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Let's see where this tale goes. The start is quite good.
And yeah there are plenty those other sorts of zebra-stories like you mentioned. As for the healthy relationship with zebra-stories, one comes to mind, called "Prince of Zebras" by RandomBlank.
And once again, people make Equestria weak. For all of the alicorn's sake, they're basically gods. Just the mere threat of them deciding to stop being nice should make other countries think twice about declaring war on them. Or even threaten to.
But nope. Let's make them chumps who bend the knee to mere mortals
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Pretty good start!
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I do have an issue with this as well. Not with this story, but the 'Equestria is weak' trope. Heck, every other nation should remember who moves the sun and the moon, and that should be enough to make them consider even entertaining the idea of war a capital crime.
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This is my main issue with the other Zebra related stories and how they make Equestria seem helpless and clueless. That’s why I despise those kinds of stories because it’s so not accurate.
"If you must know, I have had sex a couple of time before...not that it's anypony's, or in the case anyzebra's, business but my own and whomever I was with.", Twilight said nonplussed
The italics seem to be stuck on past this point
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I tried to fix it, but I think the algorithm is confused from all of the brackets I used signifying characters talking to each other in another language.
You do realize that the zebras are no better than those caribou right? I'm just saying because I've seen a lot of stories that involved Zecora's kind and they're not like those zebras. And I bet that Twilight didn't even like the guy because of his bad personality.
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This isn't a zebradom or Equestria conquered story. There will be no rapes or forced breeding programs designed to breed out the ponies. This will focus on Twilight acclimating to a country that is exotic to her, Twilight learning to love her arranged husband, political intrigue, some violence and evil creatures lurking in the shadows.
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Totally agree with that friend
I can accept that their militia is weak or poorly prepared (I don't think it's necessary to give examples of why I think so) but it should be enough for an alicorn to head to the border, deploy some spells, say a speech and that would be more than enough to terrify anyone, damn it, I think I might even start a cult in his name in the enemy country by accident or it might ask to be a vassal country.
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Okay then we’re good.
Interesting happenings indeed. Some dark ones lurking around ("Bye bye petal",. Just had to quote a certain Hag), and some relationship advice, along with some interesting traditions mentioned...
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For seemingly "overpowered goddesses", alicorns spend majority of their time being defeated and needing in saving in the actual canon series, and a group of unicorns in the past were able to move sun and moon, suggesting that it isn't something that hard that only "gods" were capable of doing it. I see "helpless Equestria" as pretty much almost canon, considering how often only elements of harmony were able to save it, with even celestia and luna being helpless to overcome some threats, and that's without even mentioning how easily defeated their guards and wonderbolts are.
i'm glad you added the authors note. it's nice to see a zebra story that isn't so stereotyped. was a time i thought of going for a similar cultural diversity. fortunately i woke up and remembered how bad i suck at writing stories. thanks for going in a better direction. you got a new fan. i'm looking forward to the next chapter already.
Just found this. Added to read list.
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Thank you kind reader!
Damn!!! You really went crazy on the medieval /fantasy's "whole LOT of titles" part.
Although, one of the "titles" bothers me a little; "Savior of the Humans"?
I highly doubt that one. Sure, you saved the Canterlot High, and City.
But, the whole world? Ehhh.
Besides, I doubt everybody else that doesn't know the mirror pool, doesn't know anything about our planet/kind.
Seriously!? So she's the one that nominated herself?
Aren't there other "options" besides forced marriage?
Because we can clearly see that "prime minister and seneschal" zebra guy seems very SUS on making the High King Zebra to act like a total dick. Like a certain Classic Disney Villain from Aladdin.
So, IF the Princesses actually exposed that eventual diabolical plot. Maybe that will give some gratefulness and "flavor" out of the Zebra Royalty?
Really? Sure, Twilight was once the book smart, anti-social shut-in. But despite having her bestest friends in Ponyville.
I never see her not being a virgin anymore?
Did Pony Flash Sentry do it with her?
Was it necessary to say all that a second time?
Okay, you Jafar rip-off.
So, why didn't the Princesses expose his corruption? Is it because of more political BS getting in their way?
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To be fair; The High King Zebra already did explain why he thinks Equestria is so "weak".
It doesn't help that the "military" ( Solar Guard ) suck ASS!!!
Plus, the Alicorn's themselves barely did anything to prevent or stop the "villains of the season's premiere/finale" themselves.
And even if they have tried to help. We all remember that embarrassing moment where Celestia got her ass beat by Chrysalis of all people!? Some "Sun Princess".
Or Luna slept through the whole canterlot wedding fiasco.
Or neither Celestia or Luna help Cadence, Shining, and the Mane Six to deal with Sombra in the Crystal Empire. And Celestia has the audacity to treat it as Twilight's "test"!!??
( Doesn't Celestia realized that she's risking an entire different kingdom full of innocent ponies and a potential civil war IF Sombra miraculously win!? )
And I do somewhat understand that the alicorn
princesses couldn't help out with Discord or Tirek. Since both of them are powerhouses, and with Tirek's case; Just easily take the princesses magic himself.
But still, it was really stupid for the princesses to fully trust Discord, and just store all of that magic to a unprepared Twilight!!?? Gambling on a hunch that Tirek doesn't know about Twilight's ascension beforehand?
( When they didn't even cover up the infamous mirror glass depicting Twilight's FEATURES on it!? )
Sure, the Mane Six always saves the day in the end. But, the fact remains is how many times Equestria ALMOST got conquered by a thread. It didn't fall all due to the Mane Six's sheer dumb luck, sheer coincidences, and plot armor.
Seriously, without all of that. All is takes is for ONE of the six to get killed by either the villains themselves or assassination. And it's already Game Over for Equestria.
So you can clearly see why the other nations will see Equestria as a rather pathetic Nation/Kingdom?
Good chapter. Keep it up.
And yep, there definitely would be performance anxiety for many in that "witness-tradition"...
Should have kept the Assassin alive questioning
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Didn't you read that their "employer"; That corrupt and treacherous zebra prime minister prick and that hag took care of them. Due to the failure and getting rid of "loose ends".