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Ruxify

Preoccupied with making colorful equines kiss and stuff.

Ruxify Joined 8th Jan, 2013 · Offline

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Bronycommander
Bronycommander #1 · Feb 24th, 2020 · · · Chapter 1 - An Unexpected Encounter ·
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Looks promising. Saw the cover on Derbiborrou

Lore Horse
Lore Horse #3 · Feb 24th, 2020 · · · Epilogue - Just the Beginning ·
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It is pretty good. It felt a little rushed since you skipped over most of the relationship building but this was cute nonetheless.

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Ruxify
Ruxify #6 · Feb 24th, 2020 · · · Epilogue - Just the Beginning ·
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Yeah I had so many more ideas for a story like this but the word count limit for the contest made me have to cut the fat. If theres demand for it I might write a sequel that greatly expands on this premise.

Emotion Nexus
Emotion Nexus #7 · Feb 24th, 2020 · · · Epilogue - Just the Beginning ·
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This was so adorable!

Dinky and Twilight is actually a really good combo. They just work so well together, I kind of want to see more of this.

Particularly just the concept in general. Suprisingly there aren't many consensual AdultxFoal relationships that are so normal, probably far less in terms of SFW stuff. Anyway loved it, would love to see a sequel!

ThatBadGuy
ThatBadGuy #8 · Feb 25th, 2020 · · · Chapter 1 - An Unexpected Encounter ·
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HALT!

Ze Grammar Nazi Group has spotted a mistake!

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“I... I’m s-so sorry! I didn’t mean to do that, Ms… uh?”—

—“Twilight Sparkle,” she answered flatly. At this point I couldn’t help myself, but to shed a few tears as I stammered my apology.

“I live with my step mom, Derpy Hooves and have an older step sister, Amethyst Star who lives on her own, and uh,” I scratched my chin, trying to come up with something else.—

—“I’m apparently gifted with magic, and uh, oh yeah I love to goof off and just go crazy around town with other ponies, like playing pranks and what not… assuming they can tolerate me at least. I usually end up going too far and my stupid magic hurts some pony or breaks something expensive. My mom has had to cover for me to cover the damages more times than I can count! I always end up losing my short term friendships because of it,” I finished on a somber note dropping my head down towards my hooves.

“Uh… yeah that does seem to be a little tiny bit of a problem you have there, Dinky,” remarked Twilight giving a sympathetic chuckle. “It seems we definitely have a bit of work to do.”—

—“With you at my side, I won’t fail!” I exclaimed excitedly.

Just a few missed paragraphs.

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HAIL GRAMMAR!

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ThatBadGuy
ThatBadGuy #9 · Feb 25th, 2020 · · · Chapter 2 - Sweet Times Together ·
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It had been about two months since we had started our magical training sessions, and —/— the weather had already become pretty cold. The leaves of the trees shifted into their usual autumn forms and littered the streets of Ponyville with multiple shades of orange, red, yellow and brown. During this time, Twilight and I had become quite close friends and we always had so much fun together. My magic was actually starting to improve too, though I still, on multiple occasions, ended up breaking something or other. It was okay though, because Twilight understood me. She didn’t abandon me and leave me in the dust, and she never got mad whenever something was blown to bits.

The paragraph just splits apart right here.

“Really?”—

—“Yes, I’m perfectly fine… It’s just that…” stammered Twilight before turning to look down at her hooves.

Another missing double spaced paragraph.

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ThatBadGuy
ThatBadGuy #10 · Feb 25th, 2020 · · · Epilogue - Just the Beginning ·
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The only misconduct this story made is not enough porn.

Two out of three mentally scarred crusaders recommends this story.

:applecry: :scootangel: :unsuresweetie:

3️⃣  🔟  🔟
Ruxify
Ruxify #11 · Feb 25th, 2020 · · · Epilogue - Just the Beginning ·
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10102075

Yeah a lot of those paragraph splits were caused when I transferred my story from Word to FIMFiction. I've been meaning to get around to fixing it, but I work a lot and haven't found the time.


10101979
Yeah, that's what I figured. The only downside is it hurts reader retention a little and it's frustrating.

Vauria
Vauria #12 · Feb 27th, 2020 · · · Epilogue - Just the Beginning ·
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I think this suffers from trying to squeeze a full romance into 10k words, which doesn't help to dissuade the slightly creepy/grooming vibes that naturally come from shipping minor x adult.

Still, short, sweet, and pretty cute.

stemo
stemo #13 · Mar 5th, 2020 · · · Epilogue - Just the Beginning ·
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I would sure like some more, if you find the time of course! Really liked it and wish to see the story develop in a meaningful way. Maybe even covering what happens in the future, whether they get found out or not doesn't really tickle my fancy one way or another but for a beginning to the story (or a short story with all the cliff-notes) this really caught my attention as romantic stuff is rarely done with foalcon and even more rarely done in a meaningfully impacting way. Can see this turning into an emotional and impactful story, and I hope it does!

I get cracked up just thinking about Celestia in the process of making twilight an alicorn (with the floating video images) sees what she was getting up to with little ol' dinky, and I think you can use your imagination from there.

Ruxify
Ruxify #14 · Mar 6th, 2020 · · · Epilogue - Just the Beginning ·
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Glad you liked it. There is definitely a bigger story I want to tell here, but... I'm still working out the details.

stemo
stemo #15 · Mar 6th, 2020 · · · Epilogue - Just the Beginning ·
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Nice to know! Oh! I can't wait to see what you do but I will be more than willing to if it means it turns out something like this!

Anyway, hope you have a nice day.

DragneelAstarois
DragneelAstarois #17 · Nov 1st, 2022 · · · Chapter 3 - Warmth on a Cold Autumn Night ·
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Finalmente unos buenos diez segundos después, Twilight se relajó y soltó su agarre mágico sobre mí. Sonriendo con la lengua colgando y goteando su jugo pegajoso, la dejé mirar mientras lo sorbía todo y lo tragaba profundamente en mi interior. Todavía sin aliento, Twilight me arrastró ansiosamente por su cuerpo con su magia para que estuviéramos cara a cara, dejando un rastro de nuestra mezcla de amor absorbiéndose en la piel de nuestros vientres. Presioné agresivamente mis labios contra los de ella, esta vez tomando la iniciativa como el de arriba, e intercambiamos descuidadamente nuestra saliva directamente de mi boca a la de ella y de regreso. Finalmente, cada uno con su parte justa, ambos tragamos el líquido, saboreando su sabor sucio pero emocionante, acentuado con la dulzura remanente llena de chocolate y glaseado de nuestro refrigerio de celebración.

I dare to say, that in particular, i loved this piece of the chapter. A really cute description of the act between them.

The moment that made me left a like on the story.

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