC

:pinkiehappy: it was really good and i cant wait for more zombie killing

Still Pinkie Pie. Also, slightly creeped out that Applebloom was enacting her vision of Pinkie's last moments.

Well played, author. I like it.

Still not clear what that purple fluid did. S'okay.

I'm quite anxious to read more! I am especially anxious to read about the origins of this virus/flu.

Made a few edits to Chapter 1, mainly just fixing up the Lyra and Bon-Bon scenes a bit.

I always felt like those two scenes were the weakest in the whole fic, but I feel that this version is fairly strong. :pinkiesmile:

Let me know what you think! Do you like the change? Do you think it works better this way?

I think, with a few more evals, revisions, tweaks, and maaaybe another chapter, it'll be ready to be re-sent for prereader judging over at Equestria Daily. Keeping my fingers crossed for that! :raritystarry:

(PS, today I purchased my first MLP doll. It's my favorite pony, Pinkie Pie. She sits on my computer now, watching everything I view and write. Makes ya feel like you've always got a friend there. :pinkiehappy: )

this was an excellent read.
can't wait for an update:rainbowkiss:

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I've got no beef with the transition, myself.

you killed fluttershy, then made her a zombie....IM MORE THAN UPSET! IM FILLED WITH TULSAN RAGE!:flutterrage:

MnM

Even though I'm upset with the way Fluttershy died, this is an overall great story, which so far seems to have no flaws. Way to go brony.

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Thanks, brony! Your positive feedback is appreciated! :pinkiehappy:

Also, if it's any consolation, she died quickly, in a way. This is for you too, 4145. Putting it this way, imagine if I HADN'T killed her off the bat. Imagine if I made her one of the mane characters and she lived through that encounter. You know what happens to Ponyville and you can guess that things don't exactly get better. :fluttershysad: She's kinda spared that pain.

Anyway, work on Chapter 4 has begun. I'm quite excited for this chapter and I think you all should be too! It'll be a good one! :raritywink:

thanks for reading and leaving a comment! Every little thing helps me! :heart:

pretty good story can't wait for more

Nooooo Scootaloo! :raritycry: :raritycry: :raritycry:

Well it's finally here. After much procrastination, schoolwork, and procrastination, I've finally hammered out Chapter 4!
I'm sorry if this chapter seems a little rough. I didn't proofread it as much as I should have, so there may be more than a few flaws. :twilightsheepish:
Regardless, I'm kind of happy with the way it turned out. I'd love to hear what you guys think about it! LEave a comment, rate it, send me a message, whatever! I love getting feedback, good or bad!

As a note to those of you who are following the series but got a little lost just now, I implore you to re-read some of the earlier chapters. Somethings may have been changed or re-written. This is, after all, a work in progress.

Anyway, without further ado, I give you chapter 4! I hope you enjoy it! :pinkiehappy:

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In addition, reading the first segment with the linked music is fun! :pinkiecrazy:

YOU SON OF A BITCH ....WHY? ....WHY?.....WHY FLUTTERSHY.............. ILL KEEL YOU IN YOUR SLEEP!!!!!



(Epic story so far bro except fluttershy being killed by those she loved and cared for)

Nooooo scootaloo was my 4th favorite



(As I said epic story bro....and if you need a proofreader im you guy

You killed Fluttershy in the very first chapter, probably had her kill Lyra and/or Bon Bon, and then apparently proceeded to let everypony else die? That is a move so bold we should introduce a medal for it.

Anyway, I am intrigued. Promises a much different approach from the usual zombie scenario, what with the time-skip of several years. You also don't seem to be dwelling on the violence too much so far, but rather on the characters. I shall proceed to read the remaining chapters as soon as possible.

Okay, I've finally read the remaining chapters, and I'll just aggregate all my remarks here.

I really like the settings you use in this story. The smashed and broken market, the forgotten party at Sugarcube Corner, the flooded school with the fallen bell, they all feel desolate. Rather than presenting a zombie apocalypse in the making packed with action, this story shoots for an eerie and suspenseful feeling of isolation long after civilization has fallen, and you're doing a superb job with it.

