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Tiran, a former pilot and Naval Officer, disgraced from service as a result of a failed mission that left him disfigured-the details of which he only knows and refuses to talk about-finds himself in a strange place after an expreiment gone horribly wrong that while unfamiliar to him, the inhabitants of which seem to find him eerily familiar. See what happens as he tries to survive in an environment he is almost completely unsuited for: the ground. Guided only by a quirky computer construct and an eccentric local, Tiran will try to come to terms with his shortcomings, his hidden temper and his past failures.

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Comments ( 81 )

Yeah, glad to see some more from you!

you made an error with the bold, last segment of chapter is all in bold

FIRST!!!

Okay, so, I have one thing to say: Awesome.

This story is good and has a current plot line that I enjoy. the main character has already evident flaws, and underlying flaws he might not know of, which will definitely make this interesting. Can't wait to finish reading this

Quite interesting, I'm only 300 words in and already hooked. one thing that bothers me though is if this story takes place after the events of your first two fics...hmmm...:unsuresweetie:

some grammar issues here and there, but it doesn't impose too much on the flow of the story. Very good:twilightsmile:

Really good story, I like it that you are continuing your series, but with new characters, so it still seems fresh and new. And eight chapters at once, nice. Cant wait for next chapter.

I really hope the reactor does not go boom. Even with it tucked away in a ravine and happily leaking away, there's still a good chance it'll make an environmental mess of the surrounding countryside.

Mmm, so many questions to answer yet. Other humans? When? Where? Who were they? And that one question of who's side he was on; one of them... whoever them are? We have yet to check off, "HiE meets a manticore" which is right above the timberwolf encounter, but now that he's got a local guide, I kinda doubt she'll want to blithely go through the Everfree. Still, even if they can't take the train, they can follow the tracks and hobo it to the next town. The train's path should be fairly safe, if boring in it's isolation between towns. Granted, in the show, the train is rather short and lacks the endless mile-long procession of cargo carriers that a hobo would target, running along so they can hop on board for a free ride.

p.s. It's a given that Ruwa's friends have added "ponynapping" to the charges being drawn up against him. I suspect the Guard won't bother to ask questions first before tackling him to the ground. (Hopefully they won't play basketball with his head like that stallion did, owch)

So, if my memory serves correctly, the BEST thing he could do is head for Ponyville and meet Twilight, or any of the Mane 6. Heck, he might even meet up with that one guy... who I can't remember his name. If it's been a 30 year jump, he'll be closing in on retirement age but not dead yet. The rest of the girls should be getting on in years too but in their "prime"-- I'm assuming the headcanon of 100-150 for Pegasi, longer for Unicorns, and +300 for Earth ponies. This also mean the CMC should have gotten their cutie marks by now, if not married and had foals of their own. The only constant left in Ponyville would be Twilight, having ascended to an alicorn.

Interesting setup so far. You do a good job of providing information about the last stories without requiring readers to be familiar with them (I only ever got half way through the first one before I lost interest due to some reason I can't remember). My only complaint is that this has too long of a setup. There has to be a faster way of getting to Equestria and starting the actual plot. I'd almost imagine this would be a good case for flashbacks for the setup, that would provide a mystery and keep going with revealing pieces of his past, starting with how he got here and then move onto the incident that keeps getting mentioned. This is of course just my opinion based on the fact that we're over half way through the length of a standard novel and we're barely starting along the road to Canterlot.

Well, could you remind me what was the time difference between that worlds? If I remember correctly, tell ne if I am wrong, his uncle blown himself up with that 'nuke', right? So he will probably return, I wonder If they meet.

Nice chapter, Li is going full AI, and of course ponies are too friendly, to weird woices in fake hand.

And another chapter, thank you for that.

And I don't mind waiting for updates, I always liked that you are one of the few people who are updating more or les frequently.

I was almost positive he would have found a gun or something missing after Blackjack pickpocketed something from him. Well, either that or slip something into the beer when he wasn't looking.

Nope, I don't trust him. :eeyup:



I bet Twilight could repair the damaged prosthetic arm with a Fix-It spell (if the smartest alicorn in the world couldn't, no pony could).

4239404 this is the third in a series he has written...

Heh, at least the pony wasn't nicknamed M... (MI6 might have issues with that) :rainbowlaugh:

Now I'm wondering if Quick Fix can repair the fighter enough that it can limp home? Tho... the reactor was leaking last I knew so, er, probably not the safest place to be swinging a hammer.

From the look of it, I'm going to go ahead and guess that something is going to happen between Tiran and Ruwa.

More and more chapters... Let me go to sleep you glorious bastard

"But, she just satred blankly at him and shrugged"

Li's behavior is rather curious. Ok, so it's a learning AI, but I find it odd it could gain an 'attitude' so quickly after arriving in Equestria when it's been with him for years and never got half as snarky as it is now. It's almost like the ambient magic is effecting it. We know at least two ponies have messed with Li and the arm itself so far which may have some bearing on the evolving consciousness in his arm.

