What I Truly Want

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eiggengrau

eiggengrau #1 · Feb 15th, 2023 · 2 · · 1. Concubine ·

I'm enjoying your writing style, though I'm not sure how to describe it. The adjectives Quirky and Eclectic come to mind, but they are hardly specific enough to convey the sense of what I find to be of note in your words. It was the long sentences in particular -- neither run-on sentences nor awkward, they had an intriguing grace to them. Can a pony call a sentance 'lithe'? Do you want example of what I am reacting to? Your second sentence,

The evening was on the edge of the horizon and ready to usher in the end of the sunlit hours, multicolored gleams of light pouring across the clouds as obscured sun sank through the clouds to find its slumber.

Long. Lithe. Liked.

BTW: parchment is animal skin. If you want to poetically call a writing material a "thin leaf of wood", then the word parchment does not fit.

Also, you said,

And a special shoutout to those who follow me just to downvote. That's dedication!

Is that a thing? LOL, some ponies are funny.

KingdaKa

KingdaKa #2 · Feb 15th, 2023 · 3 · · 3. Princess ·

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Is that a thing? LOL, some ponies are funny.

I had a downvote less than thirty seconds after publishing, I'm guaranteed at least seven to nine every story.

And huh, never knew about parchment being so specific an item. Noted.

RK_Striker_JK_5

RK_Striker_JK_5 #3 · Feb 15th, 2023 · 3 · · 1. Concubine ·

Ooh, that sex scene at the end... so hot! And i did love how Celestia took pity on Cadance.

eiggengrau

eiggengrau #4 · Feb 16th, 2023 · 3 · · 3. Princess ·

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Thirty seconds? That is dedication, i am impressed! What did you do to them? I've got some haters but no idea what i did wrong. So how am I supposed to do MORE of it? (Ahem, what i meant to say was "find a path forward full of love, friendship, and mutual respect.")

If it's any comfort, the purpose of creativity is making other ponies feel. And clearly, your haters feel something.

RK_Striker_JK_5