That puts more focus on the characters, and they're holding up well so far. The mysterious filly aside, Applebloom seems to suffering from all she's lost.

I also enjoy the nightmare and the flashback sequences. They're an unusual element, break the dreary isolation up nicely, and at the same time offer insight into the causes. And Pinkie's mental troubles were just brilliantly executed.

Looking forward to reading more.

I unpublished and re-published chapter 4 of this fic because HOLY F:pinkiegasp:CK LOADS OF CHANGES.
I changed the dream segment in hopes of making it a little more immersive yet still understandable and frightening. I also added the filly's story to this chapter, which I know a ton of people have been wanting. It made no sense not to add the story in this chapter, so I caved and decided to add it. REJOICE!

You may be asking yourself, "spidersean, why would this change be SO important? Why unpublish and republish it just because of this?"
Because with all of the changes, the word count for Chapter 4 is now greater than the word count for Chapter 1. That's over 700 words more than before, people! Important stuff, too!

Anyway, expect Chapter 5 soon!

P.S. MLZ CHAPTERS 1-3 ARE ON EQUESTRIA DAILY NOW! :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

Chapter 4 to be submitted shortly, so LOOK FOR THAT TOO!

So many fanfics fall to the trap of telling instead of showing, and others are drowned in explanatory recap. Here I read a story that is entirely in the present and we can learn of the past at a good pace to still follow our intrepid heroes. The dialogue even feels natural.

and as frustrating as I find them, the cliffhanger endings are well done too. :fluttercry: But, Scootaloo!! :raritycry:
(starts singing "I can't decide": 'you'll probably go to heaven; don't hang your head and cry' :scootangel:

lastly, I'm currently assuming the too-tall ponyzombie is what's left of our fair princess? :trollestia:
or not so fair, as the case may currently be.

I do like the new dream section. It's a lot less overwhelming than before, while still staying creepy. However, I did notice one spelling mistake: "Instead, she just laugh even louder" should probably say "laughed".

I also like the filly's background. Even though you present a lot about her, her background fits well into the story. Her starting to ramble to the first living pony she encounters in such a long time is quite believable.
Again, though, two small mistakes I noticed:
“There all dead now,” the filly interrupted Apple Bloom. - Should be "They're," I believe.
Even though we were in the worse situations, the things he would say would make everyone happy. - I think you might have meant "worst situations."

Sorry if I stepped on your toes with that.

sip

sip is liking this fic so far... Should i feel bad for liking horror/grimdark fics? D: >

Hey you posted it on here! Now I can track it and remove the story's EqD page from my bookmarks! :pinkiesmile:

Poor Scootaloo. She deserved better.:fluttercry:

lawl i never knew this was here i read it on equestria daily now i can track it properly hip hip hooray! tho :yay: and :scootangel: being dead makes me sad :( i cant say i like them being dead but if they were alive then how would the story have ended up then? i dont know but what i want to know is....is all of equestria infected? or is it just ponyville and if its just ponyville why hasent luna or celestia tried to do any thing? i know how the infection started Fluttershy got infected by her zombieied animals then infected Lyra and Bon Bon then from then on it spreads tho i am curios about the little filly and her pastyou already explained it or at least some of it but still i am dying (no pun intended) for a nice part 5

Comment posted by Eyup nope why because deleted Jan 20th, 2014
Comment posted by Eyup nope why because deleted Jan 20th, 2014
Comment posted by Eyup nope why because deleted Jan 20th, 2014

I've read all of this and I love it! You did a great job. I hope you continue!:heart::pinkiehappy:

Where's Chapter 5???? :twilightangry2: :twilightangry2::pinkiesad2: :pinkiesad2: :flutterrage: :raritydespair: :applecry::ajbemused:

ACH!Murder! Cold-blooded murder!I shall never look at bunnies the same way again!

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Thank you.It scared me though.
Why I must insist on reading these things at night, I just don't know!

Who was the creature? Was it Celestia? I can totally picture it being celestia.

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dat realizing everyone liked my fic and deciding to come back... us.
Chapter Five is now in the works. :rainbowkiss:

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