And then there's that mystery folder with the random name. Are the two related? Mmmmm... could be! I'd like to think they are. I'm also gonna bet 100 bits that even if he asks, no, DEMANDS Li break into the folder, it will say it can't because it's too encrypted or some such excuse-- because Li made that folder itself.

Oh yeah, he might want to let the pony princesses know that the ship is leaking radiation that will melt your face off. Eh, just sayin'. :facehoof:

im really glad i came to your page to check for the next story in the series now the only question i have at this point is, is James still alive?

Quick Fix i feel like i should know that name ether that or im crazy

Glad to see you writing again.

Small nitpick: "Tiran his duffle bag with a huff" is missing a verb.

Thank you for continuing to write. I hate that I only seem to comment in order to nitpick, but: "towel wrapped around his waste"; that should be "waist".

Again, thank you.

4502309 She's a returning character from the previous story.

<sigh>
"any part you neat, no matter how obscure": that should read "need".
And did you mean "You're bird?", indicating "You are bird?", or did you mean "Your bird?" indicating "The bird that is of your possession?"


I swear to God, I'm not trying to be a jerk. Love the story. Thank you for writing it.

I'm starting to really hate myself now.

"Images of his dream" should be indented if it's intended to be a new paragraph. Same with "Tiran picked his way". "Along with the shouting". "Below him, at the edge".
"opening his mouth and trying to breath." should read "breathe." (At least it's a new nitpick.) "under neath" should be one word.

I do feel that you've added some depth to Ruwa with this chapter. I mean, I liked her before, but it's still nice to see her display some strength. Of character. Not that she hadn't before.

Ima shut up now.

"Ruwa found a spot" should be indented.

Alright that's the last one. I promise to stop commenting except to tell you how sympathetic I find Tiran to be.

i come across so many cool story's that i don't have time to reed for.
like all of them this one go's on my reed later list as number 83.

Not a bad problem to have if you ask me.
-fluttershy

4550575 Really? Then why'd you read all the way through to chapter 17?

4551692 how do the pony know what there doing to the jet? also why is he putting up with there shit

4552283

Be more specific.

Well, I'll try to answer as best I can.

Flicker is the son of Aria, an engineering genius, and has inherited her intelligence, giving him more insight into the workings of complex machines than most.

As for "putting up with THEIR shit"; if you're talking about Tiran, he's a pilot and an officer, not a hardened soldier. He's used to observing things from afar and not used to people under a certain rank telling him what to do or getting attitude with him--barring a few exceptions. Add this to the fact that he is in a completely foriegn land and universe--surrounded by beings that, to his logic, should not exist--where people (or ponies) are treating him as if he's inexperienced (and he is in this situation), then yes, he will be taking some shit in his general confusion as he attempts to deal with his unique situation.

"He's presumed dead."

Honestly, I'm half expecting James to actually not be dead somehow and make a reappearance.

What's with the sporadic uploading and then uploading in bursts?

I assume you work somewhere where you go away from the internet for a bit.

Despite that, amazing as always

So Jackson is dead, Blackjack is a bad guy now, Tiran is having visions of James.

Rushing the story now are we, i really dont know what to say i fell as if the story changed drastically from the last 2 and not for the better if i must say but i will still read and hope that this all makes sense in the end for i love the the last 2.
Please dont mess it up...

"Why do you sound so much like a real..." Sparks gestured at Tiran's body while he searched for the word, "...person?"
"Brother," Li replied, adopting a knowing tone, "you don't know the half of it."

He's Baaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaack!:pinkiecrazy:

4554894 I think its pretty obvious that Jackson is still alive. "Blank" magazines are often marked with blue, hence "this one with a stripe of blue paint sprayed haphazardly on." + "There, you should be safe in there." Blackjack is probably pulling off some kind of mind twisting double (or triple or quadnipple)agent espionage mission.

4560780
Yeah i can tell that he is playing something here but not for the good guys Blackjack is playing his own game here.But i still think Jackson is dead due to a two reasons:
1.''Jackson collapsed in his chair, limp as it slowly rolled backwards from the force of the impacts''.
Blank bullets or not for a bullet to knock someone back that hard it needs power and not to mention they wet re fired from a revolver that hit him right in the area where the heart is, and that would be more then enough force to cause massive internal damage (Personal experience)
2.He's bleeding, no mater alive or not he would die of blood loss in a few hours unless someone saved him

But hell ill take your word for it and hold hope for some reason of him being alive.

You know this story was interesting to me when it was about a pilot stranded here looking to fix his ship and get back home. Now we've added stuff from the previous stories (that didn't really interest me) and it seems to be heading in their direction. I'll give it a couple chapters but I may take this off my follow list.

4561895

If he was wearing a ballistic vest, you could still be injured badly from close range gun fire. No, the chair-bound warrior is still kicking. I just have to boggle over what plans Blackjack has as hinted by 4560780

The denial is strong in this one.

Realistically, humans are probably one of the most amazing creatures when it comes to being able of ignoring the truth even if its dangling right in front of their noses.

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