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Ghostaloo


"If you can't beat them, then kill them with snuggles and kindness!" - Ghostaloo

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Takes place after season 5, but before season 6.

One year after the reformation of her star pupil, Starlight Glimmer, Twilight Sparkle decides to look more into the forbidden mysteries of Alternate Timelines. After tweaking around with Starswirl the Bearded's altered time spell, she tests it out in an open meadow.

But she honestly didn't expect it to work.

She honestly didn't expect to pull not one, but two blood covered children from beyond the veil.

And she honestly didn't expect to find herself fighting for her life against a desperate monster.


Second place winner of Art for Fanfiction's 2019 Summer Writing Contest!

I do not own the cover art. All rights got the the original artist.

Chapters (1)
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Comments ( 17 )

tienes un buen inicio , hay que ver a donde lleva :pinkiehappy:

9778587

Muchas gracias amigo. Lo siento si mi español está mal, estoy usando la traducción. :twilightblush:

Jest #3 · Last Monday · · ·

This was... interesting. But left so many questions unanswered that it felt very incomplete.

9778716

I know. :fluttercry:

As it said in the description, this is a contest entry. The only real problem is that it had to be at maximum 1,500 words, so I was forced to work around this. But to say that I am unsatisfied with this oneshot would be an understatement. I tried though, and that's all that matters.

This one will have something extra or it's just it?

9778733

I might do a sequel. But it depends on whether people actually like it.

9778740
You have my like on this one

9778754

Awww, thanks! You are awesome! :heart:

That's not a sub-1500-word short story. That's the prologue to a much bigger one.

What happens next? :pinkiecrazy:

9778896

Hehehe, wow! I'm still really surprised that so many people actually like this oneshot!

But yes, there is a lot more to Crimson's and Chaos's story then just this. They have quite the backstory. I might grow this oneshot into something more, but it really just depends if the readers would like to see more of it.

9778927
I'd love to see more of this.

That was just a fragment. It's like taking the chestbuster scene by itself from "Alien" and calling it a day.

9779850 Awww, you liked my critique!

I still have to slaughter your characters in fullon White Knight Deus Ex Troll King mode... because I want to. (I'm like Android 16 that way)

:pinkiecrazy:

9780497

Honestly, it didn't really sound like critique to me. But even if it was, I do not really care! I'm still going to show you kindness! :twilightsmile:

So please, tell me what is wrong with my story, and my OC's. Your critique only helps me grow as a writer. Go ahead my friend.

9780516 Like I said, it was like taking one single scene where something shocking happens out of a movie, showing it to people who'd never seen it before, and then saying, "The End!"

Everyone just ends up confused.

9780576

Yes, I am aware of this fact. But as many are aware, this was a contest entry. The only real issue was that it had to be a maximum 1,500 words. It's kind of hard to stuff a whole novel in a single story with a word limit.

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