This story is a sequel to Not That, Twilight!
The Princess of The Sun may be loved and respected, but that doesn't mean she was treated as equal amongst ponykind. Every year when Hearts Warming Eve arrives, all Celestia can do is watch ponies laugh, exchange gifts, build snow ponies, and sing carols together from her window. She wishes she can join them, but ponies will likely get all awkward if she came by just to say hello. She gets only one present from Cadence.
This year though, her student changed things a lot.
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MOAR! MOAR! Good story.
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Thanks!!
Absolute and complete adorableness.
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Heart feels warm and full after that precious session of reading
Filly Twilight is adorable and sweet! She deserves all of the hugs. ALL OF THEM!
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Twily is best pony!!!!
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You're welcome
So cute. And Twilight being a little filly is just overload cuteness.
AHHHH THE TOXIN HITTEN!
A good story like this, makes my day just a little bit brighter
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You are most welcome!!!
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Tia deserves some fun too!!
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Thanks!!
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TIISSS SOOOO CUUUTTTEEEE!!!!
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Once again... TWILY IS BEST PONY!!!
Amazing story <3 as always.
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thank you!!
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Yes she is!
This story, and the previous tale, are what the entire MLP universe should be about, not merely a bunch of clop fics. I enjoyed this short fic quite a lot, so thank you and have a thumbs up for the effort.
BTW, on one line you write "your" when the word should be "you're"
And, yes, Twily IS BEST PONY!!!
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Thank you so much!! And about the clopfics, I mean, it's all on the author's/artist's preferences if they want to create content like that. Though, I personally don't and never will deal with such things. If I ever needed to feature the mature tag on any of my stories, it would be for heavy gore and violence. Once again, not often. Mostly you will just see cute stuff, meaningful stuff, adventurous stuff, sci-fi stuff and bits of romance.
And thank you for the mistake!! I'll fix it.
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My pleasure, and a pleasure to read such stories as this
Quite the heartfelt story you've written here. Sure, there were a few errors I noticed, but those mainly involved using the wrong word and spelling others incorrectly. But, the heart was all there and it felt pure.
I also loved how Celestia got to just be herself without the princess side of it.
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Thanks!
Also can you point out the errors so I can fix them?
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This is all I could see when I read through it.
"She would through snowballs at her royal guards"
You meant to say throw and not through.
"...having gone to the Canterlot castle..."
You didn't need 'the' in this part.
"Then there would be one pony who is directly Celestia's equal."
I think you needed to say 'was' here since this sentence is meant to be in the past tense.
"Duhh, your supposed to see it."
'You're' was what you meant to use, This one's an easily made mistake.
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Thanks!! I fixed them!
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Glad I could help as best I could.
So Wholesome!
I've read this aloud for the Audiobook version to come soon!
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Thank you
Very heartwarming, just like its prequel.
I'm uncertain how I feel about the dialogue, though. It felt a bit wooden in places and the way Twilight words things seemed ... idk, "wrong" would be a bit too harsh but unlike in the previous story I don't get the impression that I'm reading about a tiny foal in her first year under Celestia's tutelage. Twilight is certainly at least a bit more mature than other foals her age and likely makes an active effort to be as eloquent as possible when she's talking to Celestia, but I would've preferred some regular adorableness in addition to Twi's brand of adorkableness.
She calls Celestia her "mentor", which I don't think tiny Twi would do at that age, the next moment she "duhh!"'s the princess. Her tone is all over the place -which might be how a socially awkward little kid like her would act, but the spectrum seems a bit too wide.
But it's not a huge issue, I'm just rambling. It's a cute story.
I'm going to be honest, I could feel the sad emotions Celestia was feeling in the start and it made my eyes water. I truly think this is a wonderfully cute story. I can't help but wonder if at some point little Twily doesn't think of Celestia as a second mother.
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If I made you feel that way, then I did my job right.
Adorable.
