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Apollo and Artemis


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The Apocalypse was over. Earth was nothing but a smoldering mass of debris and corpses. The Hellguard had won the war, the humans not putting up much of a fight and the Horsemen killing indiscriminately. As the Hellguard returned to the White City, a strange glowing bluish white rune appeared underneath Death and he disappeared. Death awakened to the sight of small, colorful horses. Oh, how his day did not go his way.

Just something some people wanted me to do.

Chapters (5)
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Comments ( 120 )

Every single sentence is structured as "Death did this, then Death did that" followed by "Luna did this and then Luna did that." Pronouns are your friend.:coolphoto:

Although it turned out great, i agree with L0n3w0lf. also you seem to ignore my advice? just curious why.

I believe I like where this is going. :moustache: Do continue.

1394431 I'm sorry! I was getting impatient with my really slow internet and the weekend just started. We still have to do shooting for our project in school and I wanted to get a chapter out before it.

is good start. i like it.

please continue :moustache:

1393577 i know right

finally a darksiders 2 crossover

1394571 oh its ok. i was just wandering.
1395967 This awesome person has another but with a custom character (a fith horseman)

Not a bad idea at all, I like the idea of the four horsemen in equestria, specifically the from Darksiders universe.
Still, it needs a good bit of work and proof reading, also, use pronouns, people wont loose focus of who is doing what very easily.

oooh!! ooh!!!:pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp: I KNOW WHO THE GUY IN THE DARK IS!!! I KNOW!!!:pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp: ITS THE FIFTH HORSEMAN U MENTIONED EARLIER OMGSHLOLWTFBBQ:yay::yay:

be more descriptive with your writing here let me give you an example:

"As Death opened his eyes, he saw what looked to be a ruined castle, chipped and worn, but also stable. As Death studied these ruins, three figures appeared before him."

just a short example you know. :derpytongue2:

If they're doing a Darksiders crossover, there has to be a Diablo crossover sometime.

1396974 Sorry. Too poor to get Diablo 3.... Also its not too high on my priority list.

1396974
You can go check out Justice Itself. It's a pretty good one.

Somehow.... Somehow it just seems..... off. I mean, it's good. But just.... off. I can't specify though.... Maybe it's the formatting? I don't know.... Hmmmm.... Lemme get back to you on it. Too fast maybe?

Ok, this fic holds great promise, first chapter was a bit short tough.

1398716 It's just a prologue. The chapters will get longer and with improved writing style.

1399397 Okay, I faved anyways, so you have my attention. Have a factoid.
During World War II, on January 18, 1943, bakers in the United States were ordered to stop selling sliced bread for the duration of the war. Only whole loaves were made available to the public. It was never explained how this action helped the war effort.

awesome....tracking

Is it strange that the moment I refreshed the page, the views were 666?

Death massecres all his enemies. Predictable, but it certainly beats most crossovers.

Death meets Twillight Sparkle.....oh this is so epic!!! :pinkiehappy:

MOAR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:flutterrage:

Because when I meet death I make sure to just say "Hi." It's the appropriate response in all cases right? Yes.
I'm feeling this story and can't wait for more.
-Sturrn

more more more more more moremoremmoremoremoremoremoremoremoremoremore

too much sister this sister that......way too much use of it....they have names ya know

but still a good story:raritywink:

This is the meaning of kick flank

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dude if i got a nickel for every time i got to see 666
i would have death made a run for its money
sample
collecting souls 666
collecting gold 666
needed exp 666
ect.
hell is playing mind games with every one

2584826 Ah crap, I COMPLETELY forgot to update this! Sorry, but I promised a new story and this will have to wait until then. You know what though? I want to ask what you guys want me to update first. I'll post a poll soon.

How a bought now pretty pwleas with extra chocolate sprinkls and a happy pinky and fluttershy on toptop

That was very nice, I quite enjoyed it. :pinkiesmile:

its nice to see an update but... da hell? :applejackconfused: the entire fight felt pointless

2822004 Don't worry! I may add a couple fights with the princesses in the future. Possibly much more life-threatening. Dunno yet.

2822013 Thanks man. And you still want to continue with the collab?

Lol, before posting this very comment, the number of comments was the answer of life, 42. Kinda ironic, given that this is a story about Death.

Awesome, wanna see where this goes!

In the Luna-sees-the-moon-and-notices-something-bad scene, a flashback would've worked:twilightsmile:

Wow. You see kids this is why miscommunication is so dangerous, if instead of 'I can't tell you' Celestia had said 'I don't know' She would have avoided that thing and this chapter would be 500 words shorter. Thankfully though Celestia is dumb and we got to read more words :raritywink:

Yesyesyesyesyesyesyesyesyesyesyesyess!!!!!!! Thank you soooo much I felt like forever and pinky says thanks times 100 and she ate all the chocolate sorry and fluttershy is smileing so thanks

Very good so far! I'm definitely enjoying this.

I'm definitely tracking this.

You've got Deaths attitude right keep it like that through out this

2822058 I am not going to hide it, I laughed my ass off for a while after reading that comment. Then again everything looks funnier after watching The Master of Disguise. *Shudders*

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