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Nightmare Moon/Luna has been banished to the moon by her sister Celestia. However unknown to Celestia herself, Nightmare Moon/Luna had some extra baggage with her at the time....

Based off a picture post I saw floating around a site. I decided to write for 60 minutes to see what I could make. Here's the primary result.

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Extra baggage? What? We already knew she had some emotional issues, given the "going insane and shrouding Equestria in eternal night" thing, so why write an entire story about it? Unless you're talking about a baby or something... *Reads chapter title* Oh. Oh, shit.

a Reason why Luna/Nightmare Moon came back for Revenge

Sad......

I liked it. Nightmare Moon is best pony.
I thought you did a good job making the story feel sad even though it was just over 1000 words.

11 months. Ponies gestate for 11 months, not 9.

My my...
Interesting!

Baggage.... I wonder if that means... OH!:twilightoops:
Very well done. I give many applauds at this story. Sadness was done very well. Definitely well worth the read. Maybe i'll add this.... Yeah this should fit.
Anyway, great story, i will be waiting for more to come.

Shit... as soon as I saw that picture I knew what this story was going to be about....:pinkiesad2::raritycry::fluttershysad: I just had to read it anyways didn't I?

WAS CELESTIA EVEN LISTENING TO HER SISTER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage::flutterrage:

I... well... shit. That hit the feels.

That cover pic...poor Nightmare Moon. While it was a short story, it did manage to seriously tug at my heartstrings. It's quite a unique idea, all be it a very sad one... cdn.broni.es/images/emotes/mlp-lsad.png
My feels were further felt, because this music was playing in my mind as I read this: Sadness

Even though there were some minor grammar errors, they hardly subtracted from the story. Thus you deserve this:
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Likely? She COULDN'T.:pinkiesad2:

Poor Nightmare Moon. Her child didn't deserve that!:raritydespair:

Kinda wish you included Celestia's "D'oh Shit" moment assuming Luna told her this happened, also was I the only one expecting the baby to somehow be Twilight? I mean there are a lot of Twilight is a princess stories out there...

SEQUEL! SEQUEL! SEQUEL!

Here's the source for the cover image- My Night Will Last Forever

edit: It's also the full image, not just the tiny snippet you see here.

Hey... psst. This story is very similar. Read it. My Night Will Last Forever- The Wizard Of Words

Oh god please no, please don't make me read this. The short story alone tore my heart out, I won't be able to handle a full story of it. Oh god why?

*reads chapter*

*cries in emotional agony*

This is the most feature box worthy story I have read since "anno domini"

No. No please no. No. Dear God no. Why? Why do you do this to me? Why do you toy with my poor emotions? Fuuuuuuuuuucccccck I hate you sooooooo muuuuuuuuch. :raritydespair::fluttershbad::pinkiesad2:

Nothing burns brighter than the flame of revenge

Ah jeez that hit the rough part. Very well wrote. :fluttercry:

....Damn, I need a hug...

Wow... I am heartless...

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:pinkiegasp: The full image is beautiful...but sooooooooooooooooo sad. I shed manly tears because of it. :fluttercry: But thank you for sharing the full version.

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Another sad Nightmare Moon fic? ...I'll add it to my read later list. I don't know if can handle another one just yet. But thank you for sharing the link.

1399866 I meant I expected it to be twilight when she first mentioned being pregnant...since Alicorn twilight stories aren't so rare, of course It was disregarded when it was birthed and it wasn't lavender and everything. It was a assumption.

:raritycry::raritydespair: WHY MUST YOU DO THIS!:raritycry::raritydespair:

1400063 Me too...

i.imgur.com/j4Nnv.png ~Wolf
Long Vive, Lupus Imperii!

1398420 It only says she was on the moon for 9 months, that doesn't mean she got pregnant the day she got banished now does it. :trollestia:

1398737 Actually, it's not a unique idea; I have read a fanfic a while ago that had almost the same plot, though NMM's child died instantly upon birth in that one. Unfortunately I can't find it any more. I don't even remember if it was on fimfiction or on some other site.

Not that I hold it against the author of this fic; such ideas are bound to come up multiple times.

1400532 Fair enough.

1400286 Well, you're very much welcome. :twilightsmile:

...All my feels.

:raritycry: Soooo friggin sad! so many manly tears being shed right now :raritycry:

Comment posted by Gribbit deleted May 27th, 2019

Dark.

Saw the 'tragedy' tag. I read the 'extra baggage' bit in the description. I knew i should've avoided this story afterwards. I ignored those thoughts. I paid for it with my sad feels now. I have no regrets. I must be on a sad-story binge tonight. This is the third one that i've at least teared up at.

Fuck... That hit hard. If this hasn't hit the feature box yet... It definitely deserves to. You know what RapeTrain? You get a watch for just these ~1400 words. It's not much, but it's the least i can do for your words having a single tear drop from my face.

So sad...

Oh, hello Fridge Horror. How are you tonight? What! The foal suffered an excruciatingly painful death as her blood boiled in the vacuum of space and her limbs bloated from lack of pressure? Only mitigated by the fact that she lost consciousness after a few seconds from lack of oxygen?

Thanks, thanks a lot, Fridge Horror. :pinkiesad2::fluttercry::raritydespair::applecry::ajsleepy:

.... right in the feelzz... :applecry:

1404307 Damn you for reminding me of the other aspects of death by vacuum. Now I'm crying harder.:fluttercry: Now I'm going to torture myself by reading the other fic based on this picture.

No word will describe my sorrow towards that child:fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry:

Hmm...Very sad, Very good. Thanks for writing this, it is lovely, in a dark, sad way...

1411057 What other fic...?

1418674 My Night Will Last Forever
It was linked to by someone else earlier in these comments.

This better get a sequel!

It would be interesting to see how hard Celestia takes it when she hears about this, there would be so much of the sad.

1398376 The bad thing if this is why she came back for revenge she should really have gotten it in my opinion.

1460561 You should make a Sequal to this:pinkiecrazy:

Curious thing that the source picture the stilborn foal looked identical to Cadance originally, then again it was said uncanny resemblance and the negative feedback that forced the artist to recolor the stillborn foal, I know that because I saw the original picture

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