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Fluttershy and Discord have become very close friends over the past three months. So close that Discord starts revealing personal things about romantic feelings. Fluttershy takes it upon herself to make sure that her new best friend gets his Hearts and Hooves day wish from a Certain Princess that he has eyes for, even if it means either chaos or her own feelings being left behind.

Fluttershy even request the help of Twilight to help her with this romantic mission.

So come read along on this fantastic adventure about romance, friendship and acceptance.

Chapters (7)
Comments ( 33 )

Well... to be honest with you, I liked it. So please, continue writing.
Also have a yay. :yay:

xD Well this is interesting. Rather unique and I do enjoy reading the Discord you write. I look forward to more.

Fluttershy felt like a breathless feather, frozen in time.

Hoh boy...

A little bit purple, but still fun to read. ^^

Hmm, you have my attention. I am very interesting in seeing how this goes to Dislestia. :trixieshiftright: :twilightsmile:

I am actually squeeing right now. Job well done.

write more pweeze :fluttershysad:

Oh crap, The dreaded Triangle... I detect an onslaught of nut-shots in Discord's future...

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More like a Love Square, Dude.... :heart:

Comment posted by THE party cannon deleted Jan 31st, 2013

ok followers:heart:, so that you know, i post a new chapter every night. and it is not going to be a long story, so look out for a new chapter once a day :):eeyup:

You could use a beta reader for this because there are a few grammar mistakes and problems with the pacing, but otherwise this is very enjoyable. I hope you won't ruin it by rushing :twilightsmile: Keep up the good work~

Comment posted by TuniPeace deleted Jan 31st, 2013

2053187 You could try this group or this group. I'm sure you'll find someone :twilightsmile:

Hilarious misunderstandings, ahoy!

I somewhat feel bad for Big Mac now

Oh boy, the misunderstandings. :twilightsheepish: Also, I just now noticed this, and it's a minor complaint, but could you please figure out if we're going present tense or past on this? It's not a major deal, but once I found it it drove me nuts. :twilightsheepish:
Example:
Heck no I wasn't " Yelled Big Mac. He lifted his head and looked up at the hovering Fluttershy with frustration again. Fluttershy landed to the ground and backed away slightly. Big Macintosh sighed, rolled his eyes and calmed down. He stepped lightly to Fluttershy, bowing his head.

All past tense, like we're viewing it happening as an audience.

Big Macintosh rubs the back of his neck, looking down and away. He gulps heavily and feels a cold sweat. The red earth pony clears his throat and darts his eyes back at the awaiting yellow Pegasus.

Present tense, like we're all viewing it like we're actually there.

Or, at least, I think that's a decent definition. :twilightsheepish:

Oh my indeed:twilightoops: please continue.

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im sorry that chapter 4 is so short. so look out for a bouns chapter today :)

Only two chapters left! i added this chapter because I felt that I made chapter 4 too short.

Uh oh, Twilight's lecture cannon activated! :twilightsmile:

Wow, what an ending. :D

That's it? I expected a bit more, honestly.

:flutterrage: I demand a sequel... NAO.

It was a good read, my friend. Though I would've liked more chapters, it was really good. I'm looking forward to your next work.

2072376 thanks :)

until i write my next story you can enjoy the even more heart wrenching "Shadow of the heart" written by me, with even fewer chapters ::raritystarry:

yay:yay:

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/67906/shadow-of-the-heart

im late dammit very,
and now im here, very displeased.
this was fucked up, even for discord. fuck this petty love triangle, he should have chose fluttershy.
good day sir.

why do these fanfics make me like applejack less and less

This story is a perfect example of what one wants and expects, versus what is right and what fits into the story. I know some people may not like this story for the ending alone, claiming they wish Discord could be with Fluttershy, also complaining about the irrelevance of Celestia and Big Mac.

However, I must commend this story for doing the one part of love that mostly all modern love stories don't explore. That if you love something, let it go. The sappy, typical ending where the lovers realize their foolishness and come back together, after that painfully predictable middle act where they are all depressed about a problem. This story does have a bit of that middle conflict, but it doesn't just reveal that true love is always apparent and comes through. Rather, it is a tough, but worthwhile experience that makes life worth living and the way Fluttershy handles it, I believe, is very in character.

Discord, however, feels the weakest part of the story. You really did make him too sappy for the lord of chaos, removing most of his jokes, personality, and son on, which would make Fluttershy accepting him for what he is, all the better. Unfortunately, here he is just too much of a sap to really come off as Discord, and more as some lovestruck guy.

Regardless, this fic isn't meant to be a huge look into the soul, but a short fic that explores a concept of love that isn't new, but often forgotten in favor of the 'love wins at the end.' It still does here, but not in the way most want, but fits into the story overall. Nice read, thank you. Favorite. Like.

THIS IS THE THIRD FUCKING TIME TODAY I SEE THAT COVER PICTURE :rainbowlaugh: Brb while I read the first chapters. :pinkiesad2:

Is it over:applejackunsure: if it is than 1...2...3....... Waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh:fluttercry::flutterrage::fluttershysad::raritycry::raritydespair::applecry::applejackconfused:

Great and lovely story. :yay:
I realy like it. :ajsmug:

But I don't understand the ''sex'' tag. :derpyderp1:

3409105 AJ's kinda hard to write for. Unless she's in a supporting role, you know.

I just finished it! :heart: This little gem is going in my favorites

I had a dream recently, that involved a love triangle between fluttershy, discord, and myself. I was discorded, by discord, jealous thing that he is. I left ponyville, vowing never to love again. at this point, I woke up. WHAT DOES IT ALL MEAN???

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