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Peridork


Sometimes you lose yourself in your own narcissism. That's when you find out you might be the bad guy.

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This story is a sequel to Brand New Powers


Ten Years have passed since the defeat of the last major threat to Equestria. But, that doesn't mean that the Bearers of the Elements of Harmony are safe from the past. For the past always catches up to you. And with a dangerous past comes a greater threat then anyone could imagine. Sequel to Brand New Powers, you can read that first to be caught up, but isn't completely necessary.

Chapters (15)
Comments ( 34 )

Good chapter. Had a feeling it would be coming. Thats a fave + up-vote from me.

Where's dashie? I thought she would be by Fluttershy's side here.... :rainbowhuh:

Poor Fluttershy....
Keep up the good work. I'm off again. Cya. :yay::heart::rainbowdetermined2: FTW!

RD will be in the story, I just set up the chain of events so she was not in Ponyville during the issue with Fluttershy :fluttershysad::heart::rainbowhuh:

Psyche... you will be murdered... again... and again... and again...
HOW COULD YOU, YOU BASTARD!

Well... This is escalating quickly... poor Flutters...
not quite sure what to make of this story so far. But its an engaging read and looks like there will be plenty of action.
:yay::heart::rainbowdetermined2:FTW!

Here's the next chapter. I really wanted to show you guys more of my headcanon of the history of Equestria and the alicorns. I have now added a new threat. I will now list my sources for some of these ideas.
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Doctor Who
H.P. Lovecraft and his invention of Elder Gods
The ending to Cabin in the Woods
Shakespeare (one of Celestia's lines)
Latin and a part of a certain theme song:ajsmug:
Any fics with the Elements of Discord

Happy reading:pinkiehappy:

warped reading. :pinkiehappy:
Need... to save... Fluttershy and Dashie....

You certainly did reveal a lot in this chapter. Keep up the interesting read. What happend to Luan again?
The doctor who raised an interesting point on Derpy's foal there though.

Luna right now was with Celestia in Canterlot, so for now Celestia and Luna are out of the picture. The next chapter, when I get to it, will be a good one. I won't give any spoilers away though. :twilightsmile:

“Ooh, aah, ooh, aah, walla walla bing bang,” :rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:
And that zebra is crazy! That line made me laugh...

You have certainly left us with a crazy clcliff-hanger… good job :pinkiehappy:

I continue to enjoy your writing, its nice seeing stories that include Flutterdash and their offspring, especially in ways that really bring a new take to the MLP universe. (Because, to be honest, the main thing keeping me here at the moment is the zany, awesome stories like yours and the Flutterdash, both of which you have, which is excellent. Normal shipping is… normal, especially after reading around 200 Flutterdash and Twiluna stories (with a few other good ships in there sometimes too… such as Vinyl/Octy.) So I like how you continue to dare to be very different.

But I do hope that Rainbow Dash and her Fluttershy get freed sometime soon. That would make me very happy:pinkiehappy:
:yay::heart:rainbowkiss:FTW!

Thanks for the long comment and this story will be probably twice as long if not a bit more in the number of chapters than my last story. Think of that one as a prequel where I got my story bearings. This is the real long length story of mine. :pinkiegasp::pinkiecrazy: Maybe once I am done I will post the world building sheet I have also been typing. :yay:

If you haven't got what I've been doing with the Zebrican cultures I am parodying different cultures and ideas to add some comedy to the dark storyline that I will continue to create. Let's just say every leader will have some sort of crazy that they have. Maybe even the rulers of Equestria will have their own kinks of personality.

Also the Ponyville part is alluding to some grimdark fics I have read. :pinkiecrazy:

Every chapter I write is just another facet of my mind...What a :twistnerd:!

“I now pronounce you pony and Light of Love. You may now kiss yourself.” Leo the Lion King grinned.

