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James Kaughn is a member of the world's most elite fighting force, but when his team is sent in to rescue a captive family in Afghanistan the mission hits a snag. He stays behind to allow the others to escape, fully expecting to die, but ends up in an unfamiliar place. Join him as he meets new challenges and struggles with his worsening PTSD. Will he be able to actually make friends and not just teammates?

Chapters (68)
Comments ( 2258 )

Your story is neat, have a first comment, thumb up and favourite. :pinkiehappy:

This is very excellent. Not many HiE fics catch my interest these days, but yours sure has. I will definitely favorite this and await further chapters. Keep up the great work! :raritywink:

This is actually strangely good. At first I thought "meh, I'll just read the first chapter" then "2 can't hurt" next thing I know, I'm 7 chapters in.

Sounds a bit familiar... :rainbowderp:

OK, I chugged the whole 10 chapters. Must say, I'm impressed. I especially liked Celestia's part, you portrayed her in a rather unique way that you don't really see too often.

:rainbowwild: Going exotic, are you, RD?:rainbowkiss:

I really like it, aside from a few spelling errors I can't see anything wrong. One thing you shouldn't do, though, is chapter dump; space them out a bit more and release them at set intervals (say, 1 chapter every 2-3 days).

Awesome! An update! I was a bit worried for James towards the end there. Thought Rainbow was gonna mutilate him. Keep up the great work!

I really like the story, couple of grammatical and spelling errors but very enjoyable! Faved and liked :).

Awesome chapter. Can't wait for more!

Nice chapter, keep it up!

GODDAMMIT! It's
straiGHt
make DO
aWkward
cousin

Srsly, it's getting annoying now.

Other than that, you're doing great, give us more. :pinkiehappy:

Yay! Another chapter! I'm lovin' it! :pinkiehappy:

Cousin. It's BUCKING cousin. NO E.

Well this got quite interesting. :pinkiehappy:

that group was starting to get annoying im glad he took them out :D

Awesome. Good riddance to that group. Another ally? Sweet. Keep up the great work!

Gangs, Gangs never change.........:rainbowwild:

ME GUSTA MUTHAFUCKA:flutterrage:

finally he caped a bitch

that does sound interesting, i can't wait :derpytongue2:

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Y U NO SPELL RIGHT?! :facehoof:

torchered -> tortured
personell -> personnel

There were one or two more, but those are the ones that stuck out. I guess I shouldn't complain too much, if anything your spelling has improved over the course of this story. I think I just find it particularly irritating because you actually know how to write, you're not some nub scibbling up half-assed self-insert clopfics. Perhaps even more so because everything else about your writing is flawless: structure, format, and all that (barring the occasional punctuation error). But when you misspell, you do it HARD. Bugs me, it does.

Keep up the good work though, this is getting good. :pinkiehappy:

Ugh I remember my basic training in the Army. Besides getting smoked for the majority of mistakes of others (normally over something extremely stupid [When the Drill Sergeants give crisp precise instructions there is no reason to make it confusing and start questioning back]).

Amazing story! Loving everything about! Keep it coming! I really enjoy the mature route you are taking with this story and MLP FiM in general. I can really feel the emotion from the characters.

You made one mistake in Chapter 2. There is no "coast of Afghanistan". The entire country is landlocked.

Spellcheck is your friend.


Aside from that its a fun read and I hope he can get a griffon friend so he can finally get some meat.

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thier -> their
elliciting -> eliciting
woundered -> wondered

There were others of course, but those stuck out, as versus the others with seemed more like actual typos rather than misspellings

.1014042 1014569 Nice to know I'm not the only one being bugged by that. Like I said before, it's only annoying because he's doing everything else right.

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Yeah it's weird, the story flows well and is facinating but the spelling shows up due to that.

payed = paid

I"ll do my homework after I finish the first chapter... That was good, maybe I'll read the next one.... *one hour later*... Crap.

Oh, Hell Week lives up to its name, oh it does...:fluttershyouch:

I declare that this story, despite some spelling and grammatical errors, is awesome.

Have a mustache. :moustache:

Aside from the usual (plentiful) typos,

Congradulations
circumfirence

:facehoof:

Story's still great though. Regular updates too.

What adventures will follow our Spec Op Ponies? Will James ever be able to overcome his PTSD? Will James and Rainbow finally hook up? Stay tuned our fellow ponies for the next exciting episode of Displacement!

Also as pointed out by others the spelling errors are somewhat (although less of an issue for me) annoying. I'm sure there are editors willing to help you out. Make the bridge!

Awesome! Must... Read... MOAR! :pinkiecrazy:

18 chapters, :D no sleep for me tonight 0_o

:rainbowkiss:Best response ever. "Good luck with that." Kaboom!:rainbowlaugh:

You sir have earned a moustache.
:moustache:

as he pulled the trigger, the biggest grin just spread across his face, and out of nowhere, the faintest of songs could be heard. "...Come on and smile.....Come on and Smile!"

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