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interesting
I'm loving it so far!
oh i like this story already!
Is this a sequel to a story?
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Actually, no. It isn't. Just something I put together. I'm glad everyone is enjoying it so far!
lovin it so far!
also i hate to say this but i think you made a teensy error "Then go ahead." She said. "I'll walk outside with you so nothing gets destroyed in here, and you can do whatever you want to me. Take a punch at me, blast me into a tree trunk, half kill me...I won't stop you. Its no less than I deserve, after what I did, and if it means you'll forgive me too, then, just do it."
sorry but i think it would give it a bit more depth as to how much Scoots wants forgiveness if you said this:
"Then go ahead." She said. "I'll walk outside with you so nothing gets destroyed in here, and you can do whatever you want to me. Take a punch at me, blast me into a tree trunk, kill me...I won't stop you. Its no less than I deserve, after what I did, and if it means you'll forgive me too, then, just do it."
just one small change, otherwise its good!
(p.s sorry i like drama stories especially ones with death)
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I'm gonna confess, it took me three times of reading through your comment to find the error you pointed out
But I found it!! Lol. Thanks for the suggestion. I went back and fixed it.
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you didn't have to do that, but i just thought it would sound deeper, thanks though
This was a good story, I enjoyed it and I will admit that I actually ended up crying a little bit.
Brilliant but frighteningly vivid backstory; I really felt I was there
You can actually feel the turmoil inside Scoots as she returns to face what she left behind.
Very powerful and compelling writing!
Wow!
You can feel the courage Scoots has had to show to face the music. I could truly see Sweetie Belle as the single voice of condemnation to her welcome home.
Very powerful writing, and I sense there is even more drama to come.
Looking forward to it!
You're welcome!
You've done a fantastic job with it!
So now, completely out of the blue, Apple Bloom is 100% better and Scootaloo is now permanently messed up?
I have to wonder have everypony will react to this? Or wonder is something else is going on?
Something just tell me that that Dark Magic character is in for a world of hurt once Twilight finds out everything she can about him.
Put it this way: I wouldn't want to be in his horseshoes when that happens.
I do not trust this stallion. I get the feeling that his "healing" is going to require/cause a lot of pain for somepony down the line.
BEHOLD THE GREATEST SACRIFICE , LET IT KNOW , SCOOTA THE CRUSADER IS NO MORE , SHE NOW FOREVER MORE BE KNOWN AS SCOOTA THE HERO!
Is this a sequel?
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No, it just starts a little bit ahead of itself.
Oh, boy.
Clue Rarity Flipout in 3... 2... 1..........
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Yep, time to wave goodbye to Rarity's mind.
We'll miss you.
9250929 Indeed.
Woot Woot! im actually sad this ended but still, great work!
Starting. This is a placeholder. I look forward to this.
Not bad, there were twists I didn't see coming and a couple I hoped for that didn't.
Ended on a flat note, but it works.
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Very effective
Yay, Scoots!
You... have caught my attention
I mean like... it’s not bad
Honestly, I expected Sweetie Belle to be guilty as hell, because she felt it was her outburst that made Scootaloo exile herself. Words said in anger that she regrets. I guess not though.
I wonder if Dark Magic could had in theory report Princess Twilight and her friend for kidnapping him and threatening, there is no law that he had broken and Scootaloo is a adult that know what she does so is her decision... They let Sweetie Belle choose but when is Scootaloo choice they take it as if she did bad.
Also, I wonder why no one think of asking Discord... If he can make horns and wings disappear and re-appear, he could take care of the injuries.
P.S: Good fic
Nice Fic you've got here.
I am interested, you’ve caught me in the web