The Negotiation

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doomie-22

doomie-22 #1 · Mar 15th, 2019 · 2 · · Chapter Two (Clop): The Changelings' Arrival Inside the Drake ·

But then, uhhh… after I had dinner with Shining and Cadance, I ended up walking into a broom closet by mistake, and…”
Thorax paused for only a second before he shrugged, and finished by saying, “Well, I walked in on Spike ‘entertaining’ two of the Crystal Guards. And, uhhhh… after a little awkwardness that came from him explaining everything to me, he… kinda offered me to join in~”

Hmm, that sounds interesting.

Orthrus

Orthrus #2 · Mar 16th, 2019 · 2 · · Chapter Two (Clop): The Changelings' Arrival Inside the Drake ·

Really love your work. The main story is actually the main reason why i created an account for this site. Although i really wish you would update the main story, i'm just glad that you're still writing new chapters as well as new side stories. Hope you have fun writing and that you have a great day. 😕 🖥 😍 👏 👍

CaxmtheNobody

CaxmtheNobody #3 · Mar 16th, 2019 · 2 · · Chapter Two (Clop): The Changelings' Arrival Inside the Drake ·

What is Pharynx so upset about at the end?

Fallowsthorn

Fallowsthorn #4 · Mar 18th, 2019 · 2 · · Chapter Two (Clop): The Changelings' Arrival Inside the Drake ·

I'm only halfway through the first chapter, and I do really like your 'verse, but please, for the love of fuck, calm down with the italics and bolding and capslock. They're meant to be used sparingly, like pepper or cinnamon. Too much, and you end up desensitized. Trust your readers to fill in the normal cadences of a conversation based on context, and save the BOLD. ITALIC. CAPITALIZED. FOR. EMPHASIS. for when you need the literary equivalent of a nuke.

dshadow14

dshadow14 #5 · Mar 22nd, 2019 · 2 · 1 · Chapter Two (Clop): The Changelings' Arrival Inside the Drake ·

In reality, it had to have been less than two months since Pharynx and Spike last had sex

I believe you mean Thorax, not Pharynx.

TheVClaw

TheVClaw #6 · Mar 22nd, 2019 · · · Chapter Two (Clop): The Changelings' Arrival Inside the Drake ·

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Indeed I did. I just fixed it. :)

karnazom

karnazom #7 · Apr 1st, 2019 · · · Chapter One (Non Clop): A Drake's Arrival Inside Changeling Lands ·

“For crying out loud, LOOK AT THE TWO OF YOU!! You’re both supposed to be adults , remember!? Adults with the highest possible rankings in this Hive?!? If you guys have issues you need to settle, then the LEAST you can do is settle it somewhere private , instead of bickering at one-another out in the open like a couple of children !!!”

Yeah Spike is a bit unconsentable when saying 'Ponies to other creatures. Ex; Changelungs

Love able chaos

Love able chaos #8 · Jul 15th, 2019 · 1 · · Chapter One (Non Clop): A Drake's Arrival Inside Changeling Lands ·

Now you're going to get it Spike.

Love able chaos

Love able chaos #9 · Jul 18th, 2019 · 1 · · Chapter Two (Clop): The Changelings' Arrival Inside the Drake ·

Yes dude Spike's ass is that good.

brisa_mlp

brisa_mlp #10 · Aug 10th, 2019 · 4 · · Chapter One (Non Clop): A Drake's Arrival Inside Changeling Lands ·

Spike grew a deeply offended look as he gawked at Thorax in shock. Before the Changeling could wince and try to apologize, Spike put his claws at the sides of his hips and said, “Dude! I am NOT a prostitute ! Prostitutes take payment for their work! I DON’T, which makes me a Slut ! There’s a big difference there, Thorax!”

I just love that line "I'm a slut get it right"

LunaJack