Wow I found that line so funny.. :rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

1428895I don't read much in the way of grimdarks. (I mostly stick to Flutterdash...) so I assume this will continue to get even more warped then :pinkiegasp::derpyderp1:

This next chapter is much shorter, but is integral to the story. It is shorter because I had run out of ideas so I added anS impromptu musical number :pinkiecrazy: and this chapter just wrote itself with almost no input from me.Next part is Zap Apple, then Midnight Snack, finally Scale Harmony and then... Equestria Ho! :pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp::pinkiehappy:

Plus Pinkie :pinkiesmile:

And finally I have another chapter out.

This is currently my favorite chapter because of the dialogue and how I have created a spin on two characters that we know about in the show, but never see them often in the canon of the show.

DO NOT READ BEFORE READING :duck:

The dialogue between the alicorns is my favorite and it was super easy to write.
In it I created as a sex-crazy, infertile, crazy mare who believes that the alicorns are the superior race. :facehoof:
And Celestia just wants an actual vacation at the expense of her duties and citizens and wants to have fun...kinda like reverse Twilight. :rainbowderp:
And Cadance I have an inkling of how she's going to be twisted. Probably be shown in the next chapter or two. :pinkiesmile:

As of October 26, my third story is up. Warning I rated it mature in order to not be constrained by ratings. It is an alternate universe fic loosely based off the end of Cupcakes. Yes, I know it is one of our fandoms most contested stories but I have wanted to put mt spin on things. :pinkiecrazy: You can find it here: http://www.fimfiction.net/story/59392/Loyalty%27s-End or just browse my stories. It will follow everypony in the series (this one is going to be LONG) and will be based off how the Mane Six might deal with the loss of their friends and the feelings of both loyalty and laughter.

And finally I have published Chapter 8. Hope you enjoy it. It took me not that long to write, just college...

Robots, or magebots as I call them are run by magic engines and the consciousness of the ponies running it. The ability to combine weapons with it is a thought of mime since fighting Chaos is impossible for most ponies since it easily destroyed Canterlot by stepping on it. My influences with the magebot are the Power Rangers Megazords and any giant robot anime, namely Gurren Lagann, for I plan on attempting a ridiculous final battle with Chaos when it does come.:scootangel: :scootangel::pinkiecrazy:

Yep this is finally out. This was one of the hardest things to do...if you noticed I started with an idea (yep gonna make all the Zebrican nations be similar to other historical nations...six chapters later it sort of died.) But besides that I finally finished the Zebrica Arc and what would be part 1 of this story, finally we, or I, can focus on the Equestrian side of things and finally show you my idea of New Cloudsdale, which is a mainly pegasi city. This was an idea I had after I destroyed Cloudsdale in Brand New Powers. Since my headcanon is that Cloudsdale was one of a kind, the pegasi got the technology from their ancestors and therefore that is why there are no other cloud cities in Equestria.

Next time on Chaos and Corruption: War never changes, Ponyville and a chapter focused on the battle between the sides: Princesses vs. Discordant stones. :eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::twilightsmile:

P.S. sorry for it being so short, this is more to get that megazord combining feel and finally free Fluttershy (next fic, I promise she won't be evil, I wonder why I make my favorite of the Mane 6 be possessed by things) Next chapter very much influenced by giant robot anime (Gurren Lagann and Neon Genesis Evangelion) by without the random need to yell out every attack. :twilightsmile::twilightsmile::twilightsmile:

Sooo many references so far.... :rainbowwild::yay: Its great.

Faust... Gandam style... And several others.

sorry its taken so long for me to start reading this story again. This is being well worth the read (I've just had little time for reading due to work and my own writing, focusing on Fall of the Rising's next epic chapter... I hope you will enjoy it).

This is the first chapter on my trek that called getting back up to date on this crazy story :pinkiehappy: I shal now keep reading.

I see this story ending at some point because I always saw the Brand New Powers storyline end on a happy note in a three-part story. And since we are on the Equestrian Arc (Arc 3) it is the end game. I shall be putting my randomness inhibitor off for the final battle, which will be coming up sometime. (Not that soon, I promise.)

In reply to your authors note... Im so looking foward to this final battle... :rainbowwild::yay:

To Sweetie Belle’s delight, the airship never did crash. They pair of ponies never did get any sleep. They were far too busy.

:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

Sorry... but i did find that spot hillarious in amoughst the rest of the crazy chapter. Those two make a nice ship. (and were in an airship :pinkiehappy::scootangel:)

- Chroma, you and I are going to save Fluttershy.”- OH yea... bring that action on.

I like my sads, as long as they have a happy Flutterdash ending :yay::rainbowkiss:

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Thanks for reading my story. I hope you like the ending a little bit. And from reading your story, Fall of the Rising, I say keep up the good work.

1983887 Thats okay. It was a fun chapter to read. (13... and Im now finaly up to date)

And hey... as long as there's Flutterdash, I'm keen for a read. Its even better if she is good too :yay:

Dash and Chroma tackled the yellow mare that was finally back to normal. “You are so silly, Fluttershy. We’re just happy to see you again.”

Yay Free! Finaly. :rainbowkiss::yay: - does this mean some snuggles time soon? I love snuggles:rainbowwild::scootangel::yay:

all in all... I defiantly continue to enjoy your story and I look forward to the concluding chapters. At this rate, im going to have to feature this story on my page... its worth a lot more than the 6 likes it has so far. For a crazy read, its brilliant madness. and simply a lot of fun to read. couple that with Flutterdash and you have a winner.

did the new chapter get taken down?

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No it didn't. I just have a horrible internet connection atm :facehoof: and I am unable to post right now. Once i am not near a mac i will post the chapter. But it will be a little later than I hoped for. I will get it back up as soon as possible. :fluttercry:

. I know now that I can't use a mac to save my life.

lol... I live on my macs just about.

im up for celes daughter appearing in your next fic. May I use her too in mine?
like maybe featuring alongside TwiLuna's daughter, Moonlight Eve.
Cant say i felt for discord, untill the scene with the past was over and he was getting taken away from the world of the living. But i did shed a tear for his and celes daughter. Her death was a sad one. I also thought that starwrile/discord was a great idea :twilightsmile:
actualy... i just loved the scene in the past. It was pulled off very nicely and makes me consider it too :pinkiesmile:

This can't be the end yet. Im so glad its not. This story just keeps getting better and better :yay::rainbowwild:

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Just read your comment and thanks for the praise.

Yes, I tried my hardest with Discord. And if I pulled off even a small part of what I was hoping for...:yay:

I tried for Celes daughter to make her as trusting and innocent as possible, since she was in my head a baby alicorn in the past. That whole part of the story i was trying to hold back tears, cause i could see a discussion between Starswirl/Discord and Natura. She never saw her death coming because the one who killed her was her dad.

I give you a go ahead on using her in your fic. If of course you might give me a shoutout somewhere, say where the character first came from. (if you want to, that is) :pinkiehappy: But I would be most honored if you used her. :twilightsheepish::twilightblush:

2027785 of couse ill give you the credit for her :pinkiehappy::raritywink:

and you totaly suceeded with discord and his daughter. Take a look on my user page... hope you like the mini feature :twilightsmile:

it is a complete work and stands up well. I don't expect anything to be added. And um.. you can change the incomplete lable to complete now on the main page of the story :pinkiehappy:

That had a epic style taste to the end of it. Nicely done.

Anything more with Flutterdash... and Ill read it.
Thanks for giving me such a nice read from this long time running story.

Chur.

my reactions, in emoticons.
:twilightsmile:
:rainbowhuh:
:pinkiegasp:
:fluttershysad:
:raritydespair:
:raritycry:
end scene.

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Yeah that scene made me feel awful while writing it, :fluttercry: It gets weirder,

:coolphoto:
Second Generation: rollout!

The lions cracked me up. Walt disneigh? Perfect.

Pros: references,plot, character development.
Cons: length. I kinda feel like you could just overhaul this and Make it beautiful, but hey, that's just me.

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Well as I said before- this is a very early story of mine. (Sooner or later I might remake it cause it is still one of my favorites in terms of plot.) And it was an experiment in world building as well. And it was just me being silly- I like references to stuff.

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