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Spike and Twilight are throwing a party on Hearts Warming day. They invite the other five over to open gifts, have dinner and enjoy the night together.

I wrote this in honor of the holidays. Hope you enjoy and have a Merry Christmas/Happy Holiday and a Happy New Year!
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Comments ( 31 )

is it already?:rainbowderp:
dear Celestia i thought i had more time... crud! I lack gifts for everypony!:fluttercry:

welp-

this well have to do.
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:heart:happy hearths warming everypony:heart:

:moustache::raritywink:

It was now time for desert. Spike took everybody’s dirty dishes

who is this everybody that tou speak of? i believe you mean everypony

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Oops. Thanks for pointing that out. I shall change that immediately.

shameless promo comment work in progress: beast story being co written by six beast authors to be released soon

? what i said shamrless

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Trust me you'll get no promotion here, I'm not very popular on Fim Fiction.

didnt say it was aimed at anyone i just enjoy confusion

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Well sir you succeeded. I hope it was worth your while.

nice sparity, then i'm there!!! :heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::heart::moustache::raritywink:

just one thing, though... i can't imagine Rarity saying something lie "darn it", remember she's a Lady! :raritywink:

It was sweet and there were little to no grammar or spelling errors. It's biggest flaw is that it was bogged down with lengthy descriptions of mundane procedures: discussing plans, wrapping gifts, and especially preparing food. The whole fanfic could have been cut down to 2K words. Other than those passages that I had to skim, I really enjoyed it.

Merry Christmas!

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Awesome picture. But why does she seem (dare I say it) fat.

Nooooooooooo, now if she ever becomes a human she won't marry me. :fluttercry:

Oh well, good luck Spike with a fat Rarity (she'll always ask you if she's fat)

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She's not fat! :twilightangry2:
And besides: You don't want to marry a skeleton, now do you?
And besides (again): Chubby ponies are cute! :yay:

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Well, that's future Spike's problem, he'll have to break the news to her that she's fat. :raritycry:

This was really awkward to read. I agree with swashbucklist, there is too much description of the mundane. I think you should pull away from the step-by-step action, and add more depth to the world. I hardly remember the gift-giving sequence. Try to give the group scenes as much detail and weight as you do the cooking scenes. There is definitely something here, but it needs refinement.

Nice. Good for the data.

I really enjoyed the story, especially the cooking parts inspired me about, what to have for lunch :-)

Thank you

This story was excellent, No Comma Patrick!

Comment posted by rarityxspike deleted Feb 19th, 2013

Well, I said I was going to read more of your work. Normally, I skip past winter holiday-themed stories. (Halloween...oops...I mean, Nighmare Night is my fave holiday.) I like this. It's very cute and sweet without being smarmy. I'm glad I read it, so it gets an upvote. Take care.

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Thanks, I'm glad you like it! :pinkiehappy:

I really liked your story it was very interesting. i found the bit at the end very sweet :heart:

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Thank you! :twilightsmile:
I'm glad you enjoyed it! :pinkiehappy:

This was a beautiful, touching, and heartwarming story. :heart::twilightsmile::pinkiehappy::raritywink: The perfect mix of comedy and touching moments made this awesome! :rainbowkiss: I love how Spike was appreciated for the hard work he put in the food, and I am so proud of Twilight in telling him that she wanted him to spend time with them. :twilightsmile:

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Too many times Spike gets used. That's why I write him, the way he should be treated (unless it's a sad, dark story).

I must have overlooked this story before, and I'm sorry that I did, because this was a beautiful piece.

Unlike some other commentators, I actually liked the descriptive step-by-step preparations. These really added to the Slice-of-Life feel of the story. It brought memories of my own holiday preparations to mind while reading this work.
Good job.

--Spade

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