i'm a 19 year old latino, i love to type when i have time to myself. and my friends call me corrosive since i like chemistry and people say i have great idea's for story's.
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A lone boy by the name of Gyro Gurlukovich, is stuck in between the war against the Taliban and the US military. Not only does he fight with the Afghanistan Rebels, but is also in a war with himself, believing that Equestria is real he wishes he can leave, but many horrific events Gyro will come across in his journey to freedom, but can he escape the war with whats been hiding inside of him all these years..
AN:I'm still new to editing but be honest if i need help
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ehhh not bad bro
otherwise very well done and written. poor Gyro I feel for the guy 
though the way Gyro and everyone else didn't notice the soldiers, terrorists, and possible shooting seems like a bit of a stretch.
1382995 well it's late afternoon and the town probably new the terrorist were coming so they went
Wait... Gyro can breath fire? Cool!
1427808 Eeyup i thought it would be cool
sweet you finally got your story up
1428837. eeyup
why did he breath fire...IM SO CONFUSED
1429841 it will be revealed in do time my friend
wow man this is awesome
i would love to read more man keep it up
1430715 I will glady do my friend
lol mythbusters
I like how the same people who read my story are reading yours as well Nate lol
1440299 I Know Right
1429841 maybe had some in his mouth when he left? Some people can do that's but I'm confused like you.
So part human with a deep and terrible past and part dragon where the signs of dragonhood first showing after watching the show... something seems odd
1441282 i will clear things up in the fifth chapter
I think i read that fast when did it come putt? 2 or 3 minutes ago? Also first
1441358 you are a fast reader my friend
Wat?
wow man this is getting intense since i started reading it
1441453 Thanks bro i'm glad you like it
1441366 ya well hmmm... okay i am fast but seriously how long ago from the post from when you posted it?
1442359 2 hours ago
1442505 i meant when i posted my message after you updated it and also YOUR ON!?!?!?!?!?! *punches you in the face then runs away yelling bloddy murder*
*rubs face in annoyance* I see
i read this in 2 minutes... D:
nice story man, cant wait to read more.
Also gunshots are common in Afghanistan for cultural reasons, as it is a common way to celebrate by shorting into the air. And yes, Afghans HATE Russians, good use of cultural background.
1449963 Thanks
You know... this is a really good idea... I think...
But I can't upvote this because it just littered with errors. And there are a lot of other things that an editor would really help with. Watch out for wall-of-text paragraphs. Space your paragraphs consistently. And it goes on...
Look at:
“Welcome to Afghanistan passengers, we will come to the port in a few seconds, So please stay seated,” the pilot spoke through the intercom. Gyro looked over to his parents, his mother was reading a novel but his father was rubbing his knuckles. Gyro pushed the action aside as the bell rang for the passengers to grab their luggage.
I would write that as:
“Welcome to Afghanistan! Passengers, we will come to the port in a few seconds. So, please stay seated,” the pilot spoke through the intercom. Gyro looked over at his parents. His mother had her nose buried in a novel while his father rubbed his knuckles. Gyro pushed all that aside as the bell rang for the passengers to grab their luggage.
So, don't feel bad or anything, but keep working on this.
1460876 Ok thanks at least you not flaming me
I dont know there for.......Dragons
Breathing fire....
Oh my God Nate this is fucking awesome YEEEEEEES! Keep working bro, I'm unting on a strong story here I love it so much!
Also
1460876 HORY SHET ERMUHGERD Where did you come from!?XD
This is gonna be aweome.
Nate... What are you doig? This seems awflly familiar... Celestia being trolly and a little intimate, side winghug with awkwardness... guest room... two guards with day and night names...
STOP COPYING ME!
Nah just kidding, but seriously, don't you dare do anything with the royaly. Celestia's mine! All mine!
But please, continue, I'm loving this.
I swear to god though, if I see something with an enchantment style golden amor and Celestia/Molestia I'll murder you.
Why do I get the feeling that Celestia has a scalie fetish and is turning Gyro into a ybrid for her own carnal fantasies?
God I'm so fucked up.
You know, I've already fallen in love wth this story, but there's just one thing: You need to slow down a bit, a fast write equals a fast read as readers have shown. Alos, things in the plot itself are going too fast, so just be careful with that, alright Otherwise, IF YOU STOP THIS STORY I SHALL PLAY JUMPROPE IN YOUR CHEST CAVITY.
Also, what do you want you OC's name in my story to be? XD
1478133 Gyro
1478530 Wait, fuck, lemme rephrase that: What do you want your OC in Guard Duty to be named?
1478610 Acid Shellshock
1478701
Seriously?
1478708
you know me
1478844
talk to you later bro
1478844 Also, GET ON STEAM TOMORROW GODDAMNIT!!!
Wat
Oh hey a new chapter. *reads*
Meh, I think you're going a little too fas still, brother, and the plot's weird, but can help ya'll with that, if you want. Otherwise, I still fucking love this thing.
1498414 yes please
oh heck yeah new chapter
means awesome
"Gyro yelled as he breathed in and spewed flames from his mouth"
well did not see that coming