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Priceless911


An artist, a historian, a firearms expert, a soldier, a critice, a writer, and a brony. but through it all, i am merely nothing compared to the creativity of others. be sure to let your's shine.

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(Prequel to Tears of a Fallen Star)
More than one thousand years ago, the world was a continuous string of wars. With nations at each other’s throats, leaders would place their trust in the assistance of mercenaries. But of all the mercenaries in the world, none were more feared than a special group known only as “The Cutters”. This group of three ponies, an earth pony and two pegasi were so feared that most nations would hesitate before hiring them. Mainly because their number one rule was to work for the highest bidder. Even if it meant killing their current contractor. With a past shrouded in mystery and a skill unmatched by any nation. these three mercenaries would kill without hesitation, without fear, and without mercy, a jewel for any nation’s military force. Yet there is more to them than what meets the eye.

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not really but givin their past its, an effect of an unfortiounat life. not to mention they have a connection with the mian character of my other story Tears of a Fallen Star, so the color scheem had to be chosen carfully.
each has a tallent that has been added to their fightning style, Traipse the earthpony and the only male of the group likes to go into battle unarmed.
the rest will be added shortly but ill be adding them as i go on anouther story that has yet to be added here on FimFiction. this is just the first of probably 6 parts or more (i never know how long my stories run untill they end.)

Comment posted by Priceless911 deleted May 24th, 2013
Comment posted by Priceless911 deleted May 24th, 2013

Oh shit, you finally got started on The Cutters huh? I better go read up what I've been missing on the other site before I go crazy on this, anyhow congrats on making a new story once again.

2087630 yep the difference is already finished im just waiting on the proofreaders corrections, and i even finished the first chapter of the Kings war last night... im on a roll :rainbowdetermined2:

2089093
Oh geez, that you are indeed. I'm happy to hear about your progress thus far, It'll be interesting to see how the series ends and how the your new stories comes into play when I'm finally catch up. Hope things turns out well for you:pinkiesmile:

2303065
same here, she has to be my favorite of the three.

Activating 'Are you fucking kidding me' face. [spoilers]DO I NEED TO SLAP A CHANGLING!?[/spoilers]

2691396
well i guess he got what was coming to him

What NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO... Ok kinda expected the foal thing but still NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO:raritycry::raritycry::raritydespair::fluttershbad:

dude that link with your other story made me damn near cry . . . :rainbowdetermined2: for scy:rainbowlaugh:

3042400
yep i wish i could find an artist to make an image that has all of Star Bolt's major accomplishments (the royal gaurd exam, promotion to commander, the cloudsdale battle, the battle of canterlot, est.) with Scy in the background watching over him like a good mother would. (w/o him knowing of course) it would be an image that just thinking about brings a tear to my eye.
there is one more ch left for this one but i won't start on it till i finish the king's war since it will kinda spoil a surprise for the end of that one.

this is real dark stuff. its very dark compared to you other storys but its a story that i want to read. and BTW if you got any better at making storys i'd probaly be in a coma from the excitment of what will happen next! never let anyone tell you otherwise.

3169583
thx ^^ sadly dark and dramatic are my best ideas lol.
Since little is mentioned about the time befor NNM I felt that this was a sort of "Dark Ages" for Equestria, and something very common in the dark ages was war, and injustice. so I decided to show examples of what tragedy, pain and injustice can bring to a world in conflict, Thus the cutters were born.
im glade you like my writing and I hope you enjoy this story even though its not finished just yet.

Delightful i loved it:twilightsmile::twilightsmile::twilightsmile::raritystarry::rainbowkiss::pinkiehappy::ajsmug:

wow just wow if thats stuff gets any better i might just passout:pinkiehappy:

This is epic and really dark. I like it

3324247
Thx ^^
feel free to check out the other stories. all three intertwine with each other. and the king's war has the cutters in it too.

I want to know more about the Cutters please write another story about them or at least confirm or deny their presence in your next story

3331225
sorry but that's all there is to it. they wont be in the next story because the next is a sequel to The Wondering Star. but the secret of Eden is a major part of the next story. but The King's war tells a large part of their story.

Read the story again and loved it even more

That awkward moment of connection when you realized that he when through what Commander Bolt is going through...

Great chapter and story so far. One thing that annoys me with this though but I understand why you did it is that Traipse didn't lleave when they trusted a random stranger over him. If that happened to me I would just say "You know what I'm leaving."

5687445
"Screw you guys... im going home" lol
true, everyone would react their own way. im glade you like it so far, I hope you enjoy the rest.

3903237 That awkward moment where you decide to read the prequel first, and the first comment you see references the main story...

I loved the story!

Traipse stepped forward ignoring his wounds from earlier, “To Protect the mare I love… I do. I will kill any lord, Princess, King, or even God, that so much as threatened her!”

I feel a little upset about what he said about God as it wouldn't be plausible but that's mainly due to me being Catholic. No hate towards the story though.

8142397
I'm glad you enjoyed it. :twilightsmile:
as far as the god thing, I'm fairly curtain that the mlp universe has separate gods/goddesses of its own, some even claim Celestia as being one such goddess, but "to each his own" as the saying goes. :derpytongue2:
I'm glad you like it, and I hope you enjoy the sequels, this is the first of a series after all.

2691396
Take away the 's' in {spoiler}{/spoiler}
Your comment supposed to say this:

Activating 'Are you fucking kidding me' face. DO I NEED TO SLAP A CHANGLING!?

Ooh, please tell me some of these mercenaries are based off of the Ginyu Force!

9134419
Actually they weren't really based on anyone, I just threw together the idea of seemingly heartless and powerful soldiers who not only fight for themselves first, but also have a past that would bring about their lack of loyalty to any nation.
Although I never thought about it (since its been ages since I saw the old DBZ series) but the Cutters and the Ginyu Force are similar when I look at it.

If the main OCs in this story were voiced, what would they sound like?

9804057
The reaper would have a voice that only a wise woman would have sort of a leader voice.
Traipse would be almost the same with only a male voice.
and Blade would most likely have a Cocky yet untrustingly friendly voice. though at this point, she would have more of a noble tone to her speech since she is a noble again.

a truly grate story that has earned a place in my favored list.

10016937
Thx, I'm glad you enjoyed it. Its one of my darker stories, but it still fits well as a prequel

10019917
we need more story's like this i am tired of rainbows and smiles.

one of the reasons i like the five score divided by four story line's so much.

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