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Cloud Thunderhoof


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When fortune hunter Nathan Drake discovers a secret operation on a remote island he unknowingly sets a two thousand year old plan in motion. Drake finds himself thrust into a a new world he didn't know existed and his only hope of return lies in the hooves of forces be barely understands.

Chapters (5)
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did'nt is actually spelled didn't. Simple mistake, no worries.

this is pretty good, a few mistakes but none that really disrupt the story's flow. Except for the getting help, then suddenly getting firewood thing. You never said she left, or got back before suddenly transitioning between leaving to get help in town and leaving to get firewood.

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Fluttershy went back to get help and applebloom went to get firewood in order to avoid applejack, I will edit it in the morning to make that more clear

3239811 ooooookay, the yellow bit threw me off a bit because i didn't know shy had left yet

Applejack slowed her pace and looked up at her hovering friend. “So there safe?”, the orange pony asked, a glimmer of hope coming to her voice.

*Screams internally*


*Calmly speaks*
Alright, that 'there' supposed to be 'they're'.

This is a really good start! You captured the attitudes of Drake and Sully seamlessly, and also that of the ponies as well. Keep up the good work!

This is pretty good. I'll keep an eye on this one. You know what else would be pretty cool? Dead Space ponies, HOLY SHIT. (an idea for another fic maybe?) I you make a Dead Space fic it would be the best thing ever and I will read it to death.:scootangel:

I hate to be 'that guy' but isn't Hydra blood acidic to touch? Didn't it melt Heracles' skin off?

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Neither of them touched it, they just just looked at it.

The only problem I have with the story so far is lack of words per chapter... but when it comes to that, I'm a greedy little bastrd:derpytongue2::pinkiehappy:

I like it, Just would like a little more per a chapter, I'm a fan of Uncharted so I'm excited to see where this goes. I love how you switched Points of view. Good job!

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I will try to have more words per chapter, however its hard to have long chapters and keep up with consistent updates while also keeping up with my school work and obligations in real life.

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Great Job! I liked it. Keep up the good work.

I like this crossover so far

Nate seems to be taking it a little better then I though but then again... look at all he's gone though. I'm guessing this is before Equestria Girls as Twilight has no idea about humans yet. That said I can see a few ways for Drake to get home.

Also hope to see more of him and Rainbow Dash... it interest me to see how this will work out. Maybe not as a full on paring but good friends :rainbowwild: .

You bot me hooked so I hope for a update soon :derpytongue2:

I enjoyed this chapter quite a bit! From the beginning with Sully, to the end with Celestia's Reaction. Great job.
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Great chapter, although I did have to go back and reread the previous ones the remember what was going on.

Also, Luna, what are you doing? That was extreamly reckless of you.

:pinkiehappy: I'm so happy that this awesome story has updated, but please don't leave for months again with a cliffhanger like that... please:fluttercry:

Nope. I am done. Any type of ponyfication is stupid. Even if it is an illusion.

Just a heads up, you've been misspelling barely as barley. Barley is a grain. One that I have yet to find tasty in any recipe. Understandably, it's not tasty here, either.:twistnerd:

Maybe his mind was rejecting Luna? Seems like it with the nosebleed...

Please more chapters don't abandon it. :fluttercry:

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