Aurora is a unicorn filly with the mind of a human, however, the said human does not remember much from his old life on earth, just bits and pieces.
Being born in Canterlot to a unicorn family she quickly discovers that her unusual dark coloration makes most if not all ponies wary of her, and her social life confusing and full of different emotions. As she grows and develops, she sees the world differently than most ponies, making her curious and adventurous. And that leads to... Complications down the road. Especially when the Magic Of Friendship develops in Equestria at the same time.
If that's not making it difficult to adapt to her new environment and body, a certain white alicorn makes Aurora hooves full of mysteries and plots to solve, making it difficult to learn magic and have a life of a simple filly at the same time.
[The first five chapters are 'test chapters'. I plan to remake them in the future.]
[See tags for warnings please.]
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actually, the proper term for a young female pony is filly. Mare describes an adult female pony.
That's all the nitpicking so far. Onward to chapter 2.
The marked part is a missing word, probably count as in"can count on," While in the remaining sentence you use the same name for both, thought I am quite sure that one of them is supossed to be Sunset
Another missing word, between the marked ones. Since I belive you are going for "to be the only."
, Eitehr "rules Equestria alone", or "rules the country alone."
, "pegaus" is the singular term here.
Everything I could find here,
This story is actually quite intresting and I will continue it latter. Though I am not exactly an editor, I still point out the most notable things.
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Thanks :P
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Thanks for picking those up. Updated with corrections.
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Your quite welcome
Author, this is a great story, it needs a continuation 10/10
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Will see what I can do :3
I like what I've seen so far! Please keep up the great work!
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Thanks, will see how much ppl will like it.
Thanks for the chapter.
The time jumps were a bit jarring but otherwise this story is great so far! Keep it up!
I don't see many rebirth stories where you see the MC actually go through their school life, it's very interesting, I can't wait to see what you write next!
I've thoroughly enjoyed what you've written so far, and I really hope you decide to keep going with the story!
The hints at the grandpa and now the main character having some tie ins to strong/dark power is nice.
Honestly, don't mind waiting for more. This one's going on the tracking list.
Loving this so far
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The author corrected this line, but left a reference to mare a little bit later, too. It confused me reading past it because the MC was focusing on a word that hadn’t even been used… now I’ve reached the comments, I see why.
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Interesting read so far.
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Sorry, but I had no chance to look at the other chapters yet. Currently work is exthausing me to the point, that, when I come home, I barley manage to eat something before passing out.
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Yea this is def going on the tracking list, i’m liking the direction it’s going and would love to get some more chapter hopefully!
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Corrected.
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Corrected. Thanks.
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Corrected. Thanks.
Great read, hope you continue to update.
You know, if you add the Yasuharu Takanashi track, it's a nice read.
Great story, looking forward to the sequel, I have a question, how soon will the nightmare moon return or is this story too far in the past for Aurora to see the moon return?
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Don't know, but it will definitely have elements from FIM in it.
This is an elite story
I love how the MC is behaving !
The isolations, fights (bullying)/injuries and the interactions between her and the family make it really realistic !
The contrast between a human mind and ponies is stark, and it gives another layer to the story ! (Stoicism, no hesitation to retaliate in self-defense and be good at fighting compared to the relative pacifism of ponies).
Just a question, will it have elements of Equestria at War ?
Thank you for writing !
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I'm thinking about adding some more 'international' elements to the story. But please, don't give me so much credit. I'm just making shit up that I find interesting. But maybe the fact that the first two chapters were rewritten 20 times added to the depth.
Anyhow thanks :3
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Thank you. (I don't really think it's anything special.)
One use of numbers slipped through the cracks this chapter.
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Corrected, thanks.
Esto definitivamente se va para mi lista de favoritos y seguimiento, muy buena lectura para tan solo para tener 5 capítulos...de momento, 10/10.
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Thanks
8v1 and somehow its her fault. So dumb. Victim blaming her whole life will fuck up her social interaction hard.
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It’s a bit of headcanon of mine that Equestria is a world that supports a passive approach to everything, in that those who escalate are the aggressors. the addition of the kids not liking her plus the continued harassment it’s not surprise if she got labeled to troublemaker.
I love this fic please do continue
Another great chapter.
Love it. Hope you decide to continue this story.
Great chapter! I didn't expeto see Twilight so soon, but her introduction was very well done.
Nice chapter.
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Correction: at this point, she'd be a filly. Won't be a mare for some years to come.
So Shine likes to be in the spotlight and Sunset would rather just watch the waves going by.
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Did you know that Thomas Edison got expelled from school for basically asking too many questions? He was driving his teacher batty! So his mother took matters into her own hands and tutored him herself.
To wit...
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I like Drone Jesus