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Perfectly Insane

I've been writing for, like, 8 years, and I still don't know what I'm doing. https://ko-fi.com/perfectlyinsane


This story is a sequel to Fake Smiles

Pinkie was not the happy pony she pretends to be, nor does she actually enjoy throwing parties or pranking, it's simply all she knows how to do. She was really terribly miserable, a result of her traumatizing home life and the lie she was forced to live. Ever since Rainbow stumbled across her and learned the truth, staying her friend regardless, she felt for the first time in a long time she could be happy.

Sadly, there is another who suffers the same way she does, and it's a pony she can't make happy, no matter how much she may want to or try.

Note: It isn't entirely necessary to read the first one to understand what's going on here, there is enough context and details given to get the gist, but I still highly recommend reading Fake Smiles first.

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Pinkie knew that look well, it was the look of someone that felt her mind was the only sanctuary they had.

Change one of these to match the other. Either using :

that felt their mind was the only sanctuary they had.


that felt her mind was the only sanctuary she had left.

Don't knock your story writing skills because this is great. I honestly think you have something going here and I think that revealing more of the insecurities of the characters and there potentially being insecurities of this magnitude in Twilight, Rarity, and Applejack would be a great continuation after visiting Pinkies parents. This is a story idea that is real and heavy and not a lot of stories that follow this theme wind up with happy endings but this seems like something that could come out happy for everypony involved. I take one look at these stories and one thing sticks out more than anything, with the characters hurting the way they are and agreeing to band together to keep each other from going over the edge, the core of the show seems to live on in this story even if it gets dark. I believe that their friendship is going to be what helps in the end and I can't think of anything that fits this story better than, Friendship is Magic :fluttercry::pinkiesad2::rainbowdetermined2: Don't stop writing, this idea feels like it needs to be seen through. If for no other reason then for Fluttershy and Pinkie to find a way to survive themselves.

Perfectly Insane

The reason it's hard for me to continue writing this story isn't just because of my insecurities as a writer. I do believe I am genuinely good as a writer and I do improve, I put a lot of effort and thought into everything I write, though I still mess up from time to time. I also am rarely satisfied, with my works, I always feel I could do better.

When I wrote the first Fake Smiles, it was from a bout of inspiration and my own emotional turmoil. I chose Pinkie Pie to represent this because I enjoy writing Pinkamena, I enjoy writing the more intelligent and deep side to Pinkie the show rarely shows, and something I wish was explored more than three episodes. Fluttershy I also enjoy, but she's a bit harder to write for me. Rainbow is interesting, but I believe she's too simple of a character for my liking, which is why it was hard for me to know what to do with her here.

Rarity and Applejack are easily the hardest characters for me to write in the show, I honestly can't explain why, they just are. I don't want to give up on this story, but I also know it's hard for me to keep writing it because nothing I have written in these two stories isn't something I have some experience with myself. I appreciate all the support I get for any of my stories more than anyone can know, and I probably won't stop writing or love writing Pinkamena till the day I die, but some characters will always be hard for me to write. That's why I struggle with this story.

I might not understand the struggles of being able to write a character the way you've done Pinkie and Fluttershy, but having read well over 2,000 stories since 2014 I think I've developed a fairly good eye for spotting the good ones and I do believe this could be one of the more well-liked series on here. Even if you can't write anything for the remaining three of the mane 6 I think that you have a pretty decent foundation for Fluttershy, Pinkie, and Rainbow to have a unique friendship compared to what they normally would have had. In any case I am looking forward to more. And while I don't fully understand how difficult it is to crank out something this impressive, I am rooting for you to find the inspiration to write more in this particular verse.

Eyy this was pretty good!

Really love the way you write these three. Even if you dont write pinkie meeting with her family I'd still love to see more. Great stories.

Comment posted by Valk deleted Sep 8th, 2021

“Ponies caring about you so much, and even more getting added, it makes your burden heavier. The more ponies that care about you, the more ponies want you to get better. You hate the fact that you’re so nice sometimes, because it draws others to you, it makes them care about you. But you can’t get better, no matter how much you want to, you can’t. It just makes it worse and worse, until you feel like you can’t take it anymore. That’s part of why you’re so shy, you don’t want more ponies to care about you, it hurts too much.”

This made me tear up cause I relate to it so much...

Such a beautiful story and it feels real.

I have never needed a story like this before in my life. Because I am exactly Fluttershy, and a little bit of Pinkie.

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