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Time Reaper


Greetings from Venezuela, I don't expect to do much here, I just got a few stories in my head and wanted write them here, I hope you like them. I take Commissions and can get Ko-Fi donations.

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History is one of the most powerful things known to all living kind, it connects the past with the future through the today and it connect the lives of figures that, otherwise, would never know each other.

On one side, there's the stories of six mares that lost their identity in a world that must now face the realization of another entire especies existing and now must try to understand what kind of world they have been living this whole time.

On the other side, six queens must face the changes brought to them by the mistakes of their past and see how they can survive in this new changing world as foes both inside and outside their species are trying to take the lead around what changelings must do.

Come and see the story of how two worlds collide and twist their fates in a direction that will change history forever.








The story won't cover anything beyond season four or Equestria Girls. Anything beyond that will either be erased or changed to fit into this story, my apologies for those who wanted to see a character that existed from any part of the mentioned cannon on this story.

Character tags may be changed as the story progresses.

Chapters (20)
Comments ( 48 )

Diamantis...you magnificent bitch, I read your BOOK!

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Well, now I know what's your favorite part of this story so far. Glad to know you like her.

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She certainly comes across as one of the more intelligent Changelings(which is more than I can say about Chrysalis).

I liked the first two chapters. This one though? Changeling infighting is a nice idea, but this is Changeling Queen *insert name* making ponies into changelings and something. and it had to be this underhoofed method as well. I'm out.

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Oh, this is just one part of it. It's completely related to the other side of the story and it's a result of the events happening on the other side (the queens infighting)

The same way, the things happening on this story are going to have repercussions on the other side.

Don't think that this it's going to be as simple as it looks like.

I mean, if you think about it, there's so far three potential villains on this story and all of them have repercussions on both sides.

Good to see the characters learning from past mistakes.

Hahaa! U made a changeling fic, cool!

I really like the story of the queens, really liked does two chapters. Really loving those two, Valeris and Fortis (though I think Fortis took the death of her mother and sister well :rainbowlaugh:) and love how U showed us Anidis, really want to know more about her. The changelings having congress of some sort was a good idea aswell.

Valeris was giving me the impression of a very serious, tough and smart changeling queen but I felt like the way she handled the situation of Diamantis didn't fit her character imo, I dunno. I think she could've avoided this whole trouble. But we'll see how it progress in the next chapter.

Keep up the good work my friend! U get a like and a spot inma 'cool shit' folder :rainbowlaugh:

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Yes I did, as mentioned in the editor's note of chapter 1, I wanted to make a changeling fic but the original draft its way too long so I decided to recycle one character (Anidis under a different name) into this one. It's becoming one of my favorite fics to write as well. Oh, Fortis took "well" the death of her mother and sister for a reason, though don't expect them to see them soon. Oh, I have plans for Anidis but i won't say what. Thanks, it took me a while to think the changeling congress.

I know it look sudden (which is why even Fortis got shocked) but remember that in Chapter 1 & 2 you saw what Valeris was thinking. You didn't see what she was thinking now but you'll see soon.

Thank you for the compliment and the folder placement, I'll try to deliver soon.

They were no fools, it was impossible that this changelings wouldn't try to use Twilight as a mean to influence them in some way, and it was that why Celestia decided to take the lead here.

Yet you have no problem doing the same.

Bout time you updated, this was an interesting chapter.

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Thank you, what did you find the most interesting?

Would the changelings really tell them if the transformation could be stopped or reversed?
And why would they even try it?

I still feels to me that Celestia sold them out and everyone just accepts it.🤔

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Would they? That's the point of the deal, so Twilight can research it on her own.

Why would they? Spoilers, but I already dropped a hint in a previous chapter.

Pretty good so far on chapter 1.

I wonder how they would react to seeing Queens Twilight and Rainbow Dash from Law Abiding Pony’s Hive Series.

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What is that, if I may ask?

BTW, what is your opinion in the encounter between Anidis and Valeris? You know, curious...

What’s is you halloween fic is about?

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Still working on it but I'll release it on October 31st. If you want to get an idea of how I write them, you can check my previous one here.

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What’s the story be a about?

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I'll pick a ghost of my country (Venezuela) and ponify it.

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Here it is, in case you are interested. Now, I plan to update this one again once I read all the stories I stopped reading.

