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Twilight Star


Twilight and Luna: two mares made for each other

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Moonlight had been having a question on her mind for a few days now, but she wouldn't speak on account of her two mothers being busy with royal duties. Until one afternoon where Twilight is having an afternoon off, she decides to ask her question.

Twilight expected Moonlight to ask any question except where the foals come from. Now, in a dilemma where she doesn't know if she should tell the truth or not, she decides to talk to her wife to ask for advice on what to do about it.

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I can’t tell what you trying for it’s has the basics of a slice of life with a hint of comedy but the dialogue feels like robots talking along with the fact that you seem to be avoided characters saying each other’s names. To me it seems to be to impersonal and bland with a concept that would otherwise be really funny or heartwarming. Overall it needs work.

Haha! This story is so cute :rainbowlaugh:

made me laugh

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