The crisis is over, the threat resolved, the day is saved. Or rather, there was never a crisis to begin with. Twilight Sparkle has saved the world, there is nothing left to do but tell the others what just happened. She has quite the tale, of memories only she has, of months that never happened, of the despair that nearly ended Equestria, and the hope that saved it.
In Equestria, Destiny is a very real thing. Every pony has one, emblazoned with a magic mark for all to see. It is a simple given fact that every pony finds their place in time, their own special destiny. Or is that law so immutable after all? Is being special always a good thing? In a society where destiny is real, what happens to the individual without one?
At the heart of Twilight’s story is a single pony with a unique mark. The choices he made to try and fit in have left him alone and miserable, and willing to go to insane lengths to find his place. When a chance meeting with Twilight Sparkle gives him a chance he never thought he would have, his decisions come to have consequences far beyond what he could have imagined.
Maybe, just maybe, in the story of our lives we are not always the hero. Sometimes, we are the villain.
Author note: I initially wrote this in third person point-of-view and then later adjusted it to be first person, but even after numerous readings I'm still finding spots where I missed a fix. If anyone spots any more, message me with the chapter and line, and I'll fix it.
Oh no....
Just what is this story about?
Interesting start, I’m eager to see how this plays.
Just as long as Twilight doesn’t go overboard with the questions, this pony will be just fine.
Jeez, rude much?
He has a point.
Looks like somepony’s getting pretty hot headed.
This is true in our world as well.
Holy crap, did you create an account for the sole purpose of posting this? That's certainly some dedication there.
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It might be more accurate to say that I never had need of an account until I finished this. So, uh, yes?
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Ah. Okay then,
I want to speculate, but... must keep reading!
So, now I have to reread the first chapter
I'm trying to imagine this in animated form. It'd be kinda Badass.
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But...the pony that's talking is Twilight. I mean, how many other purple alicorns are there?
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Oops, sorry...slight misspelling
Part 4: A Change of Heart. Brilliant play on words.
What's "shoryuken"?
So what happens next?
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It’s a reference. I don’t know to what, but probably an anime.
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It's an attack used by a character in a video game. Basically, it's a flaming uppercut.
Good story, good dedication = Solo-inspired story
Nice work M8, may apply this to some stories
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Not entirely sure what you mean...
But it sounds like you enjoyed it! So, thank you.
Aaaaand I'm sold on this. Very well sold.
Ok why does that mask remind me of Infinite's mask in Sonic Forces? This is sounding like Sonic Forces.
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I don't even know what that is.
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Well Inifinte is a Mobian Jackel named Zero who was called the ultimate assassin and was the leader of Team Jackel who Eggman hired as mercenaries for his cause. Infinite's team was all taken down by Shadow The Hedgehog when he invaded Eggman's new base in the jungle and fought Zero. Shadow won the battle and humiliated Zero calling him weak before disappearing which left Zero in a state of rage since he never lost a fight and was never called weak by anyone before. But when Eggman found the Phamtom Ruby he created a working prototype of the ruby and imbedded it in Zero's chest giving him a mask similar to what the cover of your story has and changed to his name to Infinite. Then Infinite appeared in a city which was during the main story of the game and beat Sonic with the help of physical illusions that could actually touch solid objects.
If you want to know more about Infinite's past I suggest you watch this video. It's a Sonic Force DLC add on called Episode Shadow which explains what happened before the main events of Sonic Forces.
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Well, the last sonic game I played was Sonic & Knuckles. Your description makes it sound like the ruby in Infinite's chest matters more than his mask. I don't really see any similarities.
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Sorry about that. Inifinte's mask had only his left eye showing and his right eye is covered by his mask.
This story was awesome, I hope theres a sequel for it later on. Would like to see the Sable from the end come back.
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How interesting you would ask that...
- MLP: FiM
- Drama
- Mystery
- Slice of Life
Despair is a foe one cannot face alone. Luna has fought this monster and won, but her new friend is losing. Badly.If the main OCs in this story were voiced, what would they sound like?
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I think Sable would sound something like Nick Wilde from Zootopia, maybe a bit lower.
Despair like Benjamin Sisko from Deep Space Nine.
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What about the sequel?
I read and loved this, well done! I may even read it again... it's that good.
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Thanks, that's really encouraging.
What was your favorite part?
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Jeez, that's like asking who my favorite background character is!
There are so many... I liked the duality between the different realities, I loved the end where the repercussions of being asleep took its real toll.
The Lion or the Tiger ending you gave.
Seriously, the only thing I had a slight problem with was going back to the "present" at the end of each chapter.
You could have used breaks in the middle to make it so that the ones she told the story to were asking questions, but that's not even much of an issue because that's what I would have liked to see and it doesn't impact the story at all.
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Putting a break in the middle of the chapter is not something I had considered... I think it would have been even more distracting than it already was. (Although I'm fond of stuff like that, so I was going to use it anyway.)
Someone else mentioned to me it felt particularly well planned out, and that's kind of misleading... What happened is I was about 40% of the way through writing it, and still didn't know how I was going to end it, when I realized I could have the story be told by Twilight after she gets back. So after finishing the story I went back to each chapter to add the "present" scenes. Which is why they end up where they did, and a few reference events that have not "happened" yet.
Amazing story. This should really get more attention than it has. Can't wait for the sequel to be complete!
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Thanks. When I first uploaded it, it went up all at once, and I was a new author here and had no followers. It disappeared off the front page in under two days. That is why I am releasing the sequel one chapter per week.
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Fixed. (You would think Grammarly would spot those...)
If (when) you find more, PM me or it'll flood the comments.
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Also fixed. (I get the feeling more are coming...)
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I don’t do well with pm. You can’t edit them or quote stuff.
What?
There’s Alice.
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It wasn't in the show and I haven't read most of the comic stuff. It doesn't surprise me the topic came up there somewhere.
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There was that old pony in the Apple family that shoveled manure.