The return of the Crystal Empire, the murder of Truth Voice, the Equestrian Financiers and the Great Council of the Queens. All of this events would be what would soon change the fate of the world in a way never before seen.

the murder of Truth Voice...
sudden enlightment
Truth Voice ... murder -O_O onononononoonnnnnnnn! No!
Please don't kill Applejack :(

I couldn't even finish the chapter. Sorry. :(

It just feels very... I dunno. Amateurish in a bad way? I'd consider an editor.

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No, this is a time jump, to the past, with the events being told by an omniscient narrator. Next chapter will be in the present.

In how many chapters do Twilight sparkle, Rainbow Dash, Rarity, and Fluttershy's Changeling features became more noticeable? Also did you proof read the chapter before you posted it?

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In how many chapters do Twilight sparkle, Rainbow Dash, Rarity, and Fluttershy's Changeling features became more noticeable?

In previous chapters it has been shown that both Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy are losing feathers, Rarity is growing fangs and Twilight's eyes are changing. This is actually the first time when Applejack's and Pinkie Pie's changes have been openly shown.

Granted, those aren't the only changes that will be shown either for them or the other ponies but that'll be shown in future chapters.

Also did you proof read the chapter before you posted it?

I did read it again to fix any grammar issue I could find but I am aware they may be more. My apologies for the inconveniences. Would you like to help me on the writing of this chapters?

Celestia forbid she actually befriends the Cutie Mark Crusaders.

I'm not the only one smiling at this picture in amusement right?

“It’s nice to see us all gathered here, once more, to deliberate on such important issues. I can still remember how so many years ago we had so much opposition to this project, we were told that peace wouldn’t last even a year, that we would have a new civil war in less than 6 months even” -. As she was talking, Cerebelis’ face started to grin with satisfaction, as if she knew who were listening to her. – “Then, the predictionist started to claim that peace wouldn’t last two years, then three, then they started to say that Valeris wouldn’t be reelected, they then started to say that Valeris would doom our economy, our society, our secrecy, even that she would betray us for the invader. But look at us here, almost ten years later of peace, a strong economy, a society capable of adapting beyond measure, a queen holding her oath to protect us and, my personal favorite” -, she said with complete pleasure as she wanted to put the salt on the wound, - “the one queen these predictionist were claiming as the one who would save us from catastrophe, ended up being the one revealing us to the outside world. My, isn’t irony one of the greatest joys in life?”

BURNED!!!!

The story is supposed to be told from two points of view but it's very heavy on the changelings side and very light on the ponies side.
The changelings convert 30 ponies but ignoring that the mane 6 were among the 30 converted they were rescued but the transformation had already begun and continues outside of the cocoon.
It can be stopped (they are told it can't) but it can't be reversed (twi could find a way but practically that almost never happens in these fics) and they must be under this queen that transformed them they have a choice of some kind but IIUC it's just stay under the queen that kidnapped them or die as such celestia has convinced them to agree to these terms.
The terms include that they won't kidnap any more ponies and we find out later that they have rules against forcible conversion but it didn't come up in the initial agreement and that seems like one of the very first things that should have been discussed, like a step above the kidnapping. Their conversion can't be stopped? Well then it better not happen to any more ever again (without permission) non-negotiable.
The changeling never appears to show any remorse for what was done to them not even the violation of the changelings own laws, passing it of that she wasn't informed the proper way to do it. It's actually much more believable that this is a much larger plot and this was all completely intentional and it was going to come up later in the story than for her to just think all of that was ok for her to do.
A lot of that bothers me because things weren't even considered like celestia could have at least considered refusing to allow the changeling to keep her subjects and them just handled their conversion as equestrian citizens.
As even in limbo without the protection of a hive they are still equestrian citizens that should be her responsibility even if they are no longer ponies.
There does not appear to be any hive mind or anything that would justify them being permanently bound to the queen. I understand celestia views this as an opportunity but like others have already mentioned it feels like she just sold them out without much consideration.
Likewise the converted ponies themselves are entirely too accepting of this all happening to them it's not just that they are slowly transforming into changelings it's that they are transforming into changelings and have been told oh yeah you serve your kidnapper now, forever and their just like ok.
The ponies don't get enough screen time like analyzing the transformative wax should have been a high priority for the twilight and the diarchs yet by the point the story was abandoned she hadn't even started on it yet.

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The story hasn't been abandoned. This just has been a very harsh year for me.

Yes, I know the story is very sided with the changelings, I was planning to get into the ponies after this arc was done (technically, the official finale of the first arc was Fortis' coronation, and this meeting with the High Queens is just a transition for the next arc, which should start to get more ponies involved) and, to get you an idea of how it would go, if you read the end part of the two chapters of the negotiations between Valeris and Celestia, it describes the next main arcs from the two sides' perspectives, it's just that, again, I had to deal with the coronation and the deal itself.

The other reason why I wasn't showing the ponies' perspectives yet, was because of the models I was using as templates for this world. While the changeling government form was based around a sort of Republic (two legislatives, no official ruler) the Ponies is more based on the British style of government (Parliamentary Monarchy) which I wasn't so familiar with when I started to write this story. I kinda am more familiar with it now, but I still have to write the chapters involving the ponies.

Other plot points being mentioned, such as:

It can be stopped (they are told it can't) but it can't be reversed (twi could find a way but practically that almost never happens in these fics) and they must be under this queen that transformed them they have a choice of some kind but IIUC it's just stay under the queen that kidnapped them or die as such celestia has convinced them to agree to these terms.

we find out later that they have rules against forcible conversion but it didn't come up in the initial agreement and that seems like one of the very first things that should have been discussed, like a step above the kidnapping.

A lot of that bothers me because things weren't even considered like celestia could have at least considered refusing to allow the changeling to keep her subjects and them just handled their conversion as equestrian citizens.
As even in limbo without the protection of a hive they are still equestrian citizens that should be her responsibility even if they are no longer ponies.

There does not appear to be any hive mind or anything that would justify them being permanently bound to the queen.

Likewise the converted ponies themselves are entirely too accepting of this all happening to them it's not just that they are slowly transforming into changelings it's that they are transforming into changelings and have been told oh yeah you serve your kidnapper now, forever and their just like ok.

Are spoilers, especially the hive mind, the legal limbo and the conversion wax. Again, I had to familiarize more with the British government system before getting on it first.

Thanks for much of the criticism and pointing out some of the issues with the story, like the first draft of the deal between Celestia and Valeris (again, this deal isn't even official, since it hasn't been ratified by any government, just a thing made to keep both sides with somethign to work at) and the "she didn't know" vs "in reality it was a long term plan" because, if I have to explain this kind of stuff in the comment section, then I did a poor writing on the story.

I'll take this into consideration when writing the next chapters.

As I see what I have to cover, the longer this story is looking like. And to think I was planning to finish this in 20 chapters, more or less. Now it looks like I'm not even close to the midpoint of this story, heck, not even the official next arc.

Twi is going to be her mate isn't she...

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I'll cut that theory right away, no, Twilight won't be Diamantis' mate.

Granted, I've been trying to think comedic skits of Diamantis trying to find a suitable male but, due to her age, they feel uncomfortable to just think about. As for WHO would be the definitive mate, still thinking about it, the story will be very long in itself, so I think I have plenty of time for that.

>Besides, there's no way she can make it any worse than Chrysalis has already done to us."
" there's no way she can make it any worse"

*Ominous laughter*
SHE SAID THAT PHRASE!

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Or the stupidest
Just take it and do it with Twilight and company.... It's going to be fun

Oh, no! Just not CAHL! ...
and what is it?

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They will be relevant in the future, so I´m mentioning them so you know about them,

Ladies and gentlemen! We place bets where the Cerebelis hive is!

I bet.... to the Everfree forest, the ruins of the castle of two sisters!

Queen Luxis! Lady of the High Council The caretaker of the Crystal Empire!!

That's just the King of Sombra does not need competitors....

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Don't forget to decipher the names of organizations!
For example, you can understand that the first word is changeling, and then?

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Secret for now, you'll see soon.

A little joke

Expect in the next episodes!

WHAT DOES IT MEAN THAT THE DISCORD STATUE IS MISSING?!

-I am the King of Sombra, the lord of the Crystal Empire, how dare you stand in my way, you pathetic bug?!
-I am Queen Luxis! The changeling Queen of the Frozen North! And I will not let you take away the hope of my subjects again!

-AAAAAAaaaaaaaa!
-What happened my queen?!
-I had a nightmare.... about rainbow changelings
-Oh my God! What a terrifying nightmare!

Twilight has become.... A royal changeling? How?

What? Were changelings already living in Ponyville, in secret from other changelings?

Pinkie, stop walking on the ceiling

By the way, how can the lack of love affect changelings?
In one story, for example, changelings, if they did not feed on love, began to lose their identity... IT'S CREEPY!

And how dangerous is it for changelings for you?

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